Language— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문장 구조와 어휘는 괜찮지만 몇 군데 어색한 표현과 철자/문법 오류가 있습니다. 응답은 간결하게 주제 문장 → 구체적 세부정보 순으로 정리하세요. 예를 들어 ‘for meeting’ → ‘for meetings’, ‘e-mail correspondence’는 좋으나 ‘I use English regularly’ 뒤에 구체적 상황(예: at work)을 추가하면 더 자연스럽습니다. 또한 마지막 문장에서 ‘practice using a language app and take weekly online lessons’의 시제와 연결어를 명확히 하세요(예: currently, and).

Exemplo: I speak three languages. Korean is my native language, and I use English regularly at work for meetings and email correspondence. I am also learning Japanese because I plan to travel to Japan soon, so I practise with a language app and take weekly online lessons.

Sugestão: 다양한 아이디어를 제시했지만 여러 문장에 오타와 어색한 어휘 사용(예: ‘running a foreign language’, ‘sub sustained’, ‘regular delivery practice’)이 있어 이해를 방해합니다. 명확한 주제 문장 후 이유를 순차적으로 제시할 때 연결어(for example, additionally)를 사용하세요. 또한 각 이유를 더 구체적인 예시로 뒷받침하면 점수가 올라갑니다.

Exemplo: Yes, I think learning a foreign language is challenging because it involves more than just grammar and vocabulary. For example, you also need to adapt to different cultural habits and expressions. Additionally, it requires sustained motivation and regular speaking practice, ideally with native speakers, to achieve fluency.

Sugestão: 응답에 많은 어휘 오류와 문법적 실수가 있습니다(‘learn friends’, ‘talk to cha chefs chefs’, ‘experience the question’). 질문에 직접 답하는 주제 문장(Yes/No 또는 I would like to...)을 유지하되, 이유를 구체적이고 논리적으로 설명하세요. 불필요한 반복을 피하고 명확한 단어(chef, cuisine, museums, culture 등)를 사용하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to learn French in the future because France is famous for its cuisine and arts. I often visit restaurants and museums with friends, so learning French would help me understand menus, speak with chefs, and enjoy the culture more deeply.

Sugestão: 이유가 명확하고 목적과 연결되어 있어 좋습니다. 다만 몇몇 어휘/구문(‘immigration pro procedures’)의 오타와 연결어 사용을 다듬으면 더 자연스럽습니다. 문장 사이에 접속사(for example, and)로 흐름을 부드럽게 하고, 직업 관련 요구사항에 대한 구체적 예(예: radio communication, ICAO phraseology)를 추가하면 설득력이 증가합니다.

Exemplo: I am learning English because I plan to move to Canada, so I need it for immigration procedures and everyday communication. Also, I want to become an air traffic controller, so strong English skills will help me communicate with pilots over the radio and pass professional exams.

× I can speak 3 languages.

✓ I can speak three languages.

Use words for numbers one through nine in writing instead of digits; not strictly grammar but style. Also 'languages' is correct plural. Suggest writing 'three' in full for formality.

× I use English regularly for meeting, especially in international meetings and e-mail correspondence.

✓ I use English regularly in meetings, especially in international meetings and in e-mail correspondence.

Use the preposition 'in' with 'meetings' and include 'in' before 'e-mail correspondence' to show manner or medium. Also make 'meeting' plural when referring generally.

× I practice using a language app and take weekly online lessons.

✓ I practice using a language app and take weekly online lessons.

Sentence is grammatically correct; present simple is appropriate for habitual actions. No change needed.

× I think running a foreign language is challenging because it requires not only grammar and vocabulary but also adapting to different habits and cultural norms.

✓ I think learning a foreign language is challenging because it requires not only grammar and vocabulary but also adapting to different habits and cultural norms.

Use 'learning' rather than 'running' when referring to acquiring a language. 'Learning' correctly expresses the process.

× It also demands sub sustained motivation, regular delivery practice and opportunities to speak with native speakers to become fluent.

✓ It also demands sustained motivation, regular deliberate practice and opportunities to speak with native speakers to become fluent.

Remove erroneous 'sub' and replace 'delivery practice' with 'deliberate practice' which is the correct collocation meaning focused practice. This fixes word choice errors and makes the phrase clear.

× Will you learn other languages in the future?

✓ Will you learn other languages in the future?

Question is grammatically correct and uses future modal appropriately. No change needed.

× I would like to learn friends in the future because France is renowned for its cuisine and arts.

✓ I would like to learn French in the future because France is renowned for its cuisine and the arts.

'Friends' is incorrect word choice; should be 'French' (the language). Also add definite article 'the' before 'arts' for natural English. This fixes mistaken pronoun/word choice.

× I often go to restaurants and museum with friends, so learning the language would help me understand menus, talk to cha chefs chefs and experience the question more deeply.

✓ I often go to restaurants and museums with friends, so learning the language would help me understand menus, talk to chefs and experience the culture more deeply.

Use plural 'museums' to match 'restaurants'. Remove repeated word 'chefs' and fix 'cha' to nothing; use 'chefs'. Replace 'question' with 'culture' which fits context. These are pluralization and word choice corrections.

× Why do you learn English?

✓ Why are you learning English?

When asking about an ongoing plan or reason for study, present continuous 'are you learning' is more natural than simple present 'do you learn'. Use present continuous for activities in progress or planned changes.

× I learn English because I plan to move to Canada, so it's necessary for immigration pro procedures and everyday communication there.

✓ I am learning English because I plan to move to Canada, so it's necessary for immigration procedures and everyday communication there.

Use 'am learning' (present continuous) for ongoing action. Remove 'pro' which is extraneous and keep 'immigration procedures'. This fixes pronoun/word misuse and tense.

× Also, I want to become an air traffic controller, therefore strong English skills will help me communicate with pilots and pass professional exams.

✓ Also, I want to become an air traffic controller; therefore, strong English skills will help me communicate with pilots and pass professional exams.

Use appropriate punctuation and a connective adverb 'therefore' with a semicolon or start a new sentence. Adding commas around 'therefore' clarifies sentence structure and improves flow.