Birthday— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer needs to be more structured and clear. Start with a direct response, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid grammatical errors and redundancy. For example, say "On my birthday, all my guests come to my home to celebrate with me, and I feel very excited about the gifts they bring."

Exemplo: On my birthday, all my guests come to my home to celebrate with me, and I feel very excited about the gifts they bring. We usually have a party with food and music, which makes the day very special.

Sugestão: Your answer should be in past tense and more coherent. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details. For example, "When I was young, I used to distribute chocolates to my teachers and classmates at school. Also, I was happy because it was the only day I was allowed to wear traditional clothes."

Exemplo: When I was young, I used to distribute chocolates to my teachers, principal, and classmates at school. Moreover, I was very happy because it was the only day I was allowed to wear traditional clothes.

Sugestão: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Please complete your sentences and explain why celebrating your birthday is important. Use linking words to improve coherence. For example, "Yes, it is important for me to celebrate my birthday because it is the only day I get to spend quality time with my family and relatives."

Exemplo: Yes, it is important for me to celebrate my birthday because it is the only day I get to spend quality time with my family and relatives. This makes me feel loved and happy.

Sugestão: Your answer is unclear and lacks specific information. Please clarify whose birthday is most important and provide cultural context. Use linking words for coherence. For example, "In China, the most important birthday to celebrate is the Lunar New Year, which is considered the start of a new year rather than an individual's birthday."

Exemplo: In China, the most important celebration related to birthdays is the Lunar New Year, which marks the beginning of a new year. People celebrate it with family gatherings, traditional food, and various customs.

× We do many things on my birthday, like on my birthday all guests are.

✓ We do many things on my birthday, like all guests come to my home.

The phrase 'all guests are' is incomplete and incorrect. The correct structure is 'all guests come' to indicate their arrival. This is a 'There be issue' because the sentence lacks a proper verb to express existence or presence.

× Come to my home and celebrated and celebrate my birthday with them and I am very exciting about the gifts that they were. Taken for.

✓ They come to my home and celebrate my birthday with me, and I am very excited about the gifts that they have taken for me.

The verbs 'celebrated' and 'celebrate' are inconsistently used; 'celebrate' should be in present tense to match habitual action. 'I am very exciting' is incorrect; it should be 'I am very excited' to express feeling. 'They were taken for' is incorrect; it should be 'they have taken for me' to indicate possession. This involves past tense and adjective usage errors.

× When I was young, I do many things on my birthday personally.

✓ When I was young, I did many things on my birthday personally.

The sentence refers to past time ('When I was young'), so the verb should be in past tense 'did' instead of present tense 'do'. This is a 'Present tense issue'.

× I have to go in school to distribute.

✓ I have to go to school to distribute.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; the correct preposition to indicate movement towards a place is 'to'. This is an 'Incorrect use of prepositions' error.

× Chocolates to the teacher, principal, students and many more.

✓ Chocolates to the teacher, principal, students, and many more people.

The phrase 'many more' is incomplete; it should specify 'many more people' to be clear. Also, adding a comma before 'and' improves clarity. This is a 'Singular and plural issue' related to quantifiers.

× And very happy on my birthday that this is the only day that I allowed to wear a traditional.

✓ And I am very happy on my birthday because this is the only day that I am allowed to wear traditional clothes.

The sentence lacks a subject and verb ('I am'), and 'allowed' needs auxiliary 'am' to form passive voice. 'A traditional' is incomplete; it should be 'traditional clothes'. This is an 'Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs' and 'Sentence structure errors' issue.

× Well, it is very important for me to celebrate my birthday becauses it is the only day that I.

✓ Well, it is very important for me to celebrate my birthday because it is the only day that I celebrate with my family and my relatives.

The sentence is incomplete and 'becauses' is a typo for 'because'. The modal verb 'can' or 'do' is missing to complete the idea. This is a 'Modal verb usage' and 'Sentence structure errors' issue.

× Celebrate with my family and my. Plasmids. That is why I like and this is the only day that.

✓ Celebrate with my family and my relatives. That is why I like it, and this is the only day that...

'Plasmids' is incorrect; the correct word is 'relatives'. Also, the sentence is incomplete and lacks proper pronouns and conjunctions. This is an 'Incorrect use of pronouns' and 'Sentence structure errors' issue.

× As a student in China, I know about their culture to celebrate.

✓ As a student in China, I know about their culture of celebration.

The phrase 'culture to celebrate' is incorrect; it should be 'culture of celebration' to express the idea properly. This is a 'Sentence structure errors' issue.

× The most important to celebrate in China is Rih Take, whose birthday is in July, August.

✓ The most important celebration in China is the Dragon Boat Festival, which occurs in June or July.

'Rih Take' is unclear and likely incorrect. The sentence structure is awkward. Providing a correct example and proper sentence structure improves clarity. This is a 'Sentence structure errors' issue.