Birthday— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly stating your practice and reason, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Exemplo: I usually don't celebrate my birthday because, according to my religion, it is considered Haram. However, I try to fast on that day as part of my religious practice.

Sugestão: Your answer has some grammar and clarity issues. To improve, use correct verb tenses and provide specific details with linking words to make your answer coherent and natural.

Exemplo: When I was young, I used to do exciting things like wearing new clothes. Also, my parents would cook special meals for my birthday, and I received many kinds of gifts.

Sugestão: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to express your opinion clearly with correct grammar and use linking words to explain your reasons.

Exemplo: No, I don't think celebrating birthdays is important for me because, as I mentioned before, it is considered Haram in my religion. As a Muslim, I find it an inconvenient occasion, so I prefer to spend the day quietly.

Sugestão: Your answer is unclear and repetitive. To improve, directly answer the question and provide a reason or opinion with clear structure and vocabulary.

Exemplo: I don't think any birthday is more important to celebrate in China because I personally don't enjoy celebrating birthdays.

× Basically I didn't do it usually nothing because in our religious it's Haram for celebrate my birthday celebrate our birthday and that's why I usually don't nothing but I try to do fast in the religious it's.

✓ Basically, I usually don't do anything because in our religion it's Haram to celebrate my birthday or our birthdays, and that's why I usually don't do anything, but I try to fast as part of the religion.

The original sentence incorrectly uses past tense 'didn't do' with 'usually', which indicates habitual action and requires present tense. Also, 'celebrate' should be in the infinitive form after 'Haram to'. The phrase 'don't nothing' is a double negative and should be corrected to 'don't do anything'. The sentence structure is also improved for clarity.

× When I was young I do something exciting work like I I wear new clothes and my parents cooked for new days for my birthday.

✓ When I was young, I did something exciting like wearing new clothes, and my parents cooked for several days for my birthday.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. 'Do' should be 'did' to match the past time frame. 'Wear' should be in the gerund form 'wearing' after 'like'. 'Cooked for new days' is unclear; 'cooked for several days' is more appropriate.

× Many kind of gift they give to me.

✓ Many kinds of gifts were given to me.

'Many kind' is incorrect; it should be 'many kinds' to indicate plural. Also, 'gift' should be plural 'gifts'. The sentence is better in passive past tense to match the context.

× No, I don't think it's important to celebrate birthday occasion because as I say before that that it's harm in our religious.

✓ No, I don't think it's important to celebrate birthday occasions because, as I said before, it is considered harmful in our religion.

The phrase 'as I say before' should be past tense 'as I said before'. 'Birthday occasion' should be plural 'birthday occasions' to generalize. 'It's harm' is incorrect; it should be 'it is considered harmful'. 'Religious' is an adjective; the noun 'religion' is correct here.

× As a Muslim, I think it's a very inconvenient occasion for me and at that day I like to spend my time.

✓ As a Muslim, I think it's a very inappropriate occasion for me, and on that day, I like to spend my time quietly.

'Inconvenient' is not the correct adjective here; 'inappropriate' fits better. 'At that day' should be 'on that day'. Adding 'quietly' clarifies the intended meaning.

× I don't like to celebrate any birthday and I think I don't have any important, most important for celebrate birthday and that's it.

✓ I don't like to celebrate any birthdays, and I don't think any birthday is important to celebrate, that's it.

'Any birthday' should be plural 'any birthdays' to generalize. The phrase 'I don't have any important, most important for celebrate birthday' is unclear and ungrammatical; it is corrected to 'I don't think any birthday is important to celebrate' for clarity and correctness.