Birthday— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 侬个回答里有点重复，讲法也不够自然。侬可以直接讲侬现在点过生日，原因也讲清楚。用连词让句子更流畅。

Exemplo: Usually, I used to have a birthday party with my friends, but recently I prefer to stay at home because parties can be expensive. However, my best friends still give me presents, which makes me happy.

Sugestão: 侬回答有点重复“invite, invite”，句子结构不够清晰。侬应该直接说过去的习惯，细节要具体，避免重复。

Exemplo: When I was young, my parents always organized birthday parties for me. I invited my friends, and we enjoyed eating cake together. They usually gave me presents, which I appreciated a lot.

Sugestão: 侬回答里有语法错误和重复词，表达不够清楚。侬要用简单明了的句子表达观点，并用连词连接原因。

Exemplo: I used to think celebrating my birthday was very important because it was fun to have parties and eat cake. However, now as a teenager, I feel it's less important since I have many other responsibilities.

Sugestão: 侬回答有语法错误，表达不够流畅，词汇使用不准确。侬要用正确的句子结构，清楚表达传统习俗和原因。

Exemplo: In China, the most important birthdays to celebrate are those of grandparents because they are the oldest family members. People often cook noodles for them as a symbol of long life. Parents' birthdays are also important due to the value of filial piety in Chinese culture.

× Well, I used to have a birthday party and invited my friends to celebrate birthday with me.

✓ Well, I used to have a birthday party and invite my friends to celebrate my birthday with me.

The phrase 'used to' is followed by the base form of the verb, so 'invite' should be used instead of 'invited'. Also, 'celebrate birthday' is missing a possessive pronoun; it should be 'celebrate my birthday'.

× But in the recent year I think that is a big cost.

✓ But in recent years I think that is a big cost.

The phrase 'in the recent year' is incorrect; it should be 'in recent years' to indicate a general recent time period. Also, 'a big cost' is acceptable but 'too costly' might be more natural.

× So now I don't have a birthday party but I think I would like to stay in and my best friends would like to give me the birthday present.

✓ So now I don't have a birthday party, but I think I would like to stay in and my best friends would like to give me birthday presents.

'The birthday present' should be plural 'birthday presents' as friends usually give multiple presents or gifts. Also, a comma is needed before 'but' to separate clauses.

× Well, as I said when I was younger, my mom and dad would like to have a birthday party with me and every time I would like to invite, invite my friends to my birthday party and they give me some present.

✓ Well, as I said when I was younger, my mom and dad would have a birthday party with me and every time I would invite my friends to my birthday party and they gave me some presents.

'Would like to' expresses desire, but here it should be simple past or habitual past 'would have' and 'would invite'. Also, 'give' should be past tense 'gave' to match past context. 'Some present' should be plural 'some presents'.

× We have cake just like this.

✓ We had cake just like this.

Since the context is past, 'have' should be 'had'. Also, 'cake' is uncountable and correct here.

× I used to think it is very important, you know, as a child I thought having birthday party and eating some cakes is very chewful, but but now as a teenager, I have to say I think it's not so important because I have a lot of things to do and I have a lot of segments to do I.

✓ I used to think it was very important, you know, as a child I thought having a birthday party and eating some cake was very cheerful, but now as a teenager, I have to say I think it's not so important because I have a lot of things to do and a lot of assignments to do.

The tense should be consistent in past: 'used to think it was', 'having a birthday party', 'eating some cake' (cake is uncountable), 'cheerful' is the correct adjective. 'Segments' is incorrect; likely 'assignments' or 'tasks' is intended. Also, remove repeated 'but' and fix sentence structure.

× Well, in tradition that must be your grandparents, because your grandparents are the most eldest people are in your family and people usually cook some noodles for them because that is symbol of long life.

✓ Well, traditionally that must be your grandparents, because your grandparents are the eldest people in your family and people usually cook some noodles for them because that is a symbol of long life.

'In tradition' should be 'traditionally'. 'Most eldest' is incorrect; 'eldest' already implies superlative. 'Are' is unnecessary after 'people'. 'That is symbol' needs an article: 'a symbol'.

× And your parents birthday party is very important because the piety is a very important part part of Chinese capital.

✓ And your parents' birthday party is very important because piety is a very important part of Chinese culture.

'Parents birthday' needs possessive apostrophe: 'parents''. 'The piety' should be 'piety' without 'the'. 'Part part' is a repetition error. 'Chinese capital' is incorrect; likely 'Chinese culture' is intended.