Birthday— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct by avoiding redundancy and incomplete sentences. Use linking words properly and complete your thoughts clearly. For example, instead of 'and all those gifts and', complete the sentence with a proper ending. Also, avoid repeating 'birthday' unnecessarily.

Exemplo: On my birthday, I usually go out for dinner with my friends. We celebrate together, and my friends often surprise me with beautiful cakes and thoughtful gifts.

Sugestão: Focus on using correct verb tenses and complete sentences. Avoid incomplete phrases like 'and we'll celebrate with.' Also, use singular/plural forms correctly, for example, 'birthday logos' should be 'birthday decorations' or 'birthday banners.'

Exemplo: When I was a child, I celebrated my birthday with my family, neighbors, and classmates. My family decorated the house with beautiful birthday banners and prepared a pretty cake for the celebration.

Sugestão: Work on sentence clarity and grammar. Avoid repetition like 'I I' and incorrect phrases such as 'everybody as the most important day.' Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Try to express your opinion clearly and concisely.

Exemplo: Yes, I believe celebrating birthdays is very important for everyone, especially for me. It is a special day that comes only once a year, so we should make the most of it and celebrate happily.

Sugestão: Improve sentence structure and grammar by adding missing verbs and articles, for example, 'also very important' should be 'are also very important.' Use linking words to connect ideas better and avoid abrupt sentence endings.

Exemplo: As far as I know, the most important birthday to celebrate in China is that of Mao Zedong, a significant leader in Chinese history. His birthday is remembered because he played a major role in shaping modern China and is still respected by many people. However, traditional festivals like Chinese New Year are also very important and widely celebrated across the country.

× On my birthday, I often go for dinner and enjoy with my friends.

✓ On my birthday, I often go for dinner and enjoy time with my friends.

The verb 'enjoy' requires an object to complete its meaning. The phrase 'enjoy with my friends' is incomplete because 'enjoy' should be followed by a noun or gerund. Adding 'time' after 'enjoy' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× Moreover, we'll celebrate our birthday party and my friend often surprised me with a lot of beautiful cakes as well as all those gifts and.

✓ Moreover, we celebrate our birthday party and my friend often surprises me with a lot of beautiful cakes as well as all those gifts.

The sentence mixes future tense 'we'll celebrate' with present tense 'my friend often surprised'. To maintain consistency and match the habitual action indicated by 'often', present tense should be used: 'we celebrate' and 'my friend often surprises'. Also, the sentence was incomplete and needed correction for clarity.

× When I was a child, I celebrate my birthday with my family as well as all the neighbors and my classmates.

✓ When I was a child, I celebrated my birthday with my family as well as all the neighbors and my classmates.

The phrase 'When I was a child' sets the context in the past, so the verb should be in the past tense. 'Celebrate' should be changed to 'celebrated' to maintain tense consistency.

× Moreover, my family will decorate our house with a beautiful birthday logos and a pretty cake as well, and we'll celebrate with.

✓ Moreover, my family would decorate our house with beautiful birthday logos and a pretty cake as well, and we'd celebrate together.

The use of 'will' is incorrect here because the sentence refers to past habitual actions. 'Would' is the correct modal verb to express habitual past actions. Also, 'logos' should be plural without 'a', and the sentence was incomplete, so 'celebrate with' was corrected to 'celebrate together' for clarity.

× Moreover, my family will decorate our house with a beautiful birthday logos and a pretty cake as well, and we'll celebrate with.

✓ Moreover, my family would decorate our house with beautiful birthday logos and a pretty cake as well, and we'd celebrate together.

The adjective 'beautiful' should agree in number with the noun 'logos'. Since 'logos' is plural, 'beautiful' remains the same but the article 'a' should be removed. The sentence was also incomplete and needed correction for clarity.

× Yes, I definitely think it's very significant for each and individual person, specifically me, because I I consider everybody as the most important day in my life and but they often comes around once in a year.

✓ Yes, I definitely think it's very significant for each individual person, specifically me, because I consider every birthday as the most important day in my life, and it often comes around once a year.

The phrase 'each and individual person' is incorrect; it should be 'each individual person'. The repeated 'I' is a typographical error. 'Everybody' is a pronoun referring to people, but here the subject is 'birthday', so 'every birthday' is correct. 'They often comes' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; 'it often comes' matches the singular subject 'birthday'. Also, 'once in a year' is better expressed as 'once a year'.

× Yes, I definitely think it's very significant for each and individual person, specifically me, because I I consider everybody as the most important day in my life and but they often comes around once in a year.

✓ Yes, I definitely think it's very significant for each individual person, specifically me, because I consider every birthday as the most important day in my life, and it often comes around once a year.

The pronoun 'everybody' is incorrect here because the subject is 'birthday', which is singular. Therefore, 'every birthday' is appropriate. Also, 'they often comes' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; 'it often comes' is correct for singular subject.

× His birthday is remembered because he played a major role in shaping the modern China and still respected by many people.

✓ His birthday is remembered because he played a major role in shaping modern China and is still respected by many people.

The phrase 'still respected by many people' lacks the auxiliary verb 'is' to form the passive voice correctly. Also, 'the modern China' should be 'modern China' without the definite article. The verb 'played' is correctly in past tense.

× However, traditional festivals like Chinese New Year also very important and widely celebrated across the country.

✓ However, traditional festivals like Chinese New Year are also very important and widely celebrated across the country.

The sentence is missing the verb 'are' to link the subject 'traditional festivals' with the adjectives 'very important and widely celebrated'. This is a sentence structure error corrected by adding the verb 'are'.