Birthday— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is a bit unclear and lacks coherence. Try to avoid redundancy like 'first of all' and 'such as firstly'. Also, complete your sentences properly and provide specific details about what you do on your birthday. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Exemplo: On my birthday, I usually wear new clothes and distribute sweets to my friends and family. Additionally, I spend time with them to celebrate and enjoy the day together.

Sugestão: Your answer has some grammatical errors and is a bit long. Use past tense correctly, and try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

Exemplo: When I was young, I used to have a party at a hotel with my friends. They would celebrate my birthday and give me special gifts like watches and clothes, which made me very happy.

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use correct sentence structures. Also, avoid redundancy and provide specific reasons why celebrating birthdays is important to you.

Exemplo: Yes, celebrating my birthday is important because it creates memorable moments. I enjoy sharing photos and videos of the celebration with my family and friends.

Sugestão: Your answer is confusing and contains unclear phrases like 'Hindi, China'. Try to answer directly and clearly. Use proper grammar and avoid repetition. Also, provide specific reasons or examples to support your opinion.

Exemplo: In China, I believe every person's birthday is important because people enjoy celebrating with their family and friends. They often take photos and make videos to remember these special occasions.

× First of all, on my birthday I do many things such as firstly I wear good clothes and some and distribute sweets to my friends and my family members and.

✓ First of all, on my birthday I do many things such as wearing good clothes and distributing sweets to my friends and my family members.

The original sentence incorrectly mixes singular and plural forms and has redundant conjunctions. 'Wear' and 'distribute' should be in the gerund form to match 'do many things such as'. Also, 'some and' is unnecessary and confusing. Using gerunds after 'such as' is grammatically correct and improves clarity.

× When I was young, I give a party to my friends in the host hotel and they celebrate my birthday and give me a special gift such as watch, clothes and many more and I feel very happy with my friends.

✓ When I was young, I gave a party to my friends in the host hotel and they celebrated my birthday and gave me special gifts such as watches, clothes, and many more, and I felt very happy with my friends.

The sentence describes past events, so verbs should be in the past tense. 'Give' should be 'gave', 'celebrate' should be 'celebrated', 'give' should be 'gave', and 'feel' should be 'felt'. Also, 'watch' should be plural 'watches' to match 'gifts'. Correct past tense usage is essential for clear communication of past events.

× When I was young, I give a party to my friends in the host hotel and they celebrate my birthday and give me a special gift such as watch, clothes and many more and I feel very happy with my friends.

✓ When I was young, I gave a party to my friends in the host hotel and they celebrated my birthday and gave me special gifts such as watches, clothes, and many more, and I felt very happy with my friends.

The phrase 'a special gift such as watch, clothes and many more' mixes singular and plural incorrectly. 'Gift' should be plural 'gifts' to match the list, and 'watch' should be plural 'watches'. This ensures agreement between the noun and the examples provided.

× Yes, it is very important for me to celebrate parties on birthday. This is a memorable things and we can remember our birthday when I was celebrated this and always share some photos and videos to our family members and friends.

✓ Yes, it is very important for me to celebrate parties on birthdays. These are memorable things and we can remember our birthdays when I celebrate them and always share some photos and videos with our family members and friends.

'Parties' should be plural to match 'birthdays'. 'This is a memorable things' mixes singular and plural; 'things' is plural, so 'this is' should be 'these are'. 'Our birthday' should be plural 'our birthdays' to match the context. Also, 'when I was celebrated this' is incorrect tense and structure; it should be 'when I celebrate them'. Preposition 'to' should be 'with' when sharing photos and videos.

× Yes, it is very important for me to celebrate parties on birthday. This is a memorable things and we can remember our birthday when I was celebrated this and always share some photos and videos to our family members and friends.

✓ Yes, it is very important for me to celebrate parties on birthdays. These are memorable things and we can remember our birthdays when I celebrate them and always share some photos and videos with our family members and friends.

The preposition 'to' is incorrectly used with 'share'; the correct preposition is 'with' when indicating the people with whom photos and videos are shared.

× Hindi, China All the people's birthday was most important because all the peoples have enjoy on their birthday and celebrate with their friends and family.

✓ In Hindi and China, all people's birthdays are very important because all people enjoy their birthdays and celebrate with their friends and family.

'People's birthday' should be plural 'people's birthdays' to refer to multiple individuals. 'Peoples' is incorrect here; 'people' is the plural of person. 'Have enjoy' is incorrect verb form; it should be 'enjoy'. Also, 'was most important' should be 'are very important' to match plural subject and present tense.

× All the people were most important to celebrate.

✓ For all the people, celebrating birthdays is very important.

The original sentence is unclear and uses past tense 'were' incorrectly. The intended meaning is present importance, so present tense should be used. Also, the sentence structure is awkward; rephrasing improves clarity.