Birthday— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding filler words and redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details using linking words for coherence.

Exemplo: On my birthday, I usually call my mum because she is the only person who gave birth to me. I like to express my appreciation to her for everything she has done. Additionally, we often talk about how we might celebrate together in the future.

Sugestão: Focus on clarity and structure by forming complete sentences and avoiding hesitation. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details about your childhood birthday experiences.

Exemplo: When I was young, I always imagined what birthday gifts I would receive. I looked forward to my favourite presents, especially toys and books, which made my birthdays very exciting.

Sugestão: Improve your answer by using correct grammar and clearer sentence structure. Begin with a direct response, then explain your opinion with specific reasons and linking words to make your answer coherent.

Exemplo: When I was young, I cared a lot about my birthday because I wanted others to remember it. However, as I grew older and became busier, I realised that celebrating is less important to me now.

Sugestão: Clarify your answer by using accurate vocabulary and grammar. Explain the cultural significance clearly and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

Exemplo: In China, the most important birthday to celebrate is a child's first birthday, known as the 'Zhuazhou' ceremony. During this event, the child grabs objects that symbolize their future interests or career, which holds great cultural significance.

× Uh, in my birthday, I usually call my mom since my mom is the only one person who, uh, born me.

✓ Uh, on my birthday, I usually call my mom since my mom is the only person who, uh, gave birth to me.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to days or dates; 'on' should be used instead. Also, 'born me' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'gave birth to me' to indicate the act of giving birth.

× And then I just want to express my, umm, attitude of the appreciation, appreciating.

✓ And then I just want to express my appreciation.

The phrase 'attitude of the appreciation, appreciating' is awkward and incorrect. 'Appreciation' is a noun that correctly expresses gratitude, so the sentence should simply state 'express my appreciation'.

× When I was young, I would definitely, umm, imagined, uh, about my birthday gift and what I really, umm, looking forward to during my child who are definitely to think about, uh, my best gift to my best birthday gift to the.

✓ When I was young, I would definitely imagine my birthday gift and what I was really looking forward to during my childhood, definitely thinking about my best birthday gift.

The verb 'imagined' should be in the base form 'imagine' after 'would'. 'Looking forward to' requires the past continuous 'was looking forward to' to match the past context. 'During my child' is incorrect; it should be 'during my childhood'. The sentence structure is also corrected for clarity.

× When I was young I would definitely emphasize on my birthday like I were so cared about umm is there anyone care about my birthday and or memorize my birthday?

✓ When I was young, I would definitely emphasize my birthday, like I cared a lot about whether there was anyone who cared about my birthday or remembered it.

The verb 'emphasize' does not require the preposition 'on'. 'I were so cared about' is incorrect; it should be 'I cared a lot about'. 'Memorize' is incorrect in this context; 'remember' is the correct verb to use for recalling dates.

× But when I go out and then I realize umm I become more busy so I don't have time to realize it.

✓ But when I go out, I realise I become busier, so I don't have time to think about it.

The phrase 'more busy' is incorrect; the comparative form is 'busier'. 'Realize it' is vague; 'think about it' better conveys the intended meaning. Also, 'realize' is spelled 'realise' in British English.

× In China, the most popular and important birthday to celebrate is typically the 1st birthday of the child and we can call it a draw, draw or the just like.

✓ In China, the most popular and important birthday to celebrate is typically the first birthday of a child, and we can call it 'Zhuazhou' or something similar.

The phrase 'a draw, draw or the just like' is unclear and incorrect. The correct term is 'Zhuazhou', a traditional Chinese ceremony. Also, 'the child' should be 'a child' to generalize.

× The grab the object ceremony and the celebrations hold the great cultural significance.

✓ The 'grab the object' ceremony and the celebrations hold great cultural significance.

The phrase 'The grab the object ceremony' is awkward; it should be enclosed in quotes as a named ceremony. 'The great cultural significance' should be 'great cultural significance' without 'the' for correct article usage.

× It symbolize the children, girls and the future.

✓ It symbolizes the children, especially girls, and their future.

The verb 'symbolize' should be 'symbolizes' to agree with the singular subject 'It'. Also, the sentence is unclear; adding 'especially girls' and 'their future' clarifies the meaning.