Birthday— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Câu trả lời của bạn nên tự nhiên hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'going out' nên là 'go out'. Bạn cũng nên thêm liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ không cần thiết.

Exemplo: I usually have a big meal with my family, and sometimes I go out with my friends. Of course, I always have a birthday cupcake to celebrate.

Sugestão: Bạn cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu để câu trả lời rõ ràng và dễ hiểu hơn. Hãy sử dụng thì quá khứ đúng cách và tránh những câu không hoàn chỉnh hoặc không rõ nghĩa.

Exemplo: When I was young, I didn't celebrate my birthday with friends. My parents organized parties with many activities like singing and dancing. I remember feeling very happy and excited.

Sugestão: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Hãy tránh những cụm từ không phù hợp như 'should I please' và sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý tưởng. Ngoài ra, nên dùng từ vựng phù hợp hơn để diễn đạt ý kiến cá nhân.

Exemplo: In my opinion, celebrating birthdays is not very important, but if you can afford it, you should celebrate to create happy memories.

Sugestão: Câu trả lời không trả lời đúng câu hỏi và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng không phù hợp. Bạn nên tập trung trả lời câu hỏi về người có sinh nhật quan trọng nhất và sử dụng từ ngữ chính xác, tránh những mô tả không rõ nghĩa.

Exemplo: In China, the most important birthdays to celebrate are those of elders, such as parents and grandparents, because they are highly respected.

× I usually have a big meal with my family or going out with my friends.

✓ I usually have a big meal with my family or go out with my friends.

The verb after 'or' should be in the base form to parallel 'have'. Using 'going' is incorrect here because it breaks parallel structure.

× Of course, I always have a cupcake birthday.

✓ Of course, I always have a birthday cupcake.

The phrase 'cupcake birthday' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'birthday cupcake' to indicate a cupcake for the birthday.

× When I was young, I didn't go uh, with my friends.

✓ When I was young, I didn't go out with my friends.

The verb 'go' needs a complement to complete the meaning. 'Go out' is the correct phrasal verb here.

× I am celebrated birthday party by my parents in their many activities are organized such as singing, dancing.

✓ My parents celebrated my birthday party and organized many activities such as singing and dancing.

The original sentence has incorrect passive voice and structure. It should be active voice with clear subject and verb.

× I remember that I fell out the moon and happiness.

✓ I remember that I was over the moon and very happy.

The phrase 'fell out the moon' is incorrect. The correct idiom is 'over the moon' meaning very happy.

× In my opinion, should I please, birthday is not actually important, but if you have affordable economic condition, you should celebrate the memory your birthday and feel happy.

✓ In my opinion, birthday is not actually important, but if you have an affordable economic condition, you should celebrate your birthday and feel happy.

The modal verb 'should' is misplaced and unnecessary at the start. Also, 'the memory your birthday' is incorrect; it should be 'your birthday'. Articles are missing before 'affordable economic condition'.

× I think the most important to celebrate birthday in China is cake, because cake is indispensable.

✓ I think the most important thing to celebrate on birthdays in China is cake, because cake is indispensable.

The phrase 'the most important to celebrate birthday' is incomplete. It needs a noun like 'thing'. Also, 'celebrate birthday' should be 'celebrate on birthdays'.

× It is circular, simple in the sunny sun and rocky for us.

✓ It is circular, simple, and sweet for us.

The phrase 'simple in the sunny sun and rocky' is unclear and incorrect. Likely intended to describe cake as simple and pleasant; 'sweet' fits better than 'rocky'.