Birthday— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is a bit repetitive and lacks clear structure. Try to start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repeating phrases, and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, keep your answer concise and natural.

Exemplo: On my birthday, I usually host a big party at my home. I invite my friends, family, and relatives, and we all enjoy the celebration together.

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat disorganized and repetitive. Use a clear topic sentence and link your ideas logically. Avoid repeating the same information and try to provide specific details about your childhood birthday celebrations.

Exemplo: When I was young, I used to celebrate my birthday by inviting all my friends to my house. We would blow balloons, enjoy the cake, and have lots of fun together.

Sugestão: Your answer conveys your opinion but has some hesitation and unclear phrases. Try to express your ideas more confidently and clearly, using linking words to connect your reasons.

Exemplo: Yes, I believe it is important to celebrate birthdays because it marks the day we were born. Celebrating allows us to enjoy our special day and create happy memories with loved ones.

Sugestão: Your answer is unclear and repetitive. Avoid repeating phrases and uncertain expressions. Provide a clear opinion with supporting reasons and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

Exemplo: In China, I think people especially celebrate their father's birthday because it shows respect and love for their parents. It is a special occasion for family gatherings and happiness.

× I always give a treat to my friends, do a big party, invite my friends and family members and my relatives all come to my place and we enjoy.

✓ I always give a treat to my friends, have a big party, invite my friends and family members, and my relatives all come to my place and we enjoy.

The phrase 'do a big party' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'have a big party' because 'have' is the appropriate verb collocated with 'party' in this context.

× We enjoy our party over the party.

✓ We enjoy our party at the party.

The preposition 'over' is incorrectly used here; 'at' is the correct preposition to indicate the location or event where the enjoyment happens.

× When I was young, I used to blow, blow balloons and try to have fun and all the children's came to my house and we enjoy.

✓ When I was young, I used to blow balloons and try to have fun, and all the children came to my house and we enjoyed.

The phrase 'all the children's' is incorrect; it should be 'all the children' (plural noun without apostrophe). Also, 'enjoy' should be in past tense 'enjoyed' to match the past context.

× We blow balloons.

✓ We blew balloons.

The verb 'blow' should be in past tense 'blew' to match the past time frame indicated by the question.

× We got the cake.

✓ We got the cake.

This sentence is correct in past tense; no correction needed.

× I used to cut the cake.

✓ I used to cut the cake.

This sentence is correct; 'used to' properly indicates past habitual action.

× That's that's how I used to celebrate my birthday when I was here.

✓ That's how I used to celebrate my birthday when I was here.

The repeated 'that's' is redundant and should be removed for clarity.

× Yeah, of course it's, uh, important to celebrate your birthday because it's a day you were born, you came to this world and, uh, you have to enjoy this because it is your day.

✓ Yeah, of course it's important to celebrate your birthday because it's the day you were born, you came into this world, and you should enjoy it because it is your day.

The phrase 'you have to enjoy this' is better expressed as 'you should enjoy it' to indicate recommendation rather than obligation. Also, 'a day you were born' should be 'the day you were born' for specificity, and 'came to this world' is better as 'came into this world'.

× So that's why I, I prefer you. All the people should have celebrate their birthday and enjoy their day.

✓ So that's why I think all people should celebrate their birthday and enjoy their day.

The phrase 'I prefer you' is incorrect and unclear; it should be 'I think'. Also, 'should have celebrate' is incorrect; it should be 'should celebrate' (modal verb + base verb).

× I think in China every every person enjoy their father's birthday.

✓ I think in China every person enjoys their father's birthday.

The subject 'every person' is singular and requires the verb 'enjoys' (third person singular).

× In my opinion, I think they enjoy their father's birthday because they get happy when their father's on their father's birthday and they enjoy it very well.

✓ In my opinion, I think they enjoy their father's birthday because they get happy when their father is on his birthday and they enjoy it very much.

The phrase 'their father's on their father's birthday' is unclear and incorrect; it should be 'their father is on his birthday'. Also, 'enjoy it very well' is better expressed as 'enjoy it very much'.