Birthday— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer needs to be more clear and structured. Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'and' repeatedly. Use simple sentences and explain your actions clearly. For example, say what you do and why it makes you happy. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

Exemplo: On my birthday, I usually visit a temple because it makes me feel happy and blessed. I also like to do something special for my grandparents to show my love and respect.

Sugestão: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas logically and use correct tenses. Explain clearly what you did for others and why. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Exemplo: When I was young, I liked to help people who were poor and did not have homes or enough food. I felt happy when I could give them medicine or other things they needed.

Sugestão: Your answer shows your opinion but is unclear and contains many filler words. Try to express your ideas clearly and directly. Use linking words to explain why birthdays are important to you.

Exemplo: I think celebrating my birthday is important because it marks a new year in my life. It gives me a chance to reflect on my achievements and set new goals.

Sugestão: Your answer is vague and lacks confidence. Try to give a clear opinion even if you are not from China. Use linking words to explain your reasoning and avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

Exemplo: Although I am not from China, I think grandparents' birthdays are the most important to celebrate because they are respected and loved by the family.

× Since I looked to now, I, I always used to go, uh, board, uh, temple on, on my birthday because it makes me, uh, happy whenever I go to temple and and blessed for me and uh, once time I, I do something for old grand.

✓ Since I was young until now, I have always used to go to the temple on my birthday because it makes me happy whenever I go to the temple and blesses me. Also, once I did something for my old grandparents.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'looked to now' instead of 'was young until now' and mixes tenses improperly. 'Used to go' is correct for past habits, but since the action continues, 'have always used to go' fits better. 'Once time I do' is incorrect; it should be 'once I did' to indicate a past action. Also, 'old grand' is unclear and corrected to 'old grandparents'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× In young I think I can do something for that type of person. They don't have home, they can't afford good health, medicine, food, extra thing. I am I like to do something for them when when I was young and I I own lot of money. It makes me happy and I'm planning.

✓ When I was young, I thought I could do something for those types of people. They didn't have homes, couldn't afford good health care, medicine, food, or extra things. I liked to do something for them when I was young and I owned a lot of money. It made me happy and I was planning to continue.

The sentence incorrectly uses present tense 'I think I can' instead of past tense 'I thought I could' to match the time frame. 'They don't have home' should be 'They didn't have homes' for plural and past tense. 'I am I like' is incorrect; corrected to 'I liked'. 'I own lot of money' should be 'I owned a lot of money' in past tense. The sentence is adjusted for subject-verb agreement and tense consistency.

× In young I think I can do something for that type of person.

✓ When I was young, I thought I could do something for those types of people.

The modal verbs 'can' and 'think' are incorrectly used in present tense for a past context. They should be changed to 'could' and 'thought' respectively to reflect past ability and thought.

× They don't have home, they can't afford good health, medicine, food, extra thing.

✓ They didn't have homes, couldn't afford good health care, medicine, food, or extra things.

The noun 'home' should be plural 'homes' to refer to multiple people. 'Extra thing' should be plural 'extra things'. Also, 'good health' is better expressed as 'good health care' for clarity.

× I am I like to do something for them when when I was young and I I own lot of money.

✓ I liked to do something for them when I was young and I owned a lot of money.

The phrase 'I am I like' is incorrect; it should be 'I liked' to indicate past preference. 'I own' should be 'I owned' to maintain past tense consistency.

× It makes me, uh, happy whenever I go to temple and and blessed for me

✓ It makes me happy whenever I go to the temple and blesses me.

The phrase 'and blessed for me' is incorrect; it should be 'and blesses me' to maintain present tense and correct verb form. Also, 'to temple' should be 'to the temple' to include the definite article.

× I always used to go, uh, board, uh, temple on, on my birthday

✓ I have always used to go to the temple on my birthday

The preposition 'to' is missing before 'the temple'. Also, 'board' is unclear and likely a mispronunciation or error; it is omitted for clarity.

× once time I, I do something for old grand.

✓ Once, I did something for my old grandparents.

'Once time' should be 'Once' or 'One time'. 'I do' should be 'I did' to indicate past action. 'Old grand' is unclear and corrected to 'my old grandparents'.

× I am not belong from China but I saw different types of videos by Chinese people and they they celebrate their birthday and they posted the social media.

✓ I do not belong to China, but I have seen different types of videos by Chinese people where they celebrate their birthdays and post them on social media.

'I am not belong' is incorrect; it should be 'I do not belong'. 'They they' is a repetition error. 'They posted the social media' should be 'they post them on social media'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I don't I'm not sure but I think because I'm not belong from China that's why.

✓ I am not sure, but I think it's because I do not belong to China.

The phrase 'I don't I'm not sure' is incorrect and redundant; corrected to 'I am not sure'. 'I'm not belong' is incorrect; it should be 'I do not belong'. The sentence is rephrased for clarity.