Birthday— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors, such as 'my birthday have two parts' instead of 'my birthday has two parts'. Also, the phrase 'go here with them' is confusing and 'maybe have some no conversations' is unclear. Try to use clearer and more natural expressions, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Exemplo: I usually divide my birthday into two parts. First, I spend time with my friends, chatting about interesting topics and enjoying their company. Then, in the evening, I celebrate with my family at a nice restaurant.

Sugestão: Your answer has several grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases, such as 'go for a work with my friends' and 'this actions were the main in general'. Try to use past tense consistently and provide clearer, more specific details. Also, avoid filler words like 'uh' and use linking words to improve coherence.

Exemplo: When I was young, I usually celebrated my birthday with my family at home. Sometimes, I went to the park or a shopping mall with my friends to have fun and enjoy the day.

Sugestão: Your answer is repetitive and contains awkward phrases like 'this time is overall and general generally for me' and 'I have a great emotions while'. Try to express your ideas more clearly and concisely, using appropriate vocabulary and linking words to connect your points logically.

Exemplo: I think celebrating my birthday is important because it gives me a chance to relax and spend quality time with my family and friends. It is a special day when I can enjoy meaningful conversations and create happy memories.

Sugestão: Your answer shows uncertainty and contains grammatical errors such as 'we we must give him an attention' and 'have great times plenty'. Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. Also, provide a more confident and clear response with relevant vocabulary and linking words.

Exemplo: Although I am not very familiar with Chinese culture, I believe that the birthdays of the eldest family members are the most important. They are usually celebrated with special attention and gatherings to honor their age and wisdom.

× So my birthday have two parts.

✓ So my birthday has two parts.

The subject 'birthday' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' instead of 'have' to agree in number.

× The first part I really like to be with my friends and go here with them, talk with them about interesting themes and maybe have some no conversations.

✓ The first part I really like to be with my friends and go out with them, talk with them about interesting topics and maybe have some conversations.

The phrase 'go here with them' is incorrect; 'go out with them' is more appropriate. Also, 'interesting themes' is better expressed as 'interesting topics', and 'some no conversations' is incorrect; it should be 'some conversations'.

× But on the second part of the day I really like to be with my family and celebrate my birthday in some kind of restaurant.

✓ But in the second part of the day I really like to be with my family and celebrate my birthday at some kind of restaurant.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect with 'part of the day'; 'in' is appropriate. Also, 'in some kind of restaurant' should be 'at some kind of restaurant' to indicate location.

× So when I was young, I really like to, uh, be with my family, sit at home just, or maybe go for a work with my friends to celebrate it in some kind of interesting mall, Yeah, or go with them to the park.

✓ So when I was young, I really liked to be with my family, just sit at home, or maybe go for a walk with my friends to celebrate it in some kind of interesting mall, yeah, or go with them to the park.

The sentence refers to past time ('when I was young'), so the verb 'like' should be in past tense 'liked'. Also, 'go for a work' is incorrect; it should be 'go for a walk'.

× So I think that, uh, this actions were the main in general in my childhood.

✓ So I think that, uh, these actions were the main ones in general in my childhood.

The demonstrative pronoun should be 'these' to agree with plural 'actions'. Also, 'the main' should be 'the main ones' to refer properly to plural 'actions'.

× So As for me, it is really important to celebrate my birthday because it is a special day when I can have a free time.

✓ So as for me, it is really important to celebrate my birthday because it is a special day when I can have free time.

The phrase 'have a free time' is incorrect; 'free time' is uncountable and does not need an article.

× And this time is overall and general generally for me.

✓ And this time is overall and generally special for me.

The original sentence is awkward and unclear. Adding 'special' clarifies the meaning, and 'generally' is correctly used as an adverb modifying the sentence.

× So I can be with my family for the whole day or with friends.

✓ So I can be with my family for the whole day or with my friends.

The pronoun 'friends' should be preceded by 'my' to indicate possession and parallel structure with 'my family'.

× I can have a great conversation as well. I have a great emotions while.

✓ I can have great conversations as well. I have great emotions during that time.

'Conversation' should be plural 'conversations' to match 'great'. 'A great emotions' is incorrect because 'emotions' is plural and does not take 'a'. Also, 'while' is incorrectly used; 'during that time' is clearer.

× So I don't know about the Chinese culture, but I think the oldest member of the family might have the best birthday party because it's very important and he's very old.

✓ So I don't know about Chinese culture, but I think the oldest member of the family might have the best birthday party because it's very important and he is very old.

'Chinese culture' does not need 'the'. Also, 'he's' is acceptable but expanding to 'he is' is clearer in formal speech.

× So we we must give him an attention of the whole day and have great times plenty with him or she.

✓ So we must give him attention for the whole day and have great times with him or her.

'An attention' is incorrect; 'attention' is uncountable and does not take 'an'. 'Plenty' is misplaced; 'have great times' suffices. Also, 'she' should be 'her' as the object pronoun.