Birthday— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more accurate grammatically and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Correct verb forms and vocabulary (e.g., "blow out the candles", "singing"). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: I usually celebrate my birthday with my family because my younger brother and I share the same birthday. We have a small party at home, cut a cake and everyone sings the Happy Birthday song. After that we often eat together and look at photos from past celebrations.

Sugestão: Avoid short vague answers. Give a clear topic sentence about past habits and support with specific details and correct past tense verbs. Use linking words like "usually" or "when I was young" to make it coherent. Fix phrase order and articles ("blowing out candles on a cake"). Limit to 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: When I was young I usually had simple celebrations at home. We would gather as a family, put candles on a cake and blow them out together while someone sang the Happy Birthday song. After that we played games and opened small gifts.

Sugestão: Make your stance clear in the first sentence and use smoother linking words. Correct awkward phrases (e.g., "yes, it is quite important" and "spend quality time"). Provide one specific reason and an example. Keep it concise and natural.

Exemplo: Yes, I think celebrating my birthday is important because it gives me a chance to spend quality time with friends and family. For example, we usually have dinner together and catch up, which is valuable since we are all busy during the year.

Sugestão: Start with a clear opinion even if you are not from China, then give a reason and a brief example. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use precise vocabulary ("parents' birthdays", "respect and gratitude"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Although I'm not Chinese, I would say parents' birthdays are the most important to celebrate because showing respect and gratitude to elders is a key value. For instance, many families organize a special meal or visit their parents to express thanks for their hard work.

× Well I usually celebrate my birthday with my family especially my younger brother because our birthdays is the same day.

✓ Well I usually celebrate my birthday with my family, especially my younger brother, because our birthdays are on the same day.

The noun 'birthdays' is plural and requires the plural verb 'are' (subject-verb agreement). Also use 'on the same day' for when dates match. Suggestion: match plural subjects with plural verbs and use correct preposition for dates.

× We usually have a cake and we will brawl out the candle while everyone singing Happy Birthday song.

✓ We usually have a cake and we blow out the candles while everyone sings the Happy Birthday song.

Use simple present 'blow' for habitual actions instead of 'will brawl'. 'Candles' is plural because cakes often have multiple candles; use 'sings' for third person singular 'everyone'. Include the definite article 'the' before 'Happy Birthday song'. Also correct verb 'blow out' spelling.

× We usually have a cake and we will brawl out the candle while everyone singing Happy Birthday song.

✓ We usually have a cake and we blow out the candles while everyone sings the Happy Birthday song.

After 'while' the verb should be in simple present for habitual situations ('while everyone sings'), not the bare present participle 'singing'. Use proper verb forms for clarity.

× Nothing special. I think most of my birthday when I was young, we celebrate it by blowing out candle, which on a cake and it's the cake at the cake together.

✓ Nothing special. I think most of my birthdays when I was young, we celebrated them by blowing out candles that were on a cake and sharing the cake together.

The time reference 'when I was young' requires past tense 'celebrated'. 'Birthdays' should be plural and pronoun 'them' refers back to 'birthdays'. 'Candles' plural and 'that were on a cake' clarifies placement. Use 'sharing the cake together' for intended meaning.

× Nothing special. I think most of my birthday when I was young, we celebrate it by blowing out candle, which on a cake and it's the cake at the cake together.

✓ Nothing special. I think most of my birthdays when I was young, we celebrated them by blowing out candles that were on a cake and sharing the cake together.

Multiple issues include singular/plural mismatch: 'birthday' should be 'birthdays', 'celebrate' should be past 'celebrated', and 'candle' should be 'candles'. Ensure number agreement across nouns and verbs.

× Yet this is quite important for me as that that we can gather together and have a quality time with my friend and family.

✓ Yes, this is quite important for me because we can gather together and have quality time with my friends and family.

Use 'Yes' not 'Yet' to agree. 'Because' is a clearer conjunction than 'as that'. 'Quality time' does not need an article here. Use plural 'friends' to match general reference. Also remove duplicate 'that'.

× It is very rare opportunity in these busy days.

✓ It is a very rare opportunity in these busy days.

Missing article 'a' before 'very rare opportunity'. Use 'in these busy days' is acceptable but 'these days' often stands alone; ensure article presence for countable noun.

× I don't know because I'm not Chinese but I guess maybe it's the the most important one is parents birthdays, maybe because they are parents and they work hard.

✓ I don't know because I'm not Chinese, but I guess the most important birthdays are parents' birthdays, maybe because parents work hard.

Avoid redundancy 'it's the the most important one is'. Use plural possessive 'parents' birthdays' (or 'parents'' birthdays) and plural verb 'are'. Remove unnecessary repetition 'they are parents'. Suggest concise phrasing.

× I don't know because I'm not Chinese but I guess maybe it's the the most important one is parents birthdays, maybe because they are parents and they work hard.

✓ I don't know because I'm not Chinese, but I guess the most important birthdays are parents' birthdays, maybe because parents work hard.

Remove unnecessary definite articles and duplicates. Use possessive form 'parents'' to show birthdays belonging to parents. Ensure clear sentence structure.