Coins— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to make your answer clearer and more natural by correcting grammar and avoiding repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, explain why you stopped using coins and describe your hobby with specific details.

Exemplo: I don't use coins anymore because most payments are electronic now. However, when I was a child, I enjoyed collecting coins from different countries as a hobby, which brought me a lot of joy.

Sugestão: Your answer is clear but could be improved by adding linking words and more specific reasons to explain why you find coins inconvenient.

Exemplo: I find coins inconvenient because they are heavy and easy to lose. Therefore, I prefer using electronic payments, which are faster and more secure.

Sugestão: Improve your grammar and vocabulary by using correct phrases like 'types of coins' instead of 'kinds of'. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent and add specific details about your collection.

Exemplo: Yes, I collected various types of coins from different countries when I was a child. My family helped me by bringing coins from their travels, which I carefully placed in my collection album.

Sugestão: Focus on using correct tenses and clearer expressions. Use linking words to contrast past and present habits and provide reasons for your preferences.

Exemplo: When I was a child, my parents gave me coins to buy things from nearby markets. However, now I don't carry coins because I find them inconvenient and prefer electronic payments.

× I've stopped using coins since covered.

✓ I've stopped using coins since I was a child.

The phrase 'since covered' is incomplete and unclear. The correct expression should specify a time point, such as 'since I was a child', to indicate when the action stopped.

× I was collecting kinds from different countries.

✓ I collected coins from different countries.

The past continuous 'was collecting' is not appropriate here because the action is a habitual past activity. Also, 'kinds' is incorrect; 'coins' is the correct noun.

× I was finding joy in this hobby.

✓ I found joy in this hobby.

The past continuous 'was finding' is unnecessary; the simple past 'found' is more suitable to express a past feeling or state.

× I don't use coins for buying things from the market.

✓ I don't use coins to buy things from the market.

The phrase 'for buying' is less natural here; 'to buy' is the correct infinitive form to express purpose.

× I also don't like to keep coins in my wallet or pocket.

✓ I also don't like keeping coins in my wallet or pocket.

After 'like', the gerund form 'keeping' is preferred to express general dislike of an action.

× I always use electronic payment nowadays.

✓ I always use electronic payments nowadays.

'Payment' should be plural 'payments' when referring to the general method or multiple instances of payment.

× Yes, when I was a kid, I enjoyed collecting kinds of from different countries.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid, I enjoyed collecting coins from different countries.

'Kinds of' is incorrect here; the correct noun is 'coins'. The sentence is in past tense and correctly uses 'enjoyed'.

× Even my family members when they traveled anywhere, they were providing me with the kinds of from that country for me to insert it in my collection album.

✓ Even my family members, when they traveled anywhere, provided me with coins from that country to put in my collection album.

The past continuous 'were providing' is unnecessary; simple past 'provided' is better. 'Kinds of' should be 'coins'. 'Insert it' is unnatural; 'put' is more appropriate.

× When I was a child, my parents were providing me with coins while I'm outside home to buy from the markets near to our house.

✓ When I was a child, my parents provided me with coins while I was outside home to buy from the markets near our house.

The past continuous 'were providing' should be simple past 'provided'. 'I'm' is present tense and should be 'I was' to match past context. 'Near to' should be 'near'.

× When I grow up, I don't like to keep coins inside my bag or wallet because I just don't like.

✓ Now that I have grown up, I don't like to keep coins inside my bag or wallet because I just don't like it.

'When I grow up' is incorrect for past completed action; 'Now that I have grown up' is correct. The sentence lacks the object 'it' after 'don't like'.