Perfume— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan ada beberapa kesalahan tata bahasa serta penggunaan kata yang tidak tepat. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan langsung ke inti, serta hindari pengulangan yang tidak perlu. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih terstruktur dan jelas agar mudah dipahami.

Exemplo: Yes, I really like using perfume because its fragrance makes me feel fresh and confident throughout the day. Sometimes, I even share my perfume with my husband so I can smell his scent as well.

Sugestão: Jawaban Anda agak membingungkan dan terdapat kesalahan tata bahasa serta kalimat yang tidak lengkap. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih jelas dan terstruktur dengan baik, serta gunakan kata penghubung untuk menghubungkan ide-ide Anda.

Exemplo: Absolutely, I use perfume every day because without it, I feel something is missing and I am not comfortable. Therefore, I always apply perfume before going to work and even during working hours.

Sugestão: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan terdapat kesalahan tata bahasa serta penggunaan kata yang tidak tepat. Cobalah untuk menyusun kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan langsung, serta gunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren.

Exemplo: Yes, I have bought perfume as a gift for my friends. I hope that when they use it, they will remember me because of the fragrance.

Sugestão: Jawaban Anda agak membingungkan dan terdapat kesalahan tata bahasa serta penggunaan kata yang tidak tepat. Cobalah untuk menjelaskan pendapat Anda dengan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan terstruktur, serta gunakan kosakata yang sesuai.

Exemplo: I think the price of perfumes depends on their quality. Some perfumes have the same scent but differ in how long they last. I prefer perfumes that are affordable but still have good quality.

× the fragments of the perfume is really good for me

✓ the fragrance of the perfume is really good for me

The word 'fragments' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'fragrance' which is singular and fits the context. 'Fragments' means pieces, which is not appropriate for perfume scent.

× I also sometimes give the perfume with though my husband

✓ I also sometimes give the perfume to my husband

The preposition 'with' is incorrect in this context; the correct preposition to indicate the recipient of a gift is 'to'.

× so my I will smell my husband, Fred Ryan

✓ so I will smell my husband, Fred Ryan

The phrase 'my I' is incorrect; it should be just 'I' as the subject pronoun.

× I always used perfume in my daily life

✓ I always use perfume in my daily life

The verb 'used' is past tense, but the sentence refers to a habitual action in the present, so the present tense 'use' is correct.

× if I don't just perform a I think there is something loose in my day

✓ if I don't just use perfume I think there is something missing in my day

The phrase 'just perform a' is incorrect; it should be 'just use perfume'. Also, 'something loose' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'something missing' to express a feeling of incompleteness.

× I will not feel convenient

✓ I will not feel comfortable

The adjective 'convenient' is incorrect to describe a feeling; 'comfortable' is the correct adjective to express feeling at ease.

× I like to use perfume every single day before I go to work and in my working time also

✓ I like to use perfume every single day before I go to work and during my working time as well

The phrase 'in my working time' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'during' to indicate a period of time.

× I ever about the perfume as a gift for my friends

✓ I have given perfume as a gift to my friends

The word 'ever' is incorrectly used; the correct phrase is 'have given' to indicate past experience. Also, 'about the perfume' is incorrect; it should be 'perfume as a gift'.

× I hope she will remind me when she we are initially use the perfume

✓ I hope she will remember me when she initially uses the perfume

The phrase 'she we are' is incorrect; it should be 'she'. Also, 'remind me' is incorrect here; 'remember me' fits better. The verb 'use' should be in third person singular 'uses'.

× when she we are initially use the perfume

✓ when she initially uses the perfume

The verb 'use' should be in third person singular form 'uses' to agree with the subject 'she'.

× and then he smelled the fragrance of the perfume

✓ and then she smells the fragrance of the perfume

The pronoun 'he' is incorrect if referring to the female friend; it should be 'she'. Also, the verb tense should be present simple 'smells' to match the context.

× we can have the same frequent of the perfume

✓ we can have the same fragrance of the perfume

The word 'frequent' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'fragrance' to refer to the scent of perfume.

× the long lasting perfume is difference for my mood and my data

✓ the long-lasting perfume is different for my mood and my day

The phrase 'long lasting' should be hyphenated as 'long-lasting' when used as an adjective. 'Difference' is a noun; the correct adjective is 'different'. 'Data' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'day'.