Perfume— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is generally relevant but contains some grammatical errors and vocabulary mistakes, such as 'performance' instead of 'perfume'. Try to use correct vocabulary and improve sentence structure for clarity. Also, avoid redundancy by combining ideas more smoothly.

Exemplo: Yes, I really like perfume because it makes me feel more confident and refreshed throughout the day. My favourite scent is rose, as I find it very fresh and comforting.

Sugestão: There are several vocabulary and grammar errors here, such as 'performance' instead of 'perfume', and incorrect verb forms. Also, the answer is a bit unclear and redundant. Focus on using correct vocabulary and grammar, and organise your ideas clearly with linking words.

Exemplo: Yes, I use perfume every day because it helps me feel more confident and comfortable before going to school. Sometimes, I share my perfume with friends, and they really enjoy it.

Sugestão: Your answer has several vocabulary mistakes ('fulfillment' and 'performance' instead of 'perfume') and unclear sentence structure. Try to answer directly and clearly, using correct vocabulary and linking words to explain your reasons.

Exemplo: No, I wouldn't buy perfume as a gift because I am a student and don't have enough money. Also, perfume is usually given on special occasions, and my parents often receive it as a gift.

Sugestão: This answer is unclear and contains vocabulary errors ('performance' instead of 'perfume', 'growth luxury' is confusing). Try to express your opinion clearly with correct vocabulary and provide specific examples or reasons.

Exemplo: I think the price of perfumes depends on the brand and type. In recent years, there are many affordable perfumes available for young people, which is very convenient.

× I love perfume so much because it helps me more confident and refreshed throughout the day.

✓ I love perfume so much because it helps me feel more confident and refreshed throughout the day.

The verb 'helps' should be followed by the base form of the verb 'feel' rather than an adjective directly. 'Helps me more confident' is incorrect; it should be 'helps me feel more confident' to express the intended meaning.

× The kind of performance I love the most is rose because I think it's very fresh and make me more comfortable.

✓ The kind of perfume I love the most is rose because I think it's very fresh and makes me more comfortable.

The word 'performance' is incorrect; it should be 'perfume'. Also, the verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'it'.

× I always use performance in my daily life because it's have me more confident, respect and have me more comfortable before going to school and sometimes I shares with my friends and they feel very over the moon.

✓ I always use perfume in my daily life because it helps me feel more confident, respected and more comfortable before going to school, and sometimes I share it with my friends and they feel very over the moon.

'Performance' should be 'perfume'. 'It's have me' is incorrect; it should be 'it helps me feel'. 'I shares' should be 'I share'. Also, 'respect' should be 'respected' to fit the context.

× Of course not. I'd never buy fulfillment as a gift because I'm currently a student at DaVita High School.

✓ Of course not. I'd never buy perfume as a gift because I'm currently a student at DaVita High School.

The word 'fulfillment' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'perfume'. The modal verb usage 'I'd never buy' is correct, but the noun is wrong.

× Then I don't have enough money to buy a performance.

✓ Then I don't have enough money to buy a perfume.

'Performance' is incorrect; it should be 'perfume'.

× Then it's a big occasion.

✓ It's a big occasion.

Starting the sentence with 'Then' is unnecessary and incorrect here; it should be omitted for clarity.

× My parents often receive me performance as a gift.

✓ My parents often receive perfume as a gift.

'Receive me performance' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'receive perfume'. The pronoun 'me' is unnecessary and incorrect here.

× In my opinion, I think it's depends on the kinds of performance.

✓ In my opinion, I think it depends on the kinds of perfume.

'It's depends' is incorrect; it should be 'it depends'. Also, 'performance' should be 'perfume'.

× Recent years it has many affordable performance for children, especially growth luxury and I think it's very convenient for children.

✓ In recent years, there have been many affordable perfumes for children, especially growth luxury ones, and I think they're very convenient for children.

'Performance' should be 'perfumes' (plural). The sentence structure is improved by adding 'In recent years' and using 'there have been' to indicate existence. 'It's' should be 'they're' to agree with plural 'perfumes'.