Emails— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문법과 표현을 자연스럽게 고치고 문장을 간결하게 말하세요. 특히 동사 시제와 단수/복수를 정확히 사용하고, 불필요한 반복과 머뭇거림을 줄이세요. 시작은 직접적인 주제문으로 하고 뒤에 구체적인 예(언제, 누구에게, 어떤 목적으로)를 한두 문장으로 덧붙이세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I often email my professors. For example, a few days ago I emailed my professor to ask for feedback on an assignment, and I wrote the message politely to explain my questions.

Sugestão: 의문에 직접 답한 뒤 구체적인 상황과 결과를 덧붙이세요. 'advice'는 불가산 명사이므로 복수형 'advices' 대신 'advice'를 사용하고, 문장 간 연결을 위해 접속사나 연결어를 활용하세요.

Exemplo: I usually send emails when I need advice from my professors. For instance, recently I emailed a professor about my project and received detailed advice and suggestions by reply.

Sugestão: 모호한 표현을 피하고 자신의 한계를 밝힌 뒤 일반적인 의견을 제시하세요. 'worldwide popular' 대신 'popular worldwide' 등 자연스러운 어순을 사용하고, 같은 이유를 반복하지 말고 구체적인 이유를 하나만 제시하세요.

Exemplo: I'm not sure about China specifically, but email is popular worldwide because it allows people to send detailed messages and attachments quickly and reliably.

Sugestão: 의견을 명확히 말하고 이유와 예를 간결하게 제시하세요. 반복되는 표현과 맺음말의 애매함을 피하고, 'messenger'와 'SNS' 같은 단어를 정확히 구분해 쓰세요.

Exemplo: I think email will be less popular in the future because many people prefer instant messaging apps. For example, in Korea many people use KakaoTalk or social media for quick conversations, which reduces reliance on email.

× Yes, I often send emails to my professors because I am also former in the university.

✓ Yes, I often send emails to my professors because I am also a former student of the university.

The phrase 'former in the university' is ungrammatical; an adjective and noun are needed. Use the noun 'student' with the article 'a' and the prepositional phrase 'of the university' to indicate affiliation. Suggestion: say 'a former student of the university'.

× Uh, a few days ago I send it on e-mail to my professor to ask the feedbacks of my tasks.

✓ A few days ago I sent an e-mail to my professor to ask for feedback on my tasks.

The action occurred in the past, so the past tense 'sent' is required instead of 'send'. 'Feedback' is an uncountable noun and does not take a plural 'feedbacks'. Use the preposition 'for' after 'ask' and 'on' to show the topic. Suggestion: use 'sent' and 'ask for feedback on ...'.

× So I wrote the e-mail politely.

✓ So I wrote the e-mail politely.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable. No change needed. (Kept for completeness.)

× When I want to get some advices from my professors, I use the e-mail system.

✓ When I want to get some advice from my professors, I use the e-mail system.

'Advice' is an uncountable noun, so 'some advice' is correct; 'advices' is incorrect. Suggestion: use 'advice' without plural.

× For example, a few days ago I sent an e-mail to my professors to get some advices about my works and my professor answered some advices through e-mail.

✓ For example, a few days ago I sent an e-mail to my professors to get some advice about my work, and my professor replied by e-mail.

Use 'advice' (uncountable) not 'advices'. 'Work' as a general noun is uncountable here, so use 'work' not 'works'. 'Answered some advices' is incorrect: a person 'replies' or 'answers' an email, not 'answers advice'. Use 'replied by e-mail' or 'replied to my e-mail'. Suggestion: 'sent ... to get some advice about my work, and my professor replied by e-mail.'

× Even though I don't know about Chinese culture because I am a Korean, I think the e-mail is a worldwide popular system because a lot of people can communicate with it because it's very convenient.

✓ Even though I don't know much about Chinese culture because I am Korean, I think e-mail is a globally popular medium because many people can use it and it's very convenient.

Use 'know much about' rather than 'know about' for degree. 'I am Korean' is more natural than 'I am a Korean' in this context (both possible but choose 'Korean'). 'The e-mail' is unnecessary; use 'e-mail' or 'email'. 'Worldwide popular system' is awkward; 'globally popular medium' is clearer. 'A lot of people' can be 'many people'. Avoid repeating 'because'. Suggestion: 'I don't know much about Chinese culture because I am Korean. I think e-mail is a globally popular medium because many people can use it and it's very convenient.'

× I think sending emails will be less popular than today because there will be a lot of messengers in future.

✓ I think sending e-mails will be less popular than today because there will be many messaging apps in the future.

Use 'many' with countable plural 'messaging apps' instead of 'a lot of messengers'. 'In the future' is the correct phrase. 'E-mails' or 'email' is fine; be consistent. Suggestion: 'there will be many messaging apps in the future.'

× For example, contemporary people like to communicate with others to use messengers like SNS or Kakaotalk in Korea.

✓ For example, people today like to communicate with others using messengers like SNS or KakaoTalk in Korea.

Use 'people today' instead of 'contemporary people'. The structure 'like to communicate with others to use' is wrong; use 'communicate with others using' or 'using messengers'. 'Kakaotalk' should be 'KakaoTalk'. Suggestion: 'people today like to communicate with others using messengers like SNS or KakaoTalk.'

× So I think to I think.

✓ So I think so.

The original phrase is ungrammatical and repetitive. 'So I think so' or simply 'So I think' is a correct concise response. Suggestion: use 'So I think so.'