Emails— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 질문에 직접적으로 답하고 문장을 명확하게 구성하세요. 현재 답변은 문법 오류와 문장 연결이 불분명합니다. 주제문으로 시작하고 구체적 상황(언제, 누구에게, 왜)을 간결하게 덧붙이세요. 연결어(for example, because, so 등)를 사용해 정보의 흐름을 매끄럽게 하세요. 예문과 파일 종류를 구체적으로 말하면 더 자연스럽습니다.

Exemplo: Yes, I send emails quite often. For example, I usually email my teachers when I need to submit presentation slides or other class documents. I also email classmates to share large files or coordinate group work.

Sugestão: 응답을 더 간결하고 정확하게 만드세요. 중복 표현과 어색한 구문을 피하고 이유와 예시를 명확히 하세요. ‘when’에 대한 구체적 상황(온라인 플랫폼로 전송 불가할 때, 업무·학업 용도 등)을 포함하고 연결어(so, because)를 사용해 문장 흐름을 개선하세요.

Exemplo: I usually send emails when I need to share large files that other messaging apps can't handle, such as presentation slides or high-resolution images. Because email supports large attachments, it's the most convenient option.

Sugestão: 확신이 없는 정보를 말할 때는 표현을 정확하게 하세요. ‘I don't know’ 대신 추정 표현(I would guess, It’s likely)과 근거(urban areas, businesses)로 답변을 보강하세요. 또한 ‘I saw every environment’처럼 모호한 표현은 구체적으로 바꾸세요(예: 뉴스, research, friends).

Exemplo: I would guess that email is still popular in China, especially in businesses and universities, because the country has advanced internet infrastructure. From what I've read and heard from friends, many professionals rely on email for formal communication.

Sugestão: 미래 예측을 말할 때는 문법과 연결어를 명확히 하세요. 현재시제 혼합을 피하고 이유를 구체적으로 제시하세요(예: remote work, cloud storage). 또한 반복되는 단어를 제거하고 자연스러운 표현을 사용하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I think email will remain popular in the future because internet access is expanding and technologies like cloud storage make it easier to send and store large files. Also, as remote work increases, formal written communication by email will likely continue to be important.

× Yeah, I often send emails, for example when my school. These are presentation or does something like that I have to send you with?

✓ Yeah, I often send emails, for example when I need to send school materials such as presentations or something like that.

The original contains sentence fragments and unclear structure. Change 'when my school' to 'when I need to send school materials' to supply a verb and clear subject. Remove 'does' and 'you with' which are ungrammatical. Use a noun phrase 'presentations or something like that' to list examples. Suggestion: ensure each clause has a subject and verb, and use parallel structure when listing items.

× When I have to send a big file that can be that can be sent in on Kakato for example like presentation files.

✓ When I have to send a large file, for example presentation files, I might use KakaoTalk.

The sentence had repetition ('that can be that can be') and incorrect preposition 'in on'. Simplify by stating purpose and example: 'When I have to send a large file, for example presentation files, I might use KakaoTalk.' Use correct preposition 'use KakaoTalk' rather than 'sent in on'. Suggestion: avoid repetition and place adverbial phrases (e.g. 'for example') near the items they modify.

× I don't know because I don't live in China, but it would be popular because of the developed technology. I saw every environment.

✓ I don't know because I don't live in China, but I think it is popular because of advanced technology. I have seen it in many environments.

Pronoun reference and verb choice are unclear ('it would be popular' and 'I saw every environment'). Use 'I think it is popular' to express opinion and 'advanced technology' as the correct adjective-noun order. 'I have seen it in many environments' correctly uses present perfect to indicate experience. Suggestion: use clear pronouns ('it') and accurate tense when reporting general observations.

× Yeah, I think it will be popular in the future because it we gained access to Internet more and there is the the technology has advanced.

✓ Yeah, I think it will be more popular in the future because we will gain more access to the Internet and technology will advance.

The original mixes tenses and has extra words ('it we gained'). For future predictions use 'will' consistently: 'we will gain' and 'technology will advance.' Also add article 'the' before 'Internet'. Remove duplicate 'the the'. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense for predictions and use correct articles and word order.