Art— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., "I spend time drawing sketches related to fashion, clothing and weather") and avoid redundant phrases like "for me" repeated.

Exemplo: Yes, I really enjoy drawing. For example, I often sketch fashion items and outfits, and I also draw scenes showing different weather because they help me capture moods. These sketches make me feel relaxed and inspired.

Sugestão: Provide a clear direct answer then one or two coherent supporting points. Use correct grammar (e.g., "I like going to galleries with friends") and linking words (e.g., "because", "for example"). Avoid hesitations and repetition. Mention a specific activity you do there to be more concrete.

Exemplo: Yes, I like going to galleries, especially with friends, because we can discuss the artworks together. For example, we often read the descriptions next to traditional paintings and talk about the history and the artist's style.

Sugestão: Answer directly and explain reasons clearly and politely. Avoid informal contractions like "wanna" in IELTS. Use linking words ("because", "however") and correct negatives ("not enjoyable" rather than "not didn't enjoyable"). Give a specific reason and, if possible, a brief contrast.

Exemplo: No, I don't want to study more art at the moment because I find much contemporary art confusing and hard to appreciate. However, I do enjoy traditional painting styles, so I might learn more about those in the future.

Sugestão: Give a clear past statement with one or two specific details. Avoid filler words and inconsistent time references ("five years ago when I was nine" is confusing). Use past tense consistently and add a brief linking phrase ("for example").

Exemplo: Yes, I learned to draw when I was about nine years old. For example, I practiced drawing animals and houses, and I spent a lot of time copying pictures from children's books to improve my skills.

× Yes, I definitely like drawing, it's really fun for me.

✓ Yes, I definitely like drawing; it's really fun for me.

The original sentence mixes two independent clauses with a comma splice. Use a semicolon or a conjunction to join independent clauses. No verb tense change needed.

× I usually spend more time for journaling, something like fashion, dress pieces, weather and I usually feel a good vibe for me.

✓ I usually spend more time journaling on topics like fashion, clothing, and the weather, and I usually feel good about it.

'Spend more time for journaling' is incorrect; use 'spend time' + gerund ('journaling'). 'Something like' should be 'on topics like'. 'Dress pieces' is awkward; 'clothing' is better. 'Feel a good vibe for me' is unnatural; say 'feel good about it'. Keep present simple.

× Absolutely, I really like go to the galleries and I really enjoy with friends.

✓ Absolutely, I really like going to galleries and I enjoy going with friends.

After 'like', use the gerund 'going' (verb + -ing). 'Enjoy' also takes a gerund and does not need 'with' before 'friends' in that structure; use 'going with friends'.

× We can to asking for someone people.

✓ We can ask other people.

'Can' should be followed by the base verb 'ask', not 'to asking'. 'Someone people' is incorrect; use 'other people' or 'someone' depending on meaning.

× What is this in in in the explain about this picture in the gallery has a lot of traditional picture a long long time ago.

✓ People explain what this picture is about in the gallery; it has many traditional elements from a long time ago.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and contains repetition and word order errors. Rephrase into two clear clauses: one about explanations in galleries, another about the picture's content. Use plural 'pictures' or 'elements' and correct prepositional phrases.

× Unfortunately, I don't wanna learn more about art because right now in the modern art, it's really not didn't enjoyable, not enjoyable for me and really an exciting for me.

✓ Unfortunately, I don't want to learn more about art because modern art is not enjoyable for me and I don't find it exciting.

Use 'want to' instead of informal 'wanna'. 'Modern art' does not need 'in the'; use noun phrase directly. 'Not didn't enjoyable' mixes tenses and negatives; use a single negative 'not enjoyable' and 'I don't find it exciting' for clarity.

× So in the modern art has a lot of dirty art I didn't like, I like.

✓ So modern art includes many works I don't like.

Original sentence has incorrect word order and tense. Remove unnecessary 'in the' and 'dirty art' (unclear); say 'includes many works I don't like' to keep present tense consistent.

× So, uh, five years ago when I was nine years old, yes, I usually, I usually learn, uh, drawing.

✓ Five years ago, when I was nine years old, I learned to draw and practiced it regularly.

When referring to a past time ('five years ago'), use past tense 'learned' not present 'learn'. Also 'learn to draw' is the correct infinitive, and 'practiced it regularly' replaces repeated 'I usually' for clarity.

× It's really fun for me. I really draw animals and house.

✓ It was really fun for me. I drew animals and houses.

Because the context is past ('when I was nine'), change present tense to past: 'was' and 'drew'. 'House' should be plural 'houses' when listing typical subjects.