Computers— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and complete your answer. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly give 2–3 specific examples with linking words. Avoid trailing or incomplete sentences.

Exemplo: I use a computer in many situations, especially at school. For instance, I use it to research topics and write assignments, and I use specific software to create presentations. Also, I sometimes use it at home to revise my notes and practice online exercises.

Sugestão: Good clear answer with relevant details. Improve naturalness by removing filler like “Yeah” and linking sentences smoothly. Keep responses compact (max 4–5 sentences) and add a short reflective comment to show personal engagement.

Exemplo: I first used a computer in elementary school during a dedicated computer class. There we learned basic skills, such as turning the machine on, using the mouse, and typing on the keyboard. That early experience made me feel more confident using technology later on.

Sugestão: Finish your thoughts and be specific about consequences. Use a clear topic sentence, then give 2–3 concrete effects with linking words (for example, therefore, as a result). Avoid vague phrases like “more time.”

Exemplo: Without a computer, my life would be much more difficult because I use it for most schoolwork and communication. For example, I would need to do research in libraries, which would take longer, and I would mainly use my phone for messages, so writing long essays would be harder. As a result, I would likely be less efficient and more stressed.

Sugestão: Complete the sentence and add another specific example or consequence. Start with a topic sentence, explain why (use linking words), and give a brief example of a task affected.

Exemplo: It is difficult for me to use a computer when the Internet is slow or unstable because most of my tasks need online access. For example, slow connection prevents me from joining online classes or submitting assignments on time, so I often lose work and fall behind.

× I use my computer in several conditions.

✓ I use my computer in several situations.

The phrase 'in several conditions' is awkward and unidiomatic in English. 'Conditions' is typically used for states or requirements; 'situations' better fits the meaning. Suggestion: use common collocations (e.g., 'in situations', 'in circumstances').

× For example, I use my computer when I am at school, I use it to finish my assignments and my projects, and I.

✓ For example, I use my computer when I am at school to finish my assignments and projects.

The original is a run-on and ends incomplete. Combine ideas into one clear sentence and remove the trailing 'and I'. Also omit redundant 'my' before 'projects'. Suggestion: avoid comma splices and ensure sentences are complete.

× I first used a computer when I was in elementary school.

✓ I first used a computer when I was in elementary school.

This sentence is correct; past tense is used appropriately to describe a past event. No change needed.

× We had a computer class where we learned some basic computer skills.

✓ We had a computer class where we learned basic computer skills.

Sentence is grammatical but 'some' is unnecessary. Removing it makes the sentence cleaner. Suggestion: omit weak modifiers when not needed.

× Yeah. And that was the time I learned how to turn on the computer, how to use the mouse and the keyboard.

✓ That was when I learned how to turn on the computer and how to use the mouse and keyboard.

Starting with 'Yeah. And' is informal and disjointed. Combine into one sentence and remove the article before 'keyboard' to match idiomatic English. Suggestion: link clauses smoothly and avoid unnecessary discourse fillers in formal responses.

× I think my life would be quite challenging without a computer because I rely on it to complete most of my school assignments and stay in touch with friends.

✓ I think my life would be quite challenging without a computer because I rely on it to complete most of my school assignments and to stay in touch with friends.

Parallel structure requires both verbs to include 'to' or both omit it. Adding 'to' before 'stay' makes the structure parallel. Suggestion: maintain parallelism in coordinated verb phrases.

× I would have to rely on alternative devices and everyday texts will become more time.

✓ I would have to rely on alternative devices, and everyday tasks would take more time.

'Everyday texts' is likely a typo for 'everyday tasks', and 'will become more time' is ungrammatical. Use 'would take more time' to match the conditional tone set by 'would have to'. Suggestion: choose correct noun and keep verb tense consistent with conditional modality.

× It would be difficult for me to use a computer when the Internet connection is very slow or unstable because many of my tasks require online access.

✓ It would be difficult for me to use a computer when the Internet connection is very slow or unstable because many of my tasks require online access.

This sentence is grammatical and correctly uses the conditional modal 'would' with reason. No change needed.

× So the Internet connection.

✓ So a slow or unstable Internet connection would make it difficult to complete my tasks.

The original fragment 'So the Internet connection.' is incomplete. Provide a full clause explaining the consequence. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments; ensure each sentence expresses a complete thought.