Advertisement— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and grammatically correct: start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, and add a brief reason or memory with a linking word. Avoid awkward words like 'imminent' (use 'famous'). Keep it under 4–5 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes. When I was a child, a Coca-Cola commercial impressed me the most because it featured famous footballers like Ronaldinho, David Beckham and Lionel Messi. I remember watching it with my family and feeling excited when the players smiled and celebrated together, which made the ad memorable.

Sugestão: Answer directly and use correct grammar and linking words. Say how often and give a specific example or reason. Use plural/singular correctly and avoid vague phrases like 'it feels comfortable'.

Exemplo: Yes, I see many ads on public transport. For example, on the subway and buses there are posters and digital screens inside the carriages, so I often notice brands, travel posters and event adverts during my commute.

Sugestão: Give a short direct opinion and then a clear reason with a linking word. Use correct articles and phrasing (e.g., 'advertisements can attract people to buy a company's product'). Try to include an example or a brief comparison.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I think advertisements are useful because they inform people about new products and persuade customers to try them. For instance, a short video ad convinced me to buy a new brand of headphones last year.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear topic sentence stating the type you prefer. Use correct collocations ('I am keen on' or 'I like') and avoid idioms that don't fit. Explain why and give a specific example of a memorable ad.

Exemplo: I prefer advertisements for beverages, such as Coca-Cola and Fanta. I find these ads effective because they use bright colours and happy scenes, which catch my attention when I see them on billboards or bus stops.

Sugestão: Be concise and use natural vocabulary: say how often, where they appear, and why you find some useful. Replace odd words like 'eminent' with 'prominent' or 'many', and avoid redundancy ('crucial and important').

Exemplo: Yes, I often see ads on my phone and laptop, especially on social media and news websites. Some of these ads are useful because they show discounts or new features, so I sometimes click them to learn more.

× When I was a child, I always felt amazed when watched an advertisement of Coca-Cola that comprised of several imminent football players such as Ronaldinho, Beckham and Messi.

✓ When I was a child, I was always amazed when I watched a Coca-Cola advertisement that featured several famous football players such as Ronaldinho, Beckham and Messi.

The original sentence omits the subject 'I' before the verb 'watched' and uses 'comprised of' and 'imminent' incorrectly. 'Felt amazed when watched' is ungrammatical because a subject is required before the verb in that clause; use 'I watched'. Use the gerund/participle form correctly: 'featured' or 'showed' is appropriate. 'Imminent' means 'about to happen' and is incorrect; use 'famous'. Also change word order to natural English and use the article 'a' with 'Coca-Cola advertisement'. Suggestion: Always include the subject in subordinate clauses ('when I watched') and choose correct descriptors ('famous', 'featured').

× Yes, based on my observation, while taking a public transportation, there is always an advertisement that stick in the wall.

✓ Yes, based on my observation, while taking public transportation, there is always an advertisement that sticks on the wall.

Errors: 'a public transportation' uses an unnecessary article; 'transportation' in this context is uncountable and does not need 'a'. 'That stick' is subject-verb disagreement and should be 'that sticks'. The correct preposition for location on a wall is 'on' not 'in'. Suggestion: Use 'public transportation' without 'a', ensure subject-verb agreement, and use 'on the wall' for advertisements attached to a wall. Note: You could also say 'on public transport' depending on variety of English.

× It feels comfortable and enjoyable to watch it along the route.

✓ It is pleasant and enjoyable to see them along the route.

'Feels comfortable' is awkward for describing advertisements; use 'is pleasant' or 'is enjoyable'. 'Watch it' is unnatural when referring to multiple ads; use 'see them'. 'Along the route' is acceptable but 'along the route' with plural 'them' is more coherent. Suggestion: Match pronouns to the noun (ads -> them) and choose natural collocations ('pleasant', 'enjoyable', 'see').

× Yes, I am. This is particularly because an advertisement could attract a people or the watcher to buy the certain product of the company.

✓ Yes, I do. This is particularly because an advertisement can attract people or viewers to buy a company's product.

'Yes, I am' is incorrect answer to 'Do you like advertisements?' Use 'Yes, I do.' 'Could' is not wrong but 'can' is more natural for general ability. 'A people' is wrong: 'people' is plural and uncountable here; use 'people' or 'a person'. 'The watcher' is awkward; use 'viewers'. 'The certain product of the company' is ungrammatical and wordy; use 'a company's product' or 'a certain product'. Suggestion: Use appropriate short answers to yes/no questions ('Yes, I do'), use correct noun forms ('people', 'viewers'), and concise noun phrases ('a company's product').

× That's why an advertisement is very useful among the business.

✓ That's why advertisements are very useful in business.

'Among the business' is incorrect collocation. Use 'in business' or 'for businesses'. Also prefer plural 'advertisements' when speaking generally. Suggestion: Use common prepositional phrase 'in business' and match singular/plural appropriately.

× Rising do you like? Actually, I keen on the advertisement of several drinking products such as Coca-Cola or Fanta that attained on every wall in the public area.

✓ What kind of advertising do you mean? Actually, I am keen on advertisements for drinks such as Coca-Cola or Fanta that appear on walls in public areas.

The original begins with garbled phrase 'Rising do you like?' which is ungrammatical. Use a clear question phrase like 'What kind of advertising do you mean?' 'I keen on' is incorrect; use 'I am keen on' or 'I like'. 'Advertisement of several drinking products' is unnatural; use 'advertisements for drinks'. 'Attained on every wall' is incorrect verb choice and tense; use 'appear on walls'. 'Public area' should be plural 'public areas'. Suggestion: Use complete auxiliary verb in 'I am keen on', choose correct verbs ('appear') and natural noun phrases ('advertisements for drinks').

× It's hit the nail on the head because it would attract some people to buy.

✓ It hits the nail on the head because it attracts some people to buy.

'It's hit' is incorrect tense/structure; if speaking generally use present simple: 'It hits the nail on the head'. 'Would attract' suggests conditional; use 'attracts' for general truth. Also 'to buy' is acceptable but could be 'to buy it'. Suggestion: Use present simple for general statements and ensure verb forms match subject and intended meaning.

× Yes, based on my experience, there are many eminent and useful advertisement while I'm using my gadget such as mobile phone or laptop that contain the crucial and important information for me personally.

✓ Yes, based on my experience, there are many prominent and useful advertisements while I'm using my devices such as my mobile phone or laptop that contain important information for me.

Errors: 'eminent' is a wrong collocation for ads; use 'prominent' or 'noticeable'. 'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements'. 'Gadget' is informal; 'devices' is better and include possessive 'my'. 'Crucial and important' is redundant; use 'important'. Also ensure relative clause 'that contain' refers to 'advertisements'. Suggestion: Use appropriate adjectives ('prominent'), correct plural forms, and avoid redundancy.