Swimming— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to use more natural phrasing and correct grammar. For example, say "Yes, I like swimming because it is one of my favorite hobbies and it helps me to relax and calm my mind." Also, avoid redundancy and keep the answer concise within 5 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I like swimming because it is one of my favorite hobbies. It helps me relax and calm my mind after a busy day. I usually swim at the local pool during weekends.

Sugestão: Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to make your answer coherent. For example, "I think it is quite difficult to learn swimming without a coach because swimming alone can be dangerous. Therefore, having a coach's support is very important."

Exemplo: I think it is quite difficult to learn swimming without a coach because swimming alone can be dangerous. Therefore, having a coach's support is very important, especially for beginners.

Sugestão: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas clearly and use linking words. For example, "I come from a rural area where many people know how to swim because there are many natural water sources like rivers, ponds, and lakes. People often bathe there and learn to swim by themselves."

Exemplo: I come from a rural area where many people know how to swim because there are many natural water sources like rivers, ponds, and lakes. People often bathe there and learn to swim by themselves since swimming pools are not common in my area.

Sugestão: Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words. For example, "A swimming pool is a specific, controlled area, while the sea is vast and natural. Therefore, swimming in the sea can be dangerous for those who are not confident swimmers. I prefer swimming in pools because they are safer."

Exemplo: A swimming pool is a specific, controlled area, while the sea is vast and natural. Therefore, swimming in the sea can be dangerous for those who are not confident swimmers. I prefer swimming in pools because they are safer and more comfortable.

× Yes, I do like swimming because it's one of my favorite hobby to make my mind calm and relax.

✓ Yes, I do like swimming because it's one of my favorite hobbies to make my mind calm and relax.

The word 'hobby' should be plural 'hobbies' because it is preceded by 'one of my favorite', which requires a plural noun after it.

× I I think as it is, it is very difficult to learn swimming without a coach and we can learn swimming only with the support of a coach.

✓ I think it is very difficult to learn swimming without a coach, and we can learn swimming only with the support of a coach.

The phrase 'I I think as it is' is redundant and awkward; simplifying to 'I think it is' improves clarity and correctness.

× Otherwise I could feel it will be very dangerous if you are learning swimming alone.

✓ Otherwise, I feel it will be very dangerous if you learn swimming alone.

The modal verb 'could' is incorrectly used here; 'feel' is better in present tense to express opinion, and 'are learning' should be 'learn' to match the conditional structure.

× I'm coming from a rural area where most of the people know swimming because because of the availability of water sources like river, pond and lakes like that.

✓ I'm coming from a rural area where most of the people know how to swim because of the availability of water sources like rivers, ponds, and lakes.

'River' and 'pond' should be plural to match 'lakes' and the general meaning of multiple water sources; also, 'know swimming' is incorrect, it should be 'know how to swim'.

× And most of the people try to bath in that kind of water sources and during that time they would try to learn swimming themselves.

✓ And most of the people try to bathe in those kinds of water sources, and during that time they try to learn swimming themselves.

The verb 'bath' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'bathe'. Also, 'that kind of water sources' should be 'those kinds of water sources' to agree in number and demonstrative pronoun.

× Some of the most probable facility for us to learn swimming, but I don't know swimming.

✓ There are some probable facilities for us to learn swimming, but I don't know how to swim.

The original sentence lacks a verb and is incomplete; adding 'There are' and correcting 'I don't know swimming' to 'I don't know how to swim' fixes the sentence structure and meaning.

× A swimming pool by means it's a particular area, but in the case of sea it's a there is a facility, so availability for wide range of water there.

✓ A swimming pool is a particular area, but in the case of the sea, there is a facility with a wide range of water available.

The definite article 'the' is needed before 'sea' because it refers to a specific body of water; also, the sentence structure is corrected for clarity.

× I I think compared to swimming pool, if a person doesn't know swimming very well, it will be very dangerous to swim in the sea.

✓ I think compared to a swimming pool, if a person doesn't know how to swim very well, it will be very dangerous to swim in the sea.

'Swimming pool' needs an article 'a'; 'know swimming' is incorrect, it should be 'know how to swim'.

× But swimming pool is too safe.

✓ But the swimming pool is much safer.

The definite article 'the' is needed before 'swimming pool'; also, 'too safe' is awkward, 'much safer' is more appropriate for comparison.

× I prefer swimming pool than sea because I have to be.

✓ I prefer the swimming pool to the sea because it is safer.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks clarity; 'prefer' is followed by 'to' not 'than'; adding 'it is safer' completes the thought.