Swimming— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: In your answer, try to use more natural English and avoid redundancy. For example, instead of saying 'I find out it helped me to release stress', you can say 'I find it helps me relieve stress'. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Exemplo: Yes, I really enjoy swimming because it helps me relax and stay fit. For instance, I often swim in my uncle's pool, which helps me relieve stress after a busy day. Additionally, swimming is a great form of exercise that maintains my overall health.

Sugestão: Your answer is a bit unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas clearly with correct grammar and use linking words. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain with reasons and examples.

Exemplo: I think learning to swim is not very difficult. However, beginners often feel anxious and bored because they spend a lot of time in the water. From my experience, it becomes easier with regular practice.

Sugestão: Try to make your answer more concise and natural. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repeating similar points. Also, be careful with sentence structure and word choice.

Exemplo: Many people in my country prefer swimming in the sea because it is a relaxing place to swim and spend time with family during holidays. It also provides a good opportunity for people to learn how to swim.

Sugestão: Your answer is incomplete and has grammatical mistakes. Try to complete your ideas and use linking words to compare clearly. Also, avoid ending sentences abruptly.

Exemplo: There are many differences between swimming in a pool and in the sea. Swimming in a pool is easier and safer because the water is clean and the temperature is consistent. In contrast, swimming in the sea is more challenging due to big waves and changing conditions.

× I often swim in my uncle pool which I find out it helped me to release stress after the busy day.

✓ I often swim in my uncle's pool, which I find helps me to release stress after a busy day.

The phrase 'in my uncle pool' is missing the possessive form 'uncle's'. Also, 'which I find out it helped me' is incorrect; it should be 'which I find helps me' to express a current ongoing effect. Additionally, 'after the busy day' should be 'after a busy day' to generalize the statement.

× Also, swimming can be an exercise for me and maintain a good health.

✓ Also, swimming can be exercise for me and help me maintain good health.

The phrase 'maintain a good health' is incorrect; 'health' is an uncountable noun and does not need an article. Also, the sentence structure is awkward; adding 'help me' clarifies the meaning.

× Would say learning how to swim isn't very difficult but for the beginner who started they saying it's real quite anxious and bored because they always stay in the water.

✓ I would say learning how to swim isn't very difficult, but for beginners who have just started, they say it's really quite anxious and boring because they always stay in the water.

The sentence lacks a subject at the beginning ('I would say'). 'For the beginner who started' should be plural and more precise as 'for beginners who have just started'. 'They saying' is incorrect; it should be 'they say'. 'Real quite anxious and bored' is incorrect; it should be 'really quite anxious and bored' or better 'really quite anxiety-inducing and boring'.

× But for my experience I would say those things like they said but it's quite more easier when you practice a lot.

✓ But from my experience, I would say those things are as they said, but it becomes much easier when you practice a lot.

'For my experience' should be 'from my experience'. 'Those things like they said' is awkward; 'those things are as they said' is clearer. 'Quite more easier' is incorrect; 'much easier' is the correct comparative form.

× So many people in my country like to go swimming, the most is the sea, because the sea is the place where they go to relax for swimming and for spending time with their family on the holiday.

✓ So many people in my country like to go swimming; most of them go to the sea because it is the place where they go to relax, swim, and spend time with their families on holidays.

'The most is the sea' is incorrect; it should be 'most of them go to the sea'. 'For spending time with their family on the holiday' should be pluralized to 'families' and 'holidays' to generalize. Also, 'relax for swimming' is awkward; 'relax, swim' is better.

× There are so many different between swimming in the pool and swimming in the sea.

✓ There are so many differences between swimming in the pool and swimming in the sea.

'Different' is an adjective and cannot be used as a noun here; 'differences' is the correct plural noun. The preposition 'between' is correct but needs a plural noun before it.

× For swimming in the pool, I would say it is clean water and consistent temperature which make our swim easier and safer.

✓ For swimming in the pool, I would say the water is clean and the temperature is consistent, which makes swimming easier and safer.

'It is clean water and consistent temperature' is awkward; better to say 'the water is clean and the temperature is consistent'. 'Which make' should be 'which makes' to agree with singular subject 'temperature'. 'Our swim' is awkward; 'swimming' is better.

× But in contrast, swimming in the sea would be challenging because there are so many waves, big waves and we cannot.

✓ But in contrast, swimming in the sea can be challenging because there are many big waves, and sometimes we cannot swim safely.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and we cannot.' It needs completion. 'Would be' can be replaced with 'can be' for general truth. 'So many waves, big waves' is redundant; 'many big waves' is better.