Swimming— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by using correct grammar and avoiding redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details using linking words. For example, say "Yes, I like swimming because it helps me stay healthy. In my free time, I enjoy swimming while listening to music, which helps me relax and reduce stress."

Exemplo: Yes, I like swimming because it helps me stay healthy. In my free time, I enjoy swimming while listening to music, which helps me relax and reduce stress.

Sugestão: Focus on clear sentence structure and correct grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, start with a direct answer, then explain with reasons. You can say, "When I was young, I found it difficult to learn swimming. However, now it is easier because I joined a professional club where coaches helped me overcome my fear of water."

Exemplo: When I was young, I found it difficult to learn swimming. However, now it is easier because I joined a professional club where coaches helped me overcome my fear of water.

Sugestão: Make your answer more coherent by using linking words and correct grammar. Provide specific details clearly. For example, say "Most people in my country prefer swimming at the beach because it is natural and relaxing. However, I prefer swimming in a professional club because there are many coaches who focus on me and can help in emergencies."

Exemplo: Most people in my country prefer swimming at the beach because it is natural and relaxing. However, I prefer swimming in a professional club because there are many coaches who focus on me and can help in emergencies.

Sugestão: Use clear and correct vocabulary and grammar. Start with a topic sentence and then add specific differences using linking words. For example, "There are many differences between swimming in a pool and in the sea. Swimming in a pool is safer because a coach is always nearby. On the other hand, swimming in the sea is more challenging since there is no one to assist you."

Exemplo: There are many differences between swimming in a pool and in the sea. Swimming in a pool is safer because a coach is always nearby. On the other hand, swimming in the sea is more challenging since there is no one to assist you.

× To be honest, I am into swimming has helped me to be more healthy, uh, and in my free time, I don't uh, swimming.

✓ To be honest, I am into swimming because it has helped me to be healthier, and in my free time, I swim.

The original sentence combines unrelated clauses without proper connectors, causing confusion. 'I am into swimming has helped me' is incorrect; it should be separated and connected properly. Also, 'more healthy' should be 'healthier' (comparative adjective). The phrase 'I don't uh, swimming' is incomplete and incorrect; it should be 'I swim' to express the activity in free time.

× To be honest, I am into swimming has helped me to be more healthy, uh, and in my free time, I don't uh, swimming.

✓ To be honest, I am into swimming because it has helped me to be healthier, and in my free time, I swim.

The phrase 'more healthy' is incorrect; the comparative form of 'healthy' is 'healthier'. Using 'healthier' is grammatically correct and natural in English.

× I also play the music during the swimming, which has helped me to reduce the the stress and exciting.

✓ I also play music while swimming, which has helped me to reduce stress and excitement.

The preposition 'during the swimming' is awkward; 'while swimming' is more natural. Also, 'the the stress and exciting' is incorrect; 'stress and excitement' are the correct nouns here.

× Actually, when I was a young, I think it's difficult to learn swimming, but now I think it's more easier because I apply to a professional club which they help me to be a pro swimmer and they provide for me a main reasons to be don't afraid for the water.

✓ Actually, when I was young, I thought it was difficult to learn swimming, but now I think it's easier because I joined a professional club where they help me to be a pro swimmer and provide me with main reasons not to be afraid of the water.

'When I was a young' should be 'when I was young' (no article). 'I think it's difficult' should be past tense 'I thought it was difficult' to match the past time. 'More easier' is incorrect; 'easier' suffices. 'I apply to' should be past tense 'I joined'. 'Which they help me' is incorrect; 'where they help me' is correct. 'Provide for me a main reasons' should be 'provide me with main reasons'. 'To be don't afraid' is incorrect; it should be 'not to be afraid'. 'For the water' should be 'of the water'.

× Actually, when I was a young, I think it's difficult to learn swimming, but now I think it's more easier because I apply to a professional club which they help me to be a pro swimmer and they provide for me a main reasons to be don't afraid for the water.

✓ Actually, when I was young, I thought it was difficult to learn swimming, but now I think it's easier because I joined a professional club where they help me to be a pro swimmer and provide me with main reasons not to be afraid of the water.

The prepositions 'apply to' should be 'joined' for past action. 'Provide for me' should be 'provide me with'. 'Afraid for the water' should be 'afraid of the water'.

× Most of people, my country prefers swimming, swimming in the beach, but I prefer swimming in the professional club, which there are many coach.

✓ Most people in my country prefer swimming, swimming at the beach, but I prefer swimming in a professional club, where there are many coaches.

'Most of people' should be 'Most people'. 'Swimming in the beach' should be 'swimming at the beach'. 'The professional club' should be 'a professional club' unless a specific one is known. 'Many coach' should be 'many coaches' (plural).

× Most of people, my country prefers swimming, swimming in the beach, but I prefer swimming in the professional club, which there are many coach.

✓ Most people in my country prefer swimming, swimming at the beach, but I prefer swimming in a professional club, where there are many coaches.

The preposition 'in the beach' is incorrect; 'at the beach' is the correct phrase. Also, 'in the professional club' is better as 'in a professional club' unless specifying a particular club.

× They focused on me and uh, if there's someone was dying, uh, they would help him.

✓ They focus on me, and if someone is drowning, they would help him.

The verb tense 'focused' should be present 'focus' to match the context. 'If there's someone was dying' is incorrect; it should be 'if someone is drowning'. 'Dying' means to be near death, but 'drowning' is the correct term for water-related danger.

× There was many different among swimming in the ball and in the sea.

✓ There are many differences between swimming in the pool and in the sea.

'There was many different' is incorrect; it should be 'There are many differences' (plural noun and present tense). 'Among' is incorrect here; 'between' is used for two items. 'Swimming in the ball' is a typo; it should be 'swimming in the pool'.

× Uh, swimming in the mall is more perfect, uh, which they are a coach always next to you while, uh, swimming in the sea it's more, uh, difficult and they are no one to focus with you.

✓ Swimming in the pool is better because there is always a coach next to you, while swimming in the sea is more difficult and there is no one to focus on you.

'More perfect' is incorrect; 'perfect' is an absolute adjective and cannot be compared. 'More perfect' should be replaced with 'better' or 'safer'. 'They are a coach always next to you' is incorrect; it should be 'there is always a coach next to you'. 'They are no one to focus with you' is incorrect; it should be 'there is no one to focus on you'.