Swimming— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make the response more natural and grammatically correct by combining short fragments into fluent sentences, removing redundancy, and correcting word order. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give brief supporting details (frequency, location, and cost) using linking words. Avoid sentence fragments like "it. Costs" and unnecessary repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy swimming and I usually go once a week. I swim at a nearby public pool, which is convenient, and a single entry costs about CN¥16, so it’s affordable for me.

Sugestão: Clarify the main idea and use correct vocabulary and grammar. Replace unclear words ("fairness") with the intended term (likely "fear") and ensure subject–verb agreement ("one of the most difficult sports"). Use a linking phrase to explain why and give a simple example or solution.

Exemplo: Yes, I think swimming is one of the most difficult sports to learn because beginners must overcome their fear of the water and learn to relax. For example, starting with floating exercises and short guided lessons can help build confidence.

Sugestão: Combine fragments into complete sentences and use linking words for coherence. Be specific about places and times, and correct awkward phrasing (e.g. "in sports stadium to swim" → "in sports stadiums"). Give a brief reason for the preference to add content depth.

Exemplo: Many people in China prefer public swimming pools or sports stadiums with indoor pools, and they often go in the evenings after work because those facilities are clean and have regular opening hours.

Sugestão: Expand slightly with clear, specific contrasts and correct word choice. Use linking words (e.g. "however", "on the other hand") and give concrete reasons (safety, conditions, water clarity). Avoid vague adjectives like "more cloudy"; say "more crowded" or "less clear" if appropriate.

Exemplo: Swimming in a pool is generally safer because lifeguards are present and the water is monitored; however, swimming in the sea offers a more natural experience with waves and scenery. On the other hand, sea water can be unpredictable, while pool water is clearer and controlled.

× At a swimming pool near my home it. Costs about CN¥16.00 once.

✓ At a swimming pool near my home. It costs about CN¥16.00 per visit.

The original contains an extra pronoun placement and incorrect sentence segmentation. 'it. Costs' splits the subject and verb; 'It costs' must be in one sentence. Also 'once' is unclear; 'per visit' or 'each time' is more natural. Use a period to separate clauses and capitalize the new sentence.

× I think swimming is one of the most difficult sport to learn because beginners should overcome their fairness and relax.

✓ I think swimming is one of the most difficult sports to learn because beginners should overcome their fear and learn to relax.

'Sport' should be plural 'sports' after 'one of the' (idiomatic noun form). 'Fairness' is the wrong word; the intended noun is 'fear'. Also add 'learn to' before 'relax' for idiomatic phrasing. These are word choice and adjective/noun form errors.

× Many people in China usually go to the public swimming pool. In sports stadium to swim. They often like in the evenings.

✓ Many people in China usually go to public swimming pools in sports stadiums to swim. They often go in the evenings.

The original has fragmented sentences and incorrect word order. 'In sports stadium to swim.' is a fragment; combine ideas into one sentence and make nouns plural for general statements ('pools', 'stadiums'). 'They often like in the evenings.' misuses 'like' — use 'go' or 'swim' and place the adverbial phrase 'in the evenings' after the verb.

× Swimming in the pool is safer than swimming in the sea. However, swimming in the pool sometimes is more cloudy.

✓ Swimming in the pool is safer than swimming in the sea. However, the pool water is sometimes cloudier.

'More cloudy' is grammatically acceptable but non-idiomatic; use the comparative adjective 'cloudier'. Also specify 'pool water' for clarity. Place the adverb 'sometimes' before the comparative adjective for natural word order.

× Yes, I enjoy swimming. I usually swim once a week. At a swimming pool near my home it. Costs about CN¥16.00 once.

✓ Yes, I enjoy swimming. I usually swim once a week at a swimming pool near my home. It costs about CN¥16.00 per visit.

Combine fragments into coherent sentences and fix word order. Move the location phrase 'at a swimming pool near my home' to the sentence about frequency for clearer meaning. Correct the fragmented 'it. Costs' to 'It costs' and replace 'once' with 'per visit' for clarity.

× They often like in the evenings.

✓ They often go in the evenings.

'Like' is incorrectly used here; the intended verb is 'go' (or 'swim'). Additionally, 'like' requires an object or infinitive (e.g., 'like to swim'), so replace with the correct verb and maintain third person plural verb form 'go'.