Watch— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Améliorez la clarté et la fluidité de votre réponse en utilisant des phrases complètes et en évitant les erreurs grammaticales. Par exemple, commencez par une phrase claire qui répond directement à la question, puis ajoutez des détails spécifiques en utilisant des mots de liaison.

Exemplo: Yes, I wear an Apple Watch. It is very useful because it not only shows the time but also monitors my heartbeat and tracks my surroundings.

Sugestão: Travaillez sur la structure de vos phrases pour qu'elles soient plus naturelles et cohérentes. Utilisez des mots de liaison pour connecter vos idées et évitez les pauses inutiles ou les phrases incomplètes.

Exemplo: Yes, I received the smart watch I mentioned earlier as a birthday gift from my father. He noticed that I needed a watch to help me be more productive and keep track of my daily events.

Sugestão: Améliorez votre vocabulaire et la précision de vos idées. Essayez d'utiliser des mots plus appropriés et de structurer votre réponse avec des phrases complètes et des mots de liaison pour plus de clarté.

Exemplo: I believe some people collect expensive watches as a hobby. Additionally, wearing such watches can be a way to show their wealth and symbolize their success and happiness.

Sugestão: Améliorez la grammaire et la cohérence de votre réponse. Répondez directement à la question avec une phrase claire, puis expliquez votre opinion en utilisant des mots de liaison et des phrases complètes.

Exemplo: I don't think wearing a watch is necessary nowadays because smartphones are more practical and useful for checking the time and calendar.

× Yes, are used up. Intelligent Watch from Apple and it's really useful to me not to just watch the time, but also I can follow my heartbeat or. Something that occurs around me.

✓ Yes, I use an Intelligent Watch from Apple and it's really useful to me not just to watch the time, but also to follow my heartbeat or something that occurs around me.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'are used up' which is a past participle form used incorrectly here. The correct form is 'I use' to indicate present habitual action. Also, 'not to just watch' should be 'not just to watch' for correct infinitive placement.

× Yes, the intelligent watch that I've mentioned earlier as a gift, a birthday gift from my father, because. He noticed that I need a watch for my daily life to be more. Productive and to follow all my events around me so he give me that.

✓ Yes, the intelligent watch that I've mentioned earlier was a birthday gift from my father because he noticed that I needed a watch for my daily life to be more productive and to follow all my events around me, so he gave me that.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. 'He noticed' and 'he gave' should be in past tense to maintain consistency. 'I need' should be 'I needed' to match the past context.

× I think it's just their hobbies to collect expensive watches and they want to express that they have a great furtun. Ann is also a great way to represent their success and their happiness in life.

✓ I think it's just their hobby to collect expensive watches and they want to express that they have great fortune. It is also a great way to represent their success and happiness in life.

The plural 'hobbies' should be singular 'hobby' to match the singular subject 'it'. 'Furtun' is a misspelling of 'fortune'. 'Ann' is incorrect and should be 'It' to refer to the previous idea.

× I think wearing a watch it's not a need. Because nowadays we use smart smartphone and as more practical and more useful to use. Are smart phone to see the calendar or the time?

✓ I think wearing a watch is not a necessity because nowadays we use smartphones which are more practical and useful to see the calendar or the time.

The sentence has pronoun and article errors: 'it's not a need' should be 'is not a necessity'. 'Smart smartphone' is redundant; 'smartphones' is correct. 'Are smart phone' is incorrect; it should be 'which are'. The sentence structure is also corrected for clarity.