Part 1
Examinador
What kinds of websites do you often visit?
Candidato
I think I mostly use it for a certified me is neighbor and Google, and sometimes I need some I need some buy something I used to, umm, cook up and it is very a lot of that gives me a lot of informations and it's very useful for I optimize that website.
Examinador
What is your favourite website?
Candidato
My favorite website is maybe Google because recently I started to English and I always try to read some English articles and I made my improve my English conversation skill reading skills. Sorry so almost.
Examinador
Are there any changes to the websites you often visit?
Candidato
Yes, I as I mentioned before, I I'm used to the labor in Korea website, but recently I started to learning English. I translate some portal fight. It's easy to Google because it it consists of English and it's very helpful for improving my English.
Examinador
What kinds of websites are popular in your country?
Candidato
What I think of the most popular websites in my country is neighbor and coupon because most of our people find something you know is by neighborhood fight and people want to buy something. What kind of people use my coupon tho? Those two are the most.
What kinds of websites do you often visit?
Pontuação: 35.0Sugestão: 질문에 바로 답하고 구체적인 세부 정보를 논리적으로 덧붙이는 연습이 필요합니다. 문법 오류와 어순이 자주 나오므로 간단한 문장 구조(주어+동사+목적어)를 유지하세요. 또한 한국어식 표현을 영어로 직역하지 말고, 방문하는 웹사이트 유형(예: 검색 엔진, 쇼핑, 레시피 사이트 등)을 분명히 말한 후 이유와 빈도, 예시를 연결어(For example, because, so)로 이어 설명하세요.
Exemplo: I often visit search engines like Google and neighborhood community sites. I use Google to find information quickly, and I check community sites when I want to buy or sell items locally. For example, I look at local classifieds every week to find second-hand furniture.
What is your favourite website?
Pontuação: 40.0Sugestão: 명확한 주제문을 먼저 말하고 그 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요. 'started to English' 같은 어색한 표현 대신 'started learning English'처럼 정확한 동사를 사용해야 합니다. 또한 읽기와 회화 기술 향상이라는 구체적 목표와 어떻게 사이트를 활용하는지 예시(How often, what articles)도 덧붙이세요.
Exemplo: My favorite website is Google because I use it to read English articles to improve my language skills. I usually read news and blog posts three times a week, which helps my vocabulary and listening practice when I listen to related videos.
Are there any changes to the websites you often visit?
Pontuação: 38.0Sugestão: 변화에 대해 말할 때는 과거와 현재를 비교하는 문장을 사용하세요(used to ... but now ...). 'translate some portal fight' 같은 표현은 명확하지 않으니 'I translate articles on portal sites'처럼 정확한 표현을 쓰세요. 또한 이유와 결과를 연결어(because, so, therefore)로 분명히 연결해 주세요.
Exemplo: Yes. I used to visit local job and community sites more often, but recently I have started visiting English-language websites to improve my skills. Because I translate articles and read them daily, my vocabulary has gradually improved.
What kinds of websites are popular in your country?
Pontuação: 34.0Sugestão: 질문에 직접적으로 답한 뒤 구체적인 이유와 예시를 덧붙이세요. 'neighbor'와 'coupon' 같은 단어가 어떤 사이트인지(community marketplace, coupon sites) 명확히 설명하고, 대중이 자주 사용하는 이유(편리함, 저렴함 등)를 연결어로 제시하세요. 문장을 간결하게 유지하고 불필요한 반복을 피하세요.
Exemplo: I think community marketplace sites and coupon websites are the most popular in my country. People use community marketplaces to buy and sell second-hand goods, and coupon sites to find discounts for restaurants and shops, because they are convenient and save money.
× I think I mostly use it for a certified me is neighbor and Google, and sometimes I need some I need some buy something I used to, umm, cook up and it is very a lot of that gives me a lot of informations and it's very useful for I optimize that website.
✓ I mostly use websites like Naver and Google, and sometimes I use them to buy things or find recipes; they give me a lot of information and are very useful for me.
원문은 어순이 뒤죽박죽이고 불필요한 중복(I need some I need some), 잘못된 단어 선택(certified me, neighbor -> Naver), 복수·단수 및 관사 사용 오류(informations -> information), 그리고 목적어·대상 표현이 명확하지 않습니다. 개선 제안: 핵심 의미를 명확히 하여 주어+동사+목적어 순으로 재구성하고, 불가산명사 'information'을 사용하며 브랜드명 'Naver'를 정확히 표기하세요.
× My favorite website is maybe Google because recently I started to English and I always try to read some English articles and I made my improve my English conversation skill reading skills. Sorry so almost.
✓ My favorite website is Google because I recently started studying English; I always try to read English articles to improve my speaking and reading skills.
원문은 시제 혼용(recently I started to English), 동사구 부정확(studying English 필요), 그리고 어순과 명사구 사용 오류(I made my improve) 등이 있습니다. 개선 제안: 'start + -ing' 형태를 사용하고 목적을 나타내는 to부정사 or 'in order to' 구조로 개선하며 'speaking and reading skills'처럼 병렬 구조를 명확히 하세요.
× Yes, I as I mentioned before, I I'm used to the labor in Korea website, but recently I started to learning English. I translate some portal fight. It's easy to Google because it it consists of English and it's very helpful for improving my English.
✓ Yes, as I mentioned before, I used to use a Korean job website, but recently I began learning English. I translate some portal pages; Google is easy to use because it has English content and it is very helpful for improving my English.
원문은 어순과 표현 오류(I I'm used to the labor in Korea website), 동사 형태 오류(started to learning -> started learning or began learning), 단어 선택(portal fight -> portal pages), 중복(it it) 등이 있습니다. 개선 제안: 'used to use'로 과거 습관을 표현하고 'start/begin + -ing' 형태를 사용하세요. 'portal pages'나 'portal sites'와 같은 적절한 명사구를 사용하세요.
× What I think of the most popular websites in my country is neighbor and coupon because most of our people find something you know is by neighborhood fight and people want to buy something.
✓ I think the most popular websites in my country are Naver and coupon sites because many people look for deals in their neighborhoods and want to buy things.
원문은 주어-동사 일치 오류와 부적절한 단어 선택(neighbor -> Naver, neighborhood fight -> neighborhood deals), 'most of our people'도 어색합니다. 개선 제안: 'the most popular websites are'로 복수형 일치, 'many people'으로 자연스러운 표현을 사용하고 'deals'나 'coupons' 같은 정확한 명사를 사용하세요.
× What kind of people use my coupon tho? Those two are the most.
✓ Who uses coupon sites? These two are the most popular.
원문은 'what kind of people use my coupon tho?'에서 의문사 사용과 대상 표현이 부적절하며 'Those two are the most.'도 불완전 문장입니다. 개선 제안: 대상이 사람이면 'who'를 쓰고 'coupon sites'처럼 명확한 명사구를 사용하세요. 비교·최상급 표현은 'the most popular'로 완전하게 만드세요.