Holidays— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding filler words like 'umm' and redundant phrases. Also, use clearer sentence structures and provide specific examples of activities to enrich your answer.

Exemplo: Two weeks ago, I went to Kelowna in British Columbia with my parents and friends. We enjoyed various activities like hiking and visiting local vineyards, which made the holiday very memorable.

Sugestão: Avoid filler words such as 'umm' and 'uh'. Make your sentences more fluent and grammatically correct. Also, clarify your last point about 'to gain more' by specifying what you gain, such as experiences or knowledge.

Exemplo: Yes, I definitely like holidays because they allow me to spend quality time with my friends and help me relax from busy days. Additionally, holidays give me the opportunity to explore new cities or provinces and learn about different cultures.

Sugestão: Reduce filler words and improve sentence flow. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, clarify unclear phrases like 'By news' and provide more specific details about the festival.

Exemplo: My favourite public holiday is Diwali, a special festival in India. During this time, we have three to four days off, and my family spends quality time together. We buy new clothes, sweets, and gifts to celebrate with friends and relatives.

Sugestão: Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples of activities you enjoy during holidays.

Exemplo: On holidays, my plans depend on my mood. For example, sometimes I go out with friends to a restaurant or the beach. Additionally, I enjoy engaging in fun activities like hiking or playing sports.

Sugestão: Try to avoid filler words and improve sentence coherence. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific about what you enjoy doing at home.

Exemplo: Yes, sometimes I like to spend the day at home because it allows me to relax and be myself. When I'm alone, I usually cook delicious desserts and spicy dishes, which I really enjoy.

Sugestão: Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Use clear and complete sentences with appropriate linking words to express your preference and reasons clearly.

Exemplo: I prefer leisurely holidays because they help me unwind and de-stress. In contrast, busy holidays can be stressful, and I don't enjoy feeling pressured during my time off.

Sugestão: Reduce filler words and complete your sentences fully. Use linking words to contrast your preferences clearly and provide a complete explanation.

Exemplo: It depends on my mood. When I want to do interesting activities like hiking, cooking, or going out with friends, I prefer exciting holidays. However, if I want to relax and spend time alone, I choose peaceful holidays.

× I vividly remember 2 weeks ago umm I had the holidays and I went to the new the other province in BC which is Kelowna and I really enjoyed there a lot with my parents and with my friends.

✓ I vividly remember 2 weeks ago umm I had the holiday and I went to another province in BC which is Kelowna and I really enjoyed it a lot with my parents and my friends.

The word 'holidays' should be singular 'holiday' because it refers to a specific period. 'The new the other province' is incorrect; 'another province' is the correct phrase. Also, 'enjoyed there' should be 'enjoyed it' to correctly refer to the place.

× I vividly remember 2 weeks ago umm I had the holidays and I went to the new the other province in BC which is Kelowna and I really enjoyed there a lot with my parents and with my friends.

✓ I vividly remember 2 weeks ago umm I had the holiday and I went to another province in BC which is Kelowna and I really enjoyed it a lot with my parents and my friends.

The phrase 'enjoyed there' is incorrect because 'enjoy' is a transitive verb and requires a direct object, not a prepositional phrase. The correct form is 'enjoyed it' referring to the place.

× Apart from these, uh, it gives me chance to explore another cities or provinces to to gain more.

✓ Apart from these, uh, it gives me a chance to explore other cities or provinces to gain more.

'Chance' needs an article 'a' before it. 'Another cities' is incorrect because 'another' is used with singular nouns; 'other cities' is correct for plural.

× Actually there are three to four holidays during Diwali festival and we all family members spend quality time with each other.

✓ Actually there are three to four holidays during the Diwali festival and all family members spend quality time with each other.

'We all family members' is incorrect; it should be 'all family members'. Also, 'Diwali festival' needs the definite article 'the'.

× By news, we buy new clothes, sweets and some gifts for our friends and family members.

✓ By the way, we buy new clothes, sweets and some gifts for our friends and family members.

'By news' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'By the way' to introduce additional information.

× Frankly speaking, on holidays, uh, it depends on my mood like where to go or what activities do I like to do.

✓ Frankly speaking, on holidays, uh, it depends on my mood like where to go or what activities I like to do.

The sentence structure is awkward; 'what activities do I like to do' should be 'what activities I like to do' to fit the statement form.

× Uh, for example, sometime I go for outside with my friends for a restaurant or any beaches.

✓ Uh, for example, sometimes I go outside with my friends to a restaurant or to any beaches.

'Go for outside' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'go outside'. Also, 'for a restaurant' should be 'to a restaurant' and 'any beaches' should be preceded by 'to'.

× Yes, sometime I like to spend my day at home because it gives me a chance to, uh, be my own self.

✓ Yes, sometimes I like to spend my day at home because it gives me a chance to, uh, be myself.

'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'Be my own self' is awkward; 'be myself' is the correct expression.

× Like I can spend time with my own and also, uh, at, in my home when I'm alone, I usually do cooking and cook some delicious desserts and some spicy food.

✓ Like I can spend time on my own and also, uh, at home when I'm alone, I usually cook some delicious desserts and some spicy food.

'Spend time with my own' is incorrect; it should be 'spend time on my own'. 'Do cooking and cook' is redundant; 'usually cook' suffices. 'At, in my home' is redundant; 'at home' is correct.

× I always give priority to lazily holidays because it, uh, helps me to unwind and de stress, whereas, uh, busy holidays are likely to do something, uh, under pressure and I really don't like that holidays.

✓ I always give priority to lazy holidays because they, uh, help me to unwind and de-stress, whereas, uh, busy holidays are likely to make me do something, uh, under pressure and I really don't like those holidays.

'Lazily holidays' is incorrect; 'lazy holidays' is correct. 'It helps' should be 'they help' to agree with plural 'holidays'. 'That holidays' should be 'those holidays'. Also, 'are likely to do something' is awkward; 'make me do something' is better.

× So, uh, therefore I always want to.

✓ So, uh, therefore I always want to relax.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb or object after 'want to'. Adding 'relax' completes the thought.

× It totally depends on my mood, umm, whenever I try to, whenever I want to do some uh, funny activities, umm, or interesting activities like hiking or cooking or going outside with my friends, then I always prefer exciting holidays.

✓ It totally depends on my mood. Whenever I want to do some fun or interesting activities like hiking, cooking, or going outside with my friends, I always prefer exciting holidays.

The original sentence is run-on and repetitive. Simplifying and removing repeated phrases improves clarity and flow.