Holidays— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer needs to be more grammatically correct and clearer. Use past tense consistently and avoid unclear phrases like 'some thank you'. Try to give a direct topic sentence and then add specific details with linking words.

Exemplo: For my last holiday, which was Easter, I went to the village to celebrate with my family and friends, especially my grandmother. We had a lot of fun together and enjoyed traditional activities.

Sugestão: Try to organize your answer more clearly by starting with a topic sentence and then giving reasons. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure for clarity.

Exemplo: Yes, I really like holidays, especially Christmas and New Year. Since childhood, I have loved Santa Claus and the tradition of giving and receiving gifts from friends and family.

Sugestão: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific about why you like New Year's holiday.

Exemplo: In my opinion, New Year's holiday is the best because many people meet and exchange gifts and compliments. Also, there are many special cartoons and shows during this time.

Sugestão: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Avoid filler words and explain customs clearly with specific details. Use linking words to organize your answer.

Exemplo: On holidays, we follow many customs. For example, we prepare traditional food called cosignale and decorate a Christmas tree. We also set a special Christmas table to celebrate with family.

Sugestão: Your answer is too short and repetitive. Provide a clear topic sentence and add specific reasons or examples to support your answer.

Exemplo: Yes, I like spending my day at home because it is a comfortable and relaxing place. I enjoy resting and doing my hobbies there.

Sugestão: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting grammar and using linking words to make it more coherent.

Exemplo: I prefer a busy holiday because I love meeting friends and family. We talk about our past and future, and spending time together is always amazing.

Sugestão: Avoid filler words and repetition. Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

Exemplo: I prefer an exciting holiday because it brings more emotions like laughter and kindness. It is a great opportunity to spend quality time with family and express feelings.

× The last holiday was Easter and I go to the village and celebrate this holiday with my friends, with my family, especially my grandmother and we have fun and some thank you.

✓ The last holiday was Easter and I went to the village and celebrated this holiday with my friends, with my family, especially my grandmother, and we had fun and said thank you.

The sentence describes a past event, so the verbs 'go' and 'celebrate' should be in the past tense 'went' and 'celebrated' to maintain tense consistency. Also, 'have fun' should be 'had fun' and 'some thank you' is corrected to 'said thank you' for clarity.

× Yes I do. I love holidays very much, especially I love the Christmas holiday and New Year holiday because it's in my childhood I loved uh, Santa Claus.

✓ Yes, I do. I love holidays very much, especially the Christmas holiday and New Year holiday because in my childhood I loved Santa Claus.

The phrase 'it's in my childhood' is incorrect; it should be 'in my childhood' to indicate a past time frame. Also, 'especially I love' is better as 'especially the' for smoother expression.

× I believe this and also I get many gifts from the friends or family and I love this.

✓ I believed this and also I got many gifts from friends or family and I loved this.

Since the speaker refers to childhood experiences, past tense verbs 'believed', 'got', and 'loved' are appropriate instead of present tense 'believe', 'get', and 'love'.

× In my opinion New Year's holiday is the best thing ever because more people like meeting all the time and they sending compliments they gifts together to them and also there are many cartoons for that.

✓ In my opinion, New Year's holiday is the best thing ever because more people like meeting all the time and they send compliments and gifts to each other, and also there are many cartoons for that.

The verb 'sending' should be 'send' to agree with the plural subject 'they'. Also, the phrase 'they gifts together to them' is unclear and corrected to 'send compliments and gifts to each other' for clarity.

× Well, in my country we have many customs. First of all, we make a church hella.

✓ Well, in my country we have many customs. First of all, we make a church hall.

The word 'hella' is incorrect; the correct term is 'hall' when referring to a building or place for gatherings.

× Also we make cosignale, which is, uh, traditional food in our country.

✓ Also, we make cosignale, which is a traditional food in our country.

The article 'a' is needed before 'traditional food' to correctly modify the noun phrase.

× Also we have a Christmas tree and we have a, the Christmas table where we umm, yeah.

✓ Also, we have a Christmas tree and we have a Christmas table where we, um, yeah.

The phrase 'a, the Christmas table' is incorrect; only one article should be used. 'A Christmas table' is appropriate here.

× Yes I do, because home is my, uh, comfortable place and I do like to spend time. It's my home.

✓ Yes, I do, because home is my comfortable place and I like to spend time there. It's my home.

The phrase 'I do like to spend time' is awkward; 'I like to spend time there' is clearer. Also, adding 'there' clarifies the location.

× Yes, I go to busy Holiday because I love meeting friends, meeting families, have a communication about them, talking about past life or the future, spending time together and that's amazing.

✓ Yes, I go to busy holidays because I love meeting friends, meeting family, having communication with them, talking about past life or the future, spending time together and that's amazing.

'Holiday' should be plural 'holidays' to match the context. 'Families' is better as 'family' when referring collectively. 'Have a communication about them' is corrected to 'having communication with them' for grammatical accuracy.

× Well, exciting holiday is much better for me because, uh, there's more emotions.

✓ Well, an exciting holiday is much better for me because, uh, there are more emotions.

The phrase 'exciting holiday' needs the indefinite article 'an'. Also, 'there's' (there is) should be 'there are' to agree with the plural noun 'emotions'.

× There's, uh, uh, there's many laughing, maybe loving kindness and that's, that's better, I think to spend a lot of time for your family and show emotions.

✓ There is, uh, a lot of laughing, maybe loving kindness, and that's, that's better, I think, to spend a lot of time with your family and show emotions.

'There's many laughing' is incorrect; 'There is a lot of laughing' is correct. Also, 'spend a lot of time for your family' should be 'spend a lot of time with your family' to use the correct preposition.