Gifts— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Reduce hesitation and repetition, use a clear topic sentence, add one specific example with a linking phrase, and keep it concise (max 5 sentences). Pronoun and article use should be corrected (e.g., “my family” not “the same with my family”).

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy giving gifts. For example, I always buy my husband a watch for our anniversary because he likes practical accessories, and I ask my family about their preferences before I choose presents.

Sugestão: Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement: “I usually give”), avoid filler words, and organize the answer with a topic sentence followed by a contrasting detail using a linking word like “also” or “however.” Be specific about what you do on ordinary days.

Exemplo: I usually give gifts on special occasions such as holidays, birthdays and anniversaries. I also like to surprise people on ordinary days with small treats like homemade cookies or a handwritten note.

Sugestão: Make a clear topic sentence and use more natural phrasing: “I consider the recipient’s preferences.” Avoid mixed-up expressions and incorrect phrases (e.g., “my husband is fun to watch us” unclear). Provide a concrete example and link it to the general principle.

Exemplo: I consider the recipient’s tastes and hobbies when choosing a gift. For instance, because my husband likes watches and often checks time, I usually buy him a stylish watch that suits his daily style.

Sugestão: Use correct tense and concise structure: say “Yes, I have given handmade gifts.” Avoid unfinished sentences and reduce fillers. Add a specific detail about occasions or reactions to make it richer.

Exemplo: Yes, I have given handmade gifts. For example, I often bake pies and cookies for friends’ birthdays, and they always tell me how much they appreciate the personal touch.

Sugestão: Clarify your opinion with a clear topic sentence and correct grammar (e.g., “expensive gifts” not “expenses gifts”). Remove hesitations and provide reasons with linking words like “because” or “because of.” Fix unclear phrases such as “there you twin.”

Exemplo: No, I don't think expensive gifts express feelings better. I believe thoughtful presents show more care because they reflect the recipient’s tastes and the effort you put into choosing or making them.

× Yes, I think I'm really good at giving, giving gifts.

✓ Yes, I think I'm really good at giving gifts.

The repeated gerund 'giving, giving' is redundant and ungrammatical. Use a single gerund 'giving' as the noun form of the verb to indicate the activity. Remove the duplicate to make the sentence concise and correct.

× For example, with my husband I usually, uh, give him gifts for anniversaries and the same with my family for birthdays and many other uh, special dates.

✓ For example, I usually give my husband gifts for our anniversaries and give my family gifts for birthdays and other special occasions.

The phrase 'with my husband' is awkward; use the subject 'I' and a direct object 'my husband'. 'For anniversaries' is acceptable but 'our anniversaries' is clearer. 'Special dates' is better expressed as 'special occasions'. Rearranging improves natural word order and clarity.

× And however, I like to know about what they prefer and give them a good gift.

✓ However, I like to know what they prefer so I can give them a suitable gift.

Sentence had redundant conjunctions ('and however') and awkward phrasing 'know about what they prefer'. Use 'know what they prefer' and add purpose clause 'so I can give them a suitable gift' to clarify intent and correct verb usage.

× Like I said, I usually gives gifts to others in a special dates day, holidays, birthdays, anniversaries, or San Valentine's Days, umm.

✓ Like I said, I usually give gifts to others on special days such as holidays, birthdays, anniversaries, or Valentine's Day.

The verb 'gives' incorrectly uses third-person singular while subject 'I' requires 'give'. Use the preposition 'on' with 'days' and correct 'San Valentine's Days' to 'Valentine's Day'. Also 'special dates day' is redundant; use 'special days'.

× Additionally, I also enjoy giving gifts in other uh, days that are not very special but for me are like small details that I want to have with them.

✓ Additionally, I also enjoy giving gifts on other days that are not very special but for me are small gestures to share with them.

Use preposition 'on' for days ('on other days'). 'Small details that I want to have with them' is unnatural; 'small gestures to share with them' conveys intended meaning. Keep 'also' or 'additionally' but avoid redundancy.

× I usually consider what they want, uh their preference and what are they are enjoying more.

✓ I usually consider what they want, their preferences, and what they enjoy most.

Incorrect word order 'what are they are enjoying more' and inconsistent singular/plural 'preference' vs 'preferences'. Use direct object order 'what they enjoy most' and plural 'preferences' to match 'they'.

× And for instance, my husband is fun to watch us and I like to give him watches.

✓ For instance, my husband enjoys watching us, and I like to give him watches.

Original 'my husband is fun to watch us' is ungrammatical. Use 'my husband enjoys watching us' or 'it's fun for my husband to watch us'. Also add comma and conjunction for clarity.

× Yes, I have been given other gifts, handmade gifts like umm a pie.

✓ Yes, I have given others handmade gifts, like a pie.

The original 'I have been given other gifts' uses passive voice incorrectly—meaning changes to receiving gifts. The student meant to say they gave others gifts, so active 'I have given others handmade gifts' is correct. Also place 'handmade' before 'gifts'.

× I like bakery so sometimes I made pies or cookies for them and they appreciate it very much.

✓ I like baking, so sometimes I make pies or cookies for them and they appreciate it very much.

Use present tense 'I make' to match habitual action rather than past 'I made'. 'I like bakery' is incorrect; use 'I like baking'. Maintain tense consistency for habitual actions.

× Additionally, I.

✓ Additionally, I sometimes give small handmade gifts.

The fragment 'Additionally, I.' lacks a verb and object, so it's a sentence without a verb. Provide a complete clause describing the intended action; here 'I sometimes give small handmade gifts' completes the thought.

× Now, I don't think so.

✓ No correction needed.

This short reply is grammatical and natural; no article or other errors present.

× I don't think, uh, expenses gifts are better than others just because they are expensive.

✓ I don't think expensive gifts are better than others just because they cost more.

'Expenses gifts' is incorrect; the adjective should be 'expensive'. Also 'because they are expensive' is repetitive; 'because they cost more' avoids repetition.

× I think the most important things that we are, uh, giving a gift for someone is there you twin, uh, try your best and give the best that they wanted.

✓ I think the most important thing when giving a gift to someone is that you try your best and give what they want.

Original sentence has multiple structural problems: subject-verb agreement ('things... is'), unnecessary fillers, and unclear phrases ('there you twin'). Use singular 'thing' for the single idea, 'when giving a gift to someone' as a clear clause, and 'give what they want' for natural phrasing. Ensure subject-verb agreement and remove filler words.