Gifts— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be clearer and more natural: start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid grammar errors (tenses, word forms) and redundancy. Use linking words (for example, but, so) to connect ideas. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Not really. I usually feel shy when I give gifts, and I often blush, so I prefer to give presents on special occasions. For example, I always remember my friends’ birthdays and try to buy something small that suits their interests.

Sugestão: Answer directly and correct grammar (prepositions, word order). Provide one concrete reason with a linking word. Avoid awkward phrases like “make they feel proud”.

Exemplo: I usually give gifts on people’s birthdays because it shows I remember them and care about our relationship. For instance, sending a thoughtful card or a small present makes friends feel appreciated.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence (what you consider), then give a specific example. Use correct vocabulary (gift, not Gibbs) and avoid overgeneralizing personality types. Use linking words like “for example” and “therefore”.

Exemplo: I consider the recipient’s interests and hobbies when choosing a gift. For example, if someone likes reading I might buy a novel, but if they enjoy sports I’d choose something related to their favorite activity.

Sugestão: Be concise and coherent: answer yes/no directly, then explain with a clear reason and a specific example. Correct grammar and word choice (e.g., “handmade gift”, not “hammer gift”). Avoid confusing time phrases.

Exemplo: Yes, I have given handmade gifts. For instance, I once made a small photo album for a close friend to show appreciation, because I don’t have much free time but I value important relationships.

Sugestão: Answer directly (e.g., No) and explain why with clear grammar and vocabulary. Use linking words (because, however). Give a brief example contrasting expensive vs handmade gifts.

Exemplo: No, expensive gifts don’t necessarily express feelings better because a handmade or thoughtful gift often shows more care. For example, a handwritten letter or a homemade item can feel more personal than an expensive but impersonal present.

× I think I'm not really good at giving gifts because when giving present to somebody I feel a bit shy and my face getting red resigned.

✓ I think I'm not really good at giving gifts because when I give a present to somebody I feel a bit shy and my face gets red.

The sentence has multiple present tense and verb form errors. 'When giving present' should be 'when I give a present' to include a subject and correct verb form (present simple). 'my face getting red' is incorrect; use the present simple 'my face gets red' to describe a habitual reaction. Removed the word 'resigned' which is inappropriate here. Suggestion: use subject + base verb for habitual actions (I give, my face gets).

× When their birthdays come I will remember clearly and will give them.

✓ When their birthdays come I will remember clearly and give them gifts.

Redundant use of 'will' in coordinated verbs is unnecessary. Use 'will' once and then the base verb. Also add the object 'gifts' for clarity. This fits the future tense for planned actions.

× I usually give gifts to others in their birthdays.

✓ I usually give gifts to others on their birthdays.

Incorrect preposition 'in' should be 'on' for days and dates. Also 'their birthdays' is correct plural but the preposition must be 'on'. This is a present habitual action so use present simple, which is already used.

× I think it can bond our relationship and make make they feel proud of me because I can remember their birthday clearly.

✓ I think it can strengthen our relationship and make them feel appreciated because I remember their birthdays clearly.

Pronoun 'they' used as object should be 'them'. Repeated word 'make' removed. 'Proud of me' is unnatural for gift-giving; 'feel appreciated' better matches intent. 'I can remember' changed to simple present 'I remember' for habitual action. Also 'birthdays' plural matches 'their'.

× When choosing, I consider to find a Gibbs depending on their hobbies.

✓ When choosing, I consider finding a gift based on their hobbies.

After 'consider' use verb + -ing (consider finding), not 'consider to find'. 'Gibbs' is misspelled; use 'gift'. 'Depending on' is better phrased as 'based on' in this context.

× For example, introverts like reading book and extroverts like playing sports, so it is really hard to find a gift sealed for them.

✓ For example, introverts like reading books and extroverts like playing sports, so it is really hard to find the perfect gift for them.

Plural 'reading book' should be 'reading books'. 'Sealed' is incorrect word choice; use 'the perfect' or 'appropriate' to express suitability. Also article 'the' before 'perfect gift' improves clarity.

× Yes I have ever given had a hammer gift to others because it can help me show respect and bond our relationship.

✓ Yes, I have given a handmade hammer as a gift to others because it can help me show respect and strengthen our relationship.

'Have ever given had' is incorrect combination of auxiliary and past participle; use present perfect 'have given'. 'Had a hammer gift' is awkward; 'a handmade hammer as a gift' is clear. 'Bond our relationship' should be 'strengthen our relationship' for correct collocation.

× But most of the time in day I spend for studying so I always send it to important person.

✓ But most of the time during the day I spend studying, so I always give gifts to important people.

Incorrect preposition 'in day' should be 'during the day'. 'I spend for studying' should be 'I spend studying' or 'I spend time studying'. 'Send it to important person' is unclear; 'give gifts to important people' fits the context and pluralizes appropriately.

× Never because handmade Gibbs which can show their respects to me and bond a relationship can express me more than expect gifts.

✓ Never, because handmade gifts that show respect for someone and strengthen a relationship can express more than expensive gifts.

'Gibbs' corrected to 'gifts'. 'Which can show their respects to me' is awkward and incorrect pronoun use; instead 'that show respect for someone'. 'Express me' is ungrammatical; use 'express more' or 'convey more meaning'. 'Expect gifts' is a wrong word; 'expensive gifts' is intended (quantifier/adjective error).

× Moreover, I don't really care about too much about the price and I only care about their feeling.

✓ Moreover, I don't care too much about the price and I only care about their feelings.

The phrase 'don't really care about too much about' has duplicate 'about' and misplaced 'too much'; correct order is 'don't care too much about'. 'Their feeling' should be plural 'their feelings' to match general sense. This cleans up quantifier and noun number usage.