Money— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is generally clear but a bit confusing and lacks coherence. You should avoid unclear phrases like 'I had little phones' and incomplete sentences like 'that helps me actualize my.' Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and provide more specific details about the project or how the money helped you. Keep your answer concise and natural.

Exemplo: Yes, I have borrowed money from my friends and family before. For example, when I was starting a small business, I needed some funds to buy materials. Therefore, I asked my family for financial help, and they kindly supported me. This assistance helped me successfully launch my project.

Sugestão: Your answer addresses the question but could be improved by organizing your ideas more clearly and avoiding repetition like 'So I I'. Use linking words to connect your points logically. Also, try to explain why lending money to strangers gave you a negative impression, and give a specific example if possible. This will make your answer more detailed and natural.

Exemplo: Yes, I have lent money to people I did not know before. However, some of them did not repay me on time, which made me feel disappointed. Because of this experience, I usually avoid lending money to strangers now.

× It was a period where I had little phones and I was embarking on a project.

✓ It was a period where I had few phones and I was embarking on a project.

The word 'little' is used with uncountable nouns, but 'phones' is a countable noun, so 'few' should be used instead to indicate a small number.

× So I sought financial assistance from my family and friends and they were able to assist me and that helps me actualize my.

✓ So I sought financial assistance from my family and friends, and they were able to assist me, which helped me actualize my project.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks clarity. Adding 'which helped me actualize my project' completes the thought and improves sentence structure.

× Yes, I have lent money to others, especially people that I do not know and it gave me this negative impression about people generally.

✓ Yes, I have lent money to others, especially people whom I do not know, and it gave me a negative impression about people generally.

The relative pronoun 'that' should be 'whom' when referring to people as the object of the verb. Also, 'this negative impression' should be 'a negative impression' to indicate one of many possible impressions.

× So most times if I am in a position to lend someone money, I tend to draw back.

✓ So most times, if I am in a position to lend someone money, I tend to draw back.

A comma is needed after 'So most times' to separate the introductory phrase from the main clause for better readability.

× So I I have stopped lending money to others.

✓ So I have stopped lending money to others.

The repetition of 'I' is a typographical error and should be corrected to a single 'I' for proper sentence structure.