App— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ như 'get in touch with my extra classes' không chính xác. Bạn nên trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và sử dụng cấu trúc câu chính xác hơn để câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

Exemplo: I often use Messenger and Yellow to chat with my teachers and friends. These apps help me stay connected for my extra classes and improve my knowledge.

Sugestão: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý nghĩa khó hiểu. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh những cụm từ không chính xác để truyền đạt ý tưởng một cách hiệu quả hơn.

Exemplo: I usually like social media apps like Facebook because I can follow interesting people and learn about English and science.

Sugestão: Bạn nên sử dụng thành ngữ đúng cách ('once in a blue moon') và tránh lỗi chính tả như 'Blue Man'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên rõ ràng hơn và có cấu trúc mạch lạc để người nghe dễ hiểu.

Exemplo: I search for new apps once in a blue moon because popular social media apps like Facebook and Messenger are useful for me every day.

Sugestão: Câu trả lời có sự lặp lại và một số lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ như 'update some news with and groups' không rõ nghĩa. Bạn nên sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, tránh lặp từ và diễn đạt rõ ràng hơn.

Exemplo: I would like to try Instagram because it is popular in my country and Asia. It will help me stay updated with news and connect with groups.

× I often use Messenger and Yellow because I need to chat with my teachers and my friends to get in touch with my extra classes and enrich my knowledge.

✓ I often use Messenger and Yellow because I need to chat with my teachers and my friends to keep in touch with my extra classes and enrich my knowledge.

The phrase 'get in touch with' is usually used to mean initiating contact, but here the intended meaning is to maintain contact or stay connected, so 'keep in touch with' is more appropriate.

× I'm fond of using Facebook because there are many parts from one and people such as Obama or convey on Facebook for me to broaden my horizons in English or science.

✓ I'm fond of using Facebook because there are many posts from people such as Obama or celebrities on Facebook that help me broaden my horizons in English or science.

The original sentence uses 'parts from one' and 'or convey' incorrectly. 'Posts' is the correct noun for content on Facebook, and 'celebrities' or similar is appropriate instead of 'convey'. Also, the sentence structure is corrected for clarity.

× I search for some new apps once in a Blue Man because I think that some popular social media apps such as Facebook Daily or Messenger are quite useful for me to use everyday.

✓ I search for some new apps once in a blue moon because I think that some popular social media apps such as Facebook, Daily, or Messenger are quite useful for me to use every day.

The phrase 'once in a Blue Man' is incorrect; the correct idiom is 'once in a blue moon' meaning very rarely. Also, 'everyday' (adjective) should be 'every day' (adverb) here.

× I think that I will try using Instagram one day because I think that that is also a popular app in my country and some Asian countries. So I think that using Instagram will help me to update some news with and groups.

✓ I think that I will try using Instagram one day because it is also a popular app in my country and some Asian countries. So I think that using Instagram will help me to keep updated with news and groups.

The phrase 'help me to update some news with and groups' is unclear and incorrect. The correct expression is 'help me to keep updated with news and groups'. Also, 'that that' is redundant and simplified to 'it is'.