Party— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar and word choice (e.g., “lively atmosphere,” “we can play games”). Keep to no more than 3–4 short sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy parties because they have a lively atmosphere. For example, people often play games and chat, which makes them fun and sociable. Also, parties are a good chance to meet new people and relax.

Sugestão: Give a direct, complete answer with a frequency and a reason. Use linking words to contrast past and present if needed, and finish your thought. Avoid incomplete sentences.

Exemplo: I rarely had parties as a child because they were considered a luxury in my family. However, as I grew up, I attended more celebrations at school and with neighbors, so parties became more common.

Sugestão: Answer directly and give specific details in connected sentences. Use linking words to add information (e.g., “for example,” “we invited”). Correct grammar (e.g., “a lot of my friends”) and avoid fragmentary sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I organized a birthday party for my best friend Erica last year on September 9. For example, I invited about twenty friends, arranged games and a cake, and decorated the room, so everyone had a great time.

× A lady atmosphere there.

✓ There is a pleasant/ladylike atmosphere there.

The original phrase 'A lady atmosphere there.' lacks a verb and uses 'lady' as a noun where an adjective is expected; it also omits the required linking verb. Use 'There is' to introduce existence and an appropriate adjective: 'pleasant' or 'ladylike'. This fixes sentence structure and word form (use of adjective) and matches the conversation tense and style. Suggestion: Use 'There is a pleasant atmosphere there.' or 'There is a ladylike atmosphere there.'

× It is present in the joyful.

✓ It is present in the joyful -> It feels joyful there.

The original is ungrammatical and awkward: 'present in the joyful' misuses prepositions and noun forms. The intended meaning is likely that the atmosphere/setting feels joyful. Use a proper subject and verb phrase: 'It feels joyful there' or 'The atmosphere is joyful.' This corrects sentence structure and word choice.

× We can also play a games in parties which.

✓ We can also play games at parties.

Errors: 'a games' mixes singular article with plural noun; 'in parties' is less natural than 'at parties' for events; trailing 'which' is extraneous. Remove the article and 'which', and use 'games' plural with 'play' and preposition 'at'. Suggestion: 'We can also play games at parties.'

× How often did you have a party when you were a kid? -> When I was a kid, I really had parties because having a party was considered as a luxury at that moment.

✓ When I was a kid, I rarely had parties because having a party was considered a luxury back then.

Original used 'really had parties' which is semantically unclear; likely intended 'rarely' or 'not often'. 'considered as a luxury' is wordy and 'at that moment' is unnatural in this context. Use 'rarely' and 'considered a luxury back then' to fit past-tense narrative. This fixes adverb choice and natural past-tense phrasing.

× However, when I grew up.

✓ However, when I grew up, things changed.

This is a sentence fragment lacking a main clause (no result/main verb). Add a clause to complete the thought, e.g., 'things changed' or 'I began to have parties more often.' This fixes the sentence-without-verb problem and completes the past-tense idea.

× Yes, I used to organize a birthday party for my best friend Erica.

✓ Yes, I used to organize birthday parties for my best friend Erica.

'A birthday party' suggests a single event, but 'used to' indicates a habitual past action; use plural 'birthday parties' to match habitual meaning. This corrects noun number to match the past habitual tense.

× Last year it was on September 9th.

✓ Last year it was on September 9th -> It was on September 9th last year.

Word order is awkward; English prefers time expressions 'on September 9th last year' or 'last year, it was on September 9th.' Reordering improves naturalness and clarity.

× And lot of my friends.

✓ And a lot of my friends came/attended.

Original is a fragment lacking a verb and missing the article 'a' before 'lot.' Add a verb to complete the sentence, e.g., 'a lot of my friends came' or 'attended.' This fixes the sentence-without-verb error and article omission.