Traffic— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: คำตอบควรใช้ประโยคที่เป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น และควรมีโครงสร้างที่ชัดเจน เช่น เริ่มด้วยประโยคหลักที่ตอบคำถามโดยตรง จากนั้นเสริมรายละเอียดเพิ่มเติมโดยใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหล และใช้คำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสมกับบริบท เช่น 'There are many crosswalks around where I live because I live in the city center. For example, near my apartment, there is a shopping mall, so there are many crosswalks to help people cross the streets safely.'

Exemplo: There are many crosswalks around where I live because I live in the city center. For example, near my apartment, there is a shopping mall, so there are many crosswalks to help people cross the streets safely.

Sugestão: คำตอบควรมีโครงสร้างที่ชัดเจนและใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อเชื่อมโยงความคิด เช่น เริ่มด้วยประโยคหลักที่ตอบคำถามโดยตรง จากนั้นอธิบายเหตุผลและรายละเอียดเพิ่มเติมอย่างชัดเจน พร้อมใช้คำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสมและถูกต้อง เช่น 'Yes, I would like to improve the traffic situation in my city because there is a heavy traffic jam every morning from 7 to 9 am. This is the rush hour when people go to work and children go to school, which causes a lot of congestion.'

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to improve the traffic situation in my city because there is a heavy traffic jam every morning from 7 to 9 am. This is the rush hour when people go to work and children go to school, which causes a lot of congestion.

× In my city I have a lot of crosswalk because I stay in the center of city.

✓ In my city I have a lot of crosswalks because I stay in the center of the city.

The word 'crosswalk' should be plural 'crosswalks' because it refers to multiple crosswalks. Also, 'the center of city' needs the definite article 'the' before 'city' to specify the particular city.

× Nearby my accommodation is a shopping mall so that's why they have a lot of crosswalk to make people cross it.

✓ Near my accommodation, there is a shopping mall, so that's why there are a lot of crosswalks to help people cross safely.

The preposition 'Nearby' should be 'Near' to correctly indicate proximity. Also, 'they have a lot of crosswalk' is incorrect; 'there are a lot of crosswalks' is correct to indicate existence. Additionally, 'cross it' is vague; 'cross safely' is clearer.

× I would like to change the traffic in my city because of traffic jam since early morning 7:00 until 9:00 that time is busy business time at school.

✓ I would like to change the traffic in my city because of traffic jams from early morning 7:00 until 9:00; that time is busy because of school and business activities.

The phrase 'because of traffic jam' should be plural 'traffic jams' to indicate multiple occurrences. The preposition 'since' is incorrect here; 'from' is appropriate to indicate a time range. The sentence structure is improved by separating ideas with a semicolon and clarifying 'busy business time at school' to 'busy because of school and business activities.'