Traffic— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cevap genel olarak anlaşılır ancak daha doğal ve akıcı olması için cümle yapısını sadeleştirip bağlantı sözcüklerini doğru kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca ‘shops and groceries’ ifadesi yerine daha uygun ve doğal kelimeler kullanın (ör. ‘shops and grocery stores’). Cümleleri 2-3 kısa cümleye bölerek gereksiz tekrarları azaltın ve bir örnek ekleyin. Örnek: neden yayaların çok olduğunu belirten kısa bir neden ve bir spesifik örnek verin.

Exemplo: Yes, there are many crosswalks near my home. This is because there are several schools and grocery stores in the area, so lots of people walk. For example, I often see groups of students using the crosswalks after school.

Sugestão: İfade anlaşılır ama dilbilgisi ve kelime seçimi geliştirilmelidir. ‘on the finish of working hours’ gibi ifadeler doğal değil; bunun yerine ‘at the end of the working day’ veya ‘during rush hour’ kullanın. 'Rd.' yerine tam kelime 'road' veya 'route' tercih edin. Cümleyi iki kısa cümleye ayırın ve değiştirmek istediğiniz çözümü daha spesifik olarak belirtin (ör. yeni bir yol, trafik ışıklarının zamanlaması, toplu taşıma iyileştirmesi).

Exemplo: Yes, traffic is heavy during the day, especially at the end of the working day. I would like an alternative road or improved public transport to reduce congestion, such as a dedicated bus lane to speed up buses during rush hour.

× There are many crosswalks around the place I live because there are schools and many shops and groceries, so people usually go by walking.

✓ There are many crosswalks around the place I live because there are schools, many shops, and grocery stores, so people usually walk.

The sentence contains minor plural and word choice issues: 'groceries' as a noun often refers to items rather than places; 'grocery stores' is clearer. 'Go by walking' is unnatural — use the verb 'walk'. Also add commas in the list for clarity. Suggestion: use 'grocery stores' for places, and replace 'go by walking' with 'walk' to sound natural. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× There is a lot of traffic during the daytime, especially on the finish of working hours, so I would like to have another Rd. an alternative route in order to escape from the traffic and the crowd.

✓ There is a lot of traffic during the daytime, especially at the end of working hours, so I would like another road or an alternative route to avoid the traffic and the crowds.

Several preposition and word choice issues: use 'at the end of' rather than 'on the finish of'. Abbreviating 'Rd.' is unnecessary and 'road' should be used. 'In order to escape from' is wordy and not idiomatic; use 'to avoid'. 'Crowd' as a count noun often needs plural 'crowds' when referring to many groups of people. Suggestions: use 'at the end of working hours', 'another road or an alternative route', and 'to avoid the traffic and the crowds' for natural phrasing. Grammar problem type ID: 11