Shopping— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid filler words (e.g., "uh"). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Mention a reason or feeling to enrich the answer and use linking words to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy shopping at the weekend. I usually go to the mall with a friend and browse shops for small items like accessories and blind boxes, but I rarely buy anything because I’m saving money.

Sugestão: Good direct response and reason. Reduce informal self-description like "I'm a poor student," and use smoother linking (e.g., "so" or "therefore"). Add a specific example of comparing prices to make your answer more concrete.

Exemplo: Yes, I always compare prices because I have a limited budget. For example, I recently checked three stores and an online shop before buying a backpack, and I chose the online option because it was 20% cheaper.

Sugestão: Avoid repetition and grammatical errors. Use one clear topic sentence, then explain briefly why decisions are hard and give a specific strategy you use (link with "because" or "so"). Limit to three sentences maximum.

Exemplo: Yes, I find shopping decisions difficult because I worry about wasting money. For instance, if two items catch my eye, I compare their quality and usefulness before choosing one to avoid regret.

Sugestão: Provide a clear direct opinion first, then support it with a balanced reason and a specific example. Check grammar (e.g., "they can be used for longer"). Avoid unfinished sentences and use linking words like "however" and "for example."

Exemplo: Not necessarily. Expensive items are often higher quality and last longer; however, some inexpensive products work well for short-term use. For example, I bought an affordable kitchen tool that performs well despite its low price.

× Yes, I like shopping during the weekend.

✓ Yes, I like shopping on the weekend.

Use the preposition 'on' with 'weekend' when referring to a general habit; 'during the weekend' implies the whole period and is less natural for a simple habitual statement. Use 'on the weekend' or 'on weekends'. IDs: 6,11

× I always go to the shopping mall with my friend and go into different shops to see some products like uh, the blind box, uh, accessories and so on.

✓ I always go to the shopping mall with my friends and go into different shops to look at products like blind boxes, accessories, and so on.

Pluralize 'friend' to match habitual plural visits if speaker goes with more than one friend; if only one friend, keep singular but context suggests general habit so 'friends' is better. Use 'look at' rather than 'see' for examining products. Use plural forms for items and remove filler words. Also use commas for list consistency. IDs:1,12,26

× But I don't have a lot of money so I always just see it and don't buy it.

✓ But I don't have a lot of money so I usually just look at them and don't buy them.

Pronouns must agree in number with 'products' (plural), so use 'them' not 'it'. 'Usually' is a more natural adverb than 'always just see', and 'look at' better expresses examining items. IDs:27,12,13

× Yes, to be honest I'm a poor student so I don't have a lot of money.

✓ Yes, to be honest I'm a poor student, so I don't have a lot of money.

Add a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'so' connecting two independent clauses; the tense and meaning are correct. This is punctuation/structure clarification. IDs:6,26

× I will compare the price in different shops and choose the most cost effective one to buy it.

✓ I compare prices in different shops and choose the most cost-effective one to buy.

For habitual actions use present simple ('I compare') not 'will'. Use plural 'prices'. Use 'in' shops is acceptable but 'at' is also possible; remove redundant 'it' after 'buy'. Hyphenate 'cost-effective'. IDs:6,11,14

× Sometimes I even buy some products online because of its discount.

✓ Sometimes I even buy some products online because of their discounts.

Referent 'products' is plural, so use plural possessive pronoun 'their', not 'its'. Also 'discounts' plural or 'a discount' depending on context. IDs:12

× Yes, I'm that kind of person who have difficulties in making decisions.

✓ Yes, I'm that kind of person who has difficulties making decisions.

Subject 'who' refers to 'person' (singular) so use 'has' not 'have' (subject-verb agreement). Use 'making decisions' or 'in making decisions' — 'difficulties making decisions' is more natural. IDs:8,27

× When I watch 2 very beautiful things, I will choose one because I don't have enough money.

✓ When I see two very beautiful things, I choose one because I don't have enough money.

Spell out small numbers in speech ('two'). Use 'see' or 'find' instead of 'watch' for objects; for habitual choices use present simple ('I choose') rather than 'will'. IDs:6,26

× But it's difficult for me to make a choice because two of them are very beautiful.

✓ But it's difficult for me to make a choice because both of them are very beautiful.

Use 'both of them' to refer to two items clearly; 'two of them' implies a larger set. The rest of the sentence is fine. IDs:12,26

× Not at all, but most expensive products also have a higher quality and it can use for a longer time.

✓ Not at all, but most expensive products also have higher quality and can be used for a longer time.

Remove the definite article before 'higher quality' and use 'higher quality' without 'a'. Change passive/causative structure: 'can be used' is correct passive form; 'it can use' is incorrect. Ensure subject-verb agreement with plural 'products'. IDs:14,21,27

× While some cheap products will have a poor quality but sometimes it will be good but it's.

✓ Some cheap products have poor quality, but sometimes they are good.

Remove redundant conjunction 'while' and extra 'but'. Use plural pronoun 'they' to refer to 'products'. Use simple present for general truth ('have', 'are'). The original sentence is fragmented and repetitive; simplify the structure. IDs:12,26