Shopping— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more coherent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid hesitation sounds and unclear phrases. Focus on natural vocabulary (e.g., "browse" or "look around") and correct grammar (e.g., "shopping malls have many different brands; I can try products even if I don't buy them").

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy shopping because it helps me relax and take my mind off work. For example, I like going to shopping malls where I can browse many different brands and try products, even if I don’t buy anything. This makes the experience enjoyable and stress-relieving.

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence and a clear reason with a linking phrase. Remove repetitive and confusing words. Use specific examples of how you compare prices (online apps, checking labels) to add detail and credibility.

Exemplo: Yes, I always compare prices because I want to get the best value for money. For instance, I check prices online and in different stores before buying electronic items, and I often use price-comparison apps to make sure I save money.

Sugestão: Answer directly then give a clear, specific example. Reduce hesitations and avoid unclear phrases. Explain why choices are difficult (too many options, similar products) and mention a simple strategy you use to decide (read reviews, set a budget).

Exemplo: Sometimes I find it hard to choose because there are so many similar options. For example, when I buy snacks I often spend a long time comparing flavors and brands, so now I set a small budget and pick products with the best reviews to decide faster.

Sugestão: Give a balanced opinion with clear reasoning and a linking word for contrast. Avoid contradictory and confusing phrasing. Provide a specific example comparing an expensive item and a cheap alternative to illustrate your point.

Exemplo: I don't think expensive products are always better; often they have higher quality and last longer, but not always. For example, a well-known brand laptop may be more reliable than a cheap one, but for everyday items like phone chargers a mid-range option can work just as well.

× Yes, I really enjoy shopping because shopping can relieve my stress.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy shopping because it relieves my stress.

Repeating 'shopping' and using 'can relieve' is awkward here. Use a pronoun 'it' to avoid repetition and simple present 'relieves' to state a habitual fact.

× Uh, why shopping for the shopping mall?

✓ I like going to shopping malls because...

The original is ungrammatical word order and question form. Change to a declarative phrase 'I like going to shopping malls' to answer the examiner's question; keep plural 'malls' if general.

× I can see there are many different different brands on the stores and I can enter it to take a seat to Guinness as this product.

✓ I can see there are many different brands in the stores, and I can go in to look at products I like.

Use 'in' for locations ('brands in the stores'). 'Enter it to take a seat to Guinness' is nonsensical; replace with 'go in to look at products' to convey the intended meaning.

× And if it doesn't matter if I don't buy it?

✓ And it doesn't matter if I don't buy anything.

Original has awkward word order and unclear pronoun reference. Use 'it doesn't matter' + 'if I don't buy anything' for clarity and correctness.

× Hi, yes, I really compare prices when you shop because maybe I need you because I need a cheaper, I need to buy products so cheaper and and on the other hand, I need to save money.

✓ Yes, I really compare prices when I shop because I want to buy cheaper products and, on the other hand, I need to save money.

Use 'I' not 'you' and correct verb forms: 'when I shop' (not 'when you shop'). 'I want to buy cheaper products' replaces awkward phrasing. Remove duplicate words and fix word order.

× So, uh, I think I need to compare prices.

✓ So I think I need to compare prices.

Remove filler 'uh' and extra comma for concise, natural speech. The sentence is otherwise correct.

× Well, uh, sometimes it's very difficult for me to make choices when you shop, uh, for example, uh, when I, when I shop, when I was shopping, I just to take some, I just took a seat of the snack.

✓ Well, sometimes it's very difficult for me to make choices when I shop. For example, when I was shopping, I just chose some snacks.

Replace 'you' with 'I' to match speaker. Use consistent tense: present habit 'when I shop' and past 'when I was shopping' for a specific event. 'I just took a seat of the snack' is incorrect; use 'I just chose some snacks'.

× Uh, I was very far, very difficult to make choices, but by or not.

✓ I found it very difficult to make choices and couldn't decide which to buy.

Original is fragmented and uses incorrect words ('far'). Provide a clear, grammatical expression: 'found it very difficult' and 'couldn't decide which to buy'.

× Well, I think that may be expensive products maybe are always cheaper than better than cheaper ones, because other expensive products maybe have a good quality on it.

✓ Well, I think that expensive products may be better than cheaper ones because expensive items often have better quality.

Original mixes contradictory words 'cheaper than better than cheaper'. Use clear comparative structure: 'better than cheaper ones'. Use 'may be' for possibility and 'often have better quality' for generalization.

× So maybe I can use it for a long time.

✓ So I might be able to use them for a long time.

Match number: 'products' plural -> 'them'. 'Might be able to' is more natural modal expression for possibility.

× I don't really worry about the sun sometimes products breakdown I think.

✓ I don't really worry about them breaking down sometimes, I think.

Original word order and vocabulary are incorrect ('sun', 'products breakdown'). Use 'breaking down' for malfunction and correct pronoun 'them'. Place 'sometimes' appropriately.