Work— Part 1 Báo cáo
Cuộc hội thoại
Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you work or are you a student?
Thí sinh
I'm currently working as a producer at a film studio. I have been working here for three years and my responsibilities involve managing film production and developing marketing strategies. I'm really passionate about making engaging films.
Giám khảo
Where do you work?>
Thí sinh
Our company is located in Pangbadong, which is the northern part of Seoul. Generally, it takes an hour to commute because of the heavy traffic during the rush hour. However, occasionally I work remotely from home because our schedule is very flexible.
Giám khảo
Is it a good place to work?
Thí sinh
To be honest, it's a very challenging place to work because my boss is really spontaneous and unpredictable, so I cannot organize my task. For example, yesterday he changed our schedule at the last minute.
Giám khảo
Would you like the place where you work?
Thí sinh
Yeah, I really love the place where I work. The key factor is that there is a French International School, which means there are a lot of bakeries nearby, so I can enjoy savory and delicious breads whenever I want.
Giám khảo
What are your future work plans?
Thí sinh
In the future, I plan to become a professional screenwriter, especially, I really love watching comedy films like The Hangover or We're the Millers. So I'm considering writing my own script based on my personal experience.
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Part 1
Do you work or are you a student?
Điểm: 90.0Gợi ý: 답변이 자연스럽고 명확하지만, 문장 길이가 조금 길어 다소 복잡하게 느껴질 수 있습니다. 간결하게 핵심을 전달하면서도 구체적인 내용을 포함하는 연습이 필요합니다.
Ví dụ: I work as a producer at a film studio, where I've been for three years. I manage film production and develop marketing strategies. I really enjoy creating engaging films.
Where do you work?
Điểm: 92.0Gợi ý: 답변이 구체적이고 논리적으로 연결되어 좋습니다. 다만, 'Pangbadong'이라는 지명 발음이나 설명이 조금 더 명확하면 좋겠습니다.
Ví dụ: Our company is in Pangbadong, a northern area of Seoul. Usually, my commute takes about an hour due to rush hour traffic. However, sometimes I work from home because our schedule is flexible.
Is it a good place to work?
Điểm: 88.0Gợi ý: 답변이 솔직하고 구체적이지만, 부정적인 표현을 조금 더 부드럽게 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다. 또한, 연결어 사용을 조금 더 다양하게 하면 좋겠습니다.
Ví dụ: It can be challenging to work there because my boss is quite spontaneous and changes plans often. For instance, he changed our schedule at the last minute yesterday.
Would you like the place where you work?
Điểm: 90.0Gợi ý: 답변이 자연스럽고 구체적이지만, 'Yeah' 대신 좀 더 공식적인 표현을 사용하면 좋겠습니다. 또한, 이유를 더 명확하게 연결하는 표현을 연습하세요.
Ví dụ: Yes, I really like my workplace. One reason is that there is a French International School nearby, so many bakeries are around, allowing me to enjoy delicious breads anytime.
What are your future work plans?
Điểm: 93.0Gợi ý: 답변이 구체적이고 명확하며 자연스럽습니다. 다만, 'especially' 대신 'for example' 같은 연결어를 사용하면 더 자연스러울 수 있습니다.
Ví dụ: In the future, I plan to become a professional screenwriter. For example, I really enjoy comedy films like The Hangover and We're the Millers, so I want to write my own script based on my experiences.
Ngữ pháp
× Our company is located in Pangbadong, which is the northern part of Seoul.
✓ Our company is located in Pangbadong, which is in the northern part of Seoul.
The preposition 'in' is necessary to indicate the location within a larger area. Saying 'which is the northern part of Seoul' without 'in' is incomplete and grammatically incorrect. Adding 'in' clarifies that Pangbadong is situated within the northern part of Seoul.
× I cannot organize my task.
✓ I cannot organize my tasks.
The noun 'task' should be pluralized to 'tasks' because it refers to multiple responsibilities. Using the singular form 'task' here is incorrect as it implies only one task, which is unlikely in this context.
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