Hometown— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more accurate and natural in phrases and grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct prepositions and articles, avoid redundancy, and limit length to 3–4 concise sentences. Give one or two specific details (e.g., notable places or size).

Ví dụ: I come from Maharaj, a large village in Punjab in northern India. It has a busy market and good primary schools, so many basic amenities are available. I enjoy living there because of the close community.

Gợi ý: Answer directly with a topic sentence and then give specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid vague phrases like "and so on." Mention one or two examples and explain why you like them.

Ví dụ: I especially like the strong community spirit in my hometown. For example, the local Sikh temple organises free meals and festivals, and the parks provide safe places for families to exercise and relax.

Gợi ý: Be clear and factual about time. Use correct tense and numbers. Start with a clear statement of duration, then add one concise supporting detail about family or schooling. Avoid confusing or incorrect numbers.

Ví dụ: I lived there from birth until I was 21 years old. During that time I grew up with my siblings, made many friends at school, and completed my education locally.

Gợi ý: Give a direct opinion followed by specific reasons using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., remove repeated words, fix tense) and avoid vague terms. Limit to 3–4 sentences and provide concrete examples of opportunities for youth.

Ví dụ: Yes, I think my hometown is suitable for young people because there are several recently opened training centres and vocational institutes. For instance, a new computer skills centre offers evening courses, and parks and community centres host sports and volunteer programmes.

× I basically belong from Maharaj.

✓ I basically come from Maharaj.

'Belong' is not followed by 'from' to indicate origin. Use 'come from' or 'am from' to express place of origin. Use 'I basically come from Maharaj' for natural phrasing.

× There's so many amenities are available for people.

✓ There are so many amenities available for people.

Using 'there's' (there is) with the plural noun 'amenities' is incorrect. Use 'there are' for plural subjects and remove the extra 'are' after 'amenities' to avoid redundancy.

× There are many things which are really liked about my hometown, such as Sikh temple, parks, community services as well as recreational activities and so on.

✓ There are many things I really like about my hometown, such as a Sikh temple, parks, community services, and recreational activities.

Use of article before 'Sikh temple' is needed ('a Sikh temple') unless a specific temple is meant. The phrase 'which are really liked' is awkward; use active voice 'I really like'. Remove 'and so on' for conciseness and add commas for list clarity.

× From born till 721, I spent my time in my hometown, with my siblings, with my family and friends.

✓ From birth until 2021, I spent my early years in my hometown with my siblings, family, and friends.

The phrase 'From born till 721' is ungrammatical and unclear. Use 'from birth' or 'since I was born' and correct the year if intended ('2021' assumed). Also streamline list punctuation and replace 'spent my time' with 'spent my early years' for clarity.

× I made lot of friends during my school days.

✓ I made a lot of friends during my school days.

'Lot' requires an article or quantifier: 'a lot of' is the correct form in this context.

× I completed my studies.

✓ I completed my studies.

This sentence is grammatically correct in past tense; no change needed.

× If young people prefer to learn new skills as well as put their confidence, they they can usually learn at my hometown because there are so many educational hubs are open recently, as well as so many amenities such as parks, community services and so on.

✓ If young people want to learn new skills and build their confidence, they can usually do so in my hometown because many educational hubs have opened recently, and there are many amenities such as parks and community services.

Multiple issues: 'prefer to' was awkward—use 'want to' or 'prefer' with parallel structure. 'Put their confidence' is incorrect; use 'build their confidence'. Remove duplicated 'they'. 'Learn at my hometown' should be 'do so in my hometown'. Use present perfect 'have opened recently' for recent change. Remove redundant 'are' after 'hubs' and avoid 'and so on'.