Part 1
Giám khảo
Where is your hometown?
Thí sinh
My hometown is Tsunami Prefecture in Tokyo. It is located in a downtown area, so it is very comfortable to relax and unwind. Moreover, it has great transportation which allows me to travel to big cities.
Giám khảo
What do you like about your home town?
Thí sinh
What I like about my hometown is the friendly atmosphere. I get along well with my neighbors. And I sometimes exchange quick conversations which makes me easier to stay there.
Giám khảo
How long have you lived there?
Thí sinh
I live, I have, I had lived there, uh, since I was born, but I moved from there to another city to enroll in my university. So now I don't live there and I live on my own.
Giám khảo
Is your home town a good place for young people?
Thí sinh
Yes, I think so. My hometown has some shops such as convenience stores and ramen shops, which I encourage the young generations to stay actively. Moreover, as I mentioned, it has great transportation.
Where is your hometown?
Điểm: 62.0Gợi ý: 発音と地名の正確さに注意し、冗長な表現を避けて簡潔に答えること。最初に明確な主題文(場所の説明)を述べ、その後に1〜2つの具体的な詳細を述べると良いです。例として「Tsunami Prefecture」は実在しない・誤解を招く可能性があるため、正しい地名を使うか「a ward of Tokyo」などの表現を使ってください。また、“comfortable to relax and unwind”は場所の説明としてやや曖昧なので、具体例(公園やカフェ)を入れると自然です。
Ví dụ: I’m from a central ward of Tokyo called [correct ward name]. It’s a lively downtown area with several parks and cozy cafés, so it’s easy to relax there. Also, the excellent public transport makes it convenient to get to other major cities.
What do you like about your home town?
Điểm: 58.0Gợi ý: 回答をより自然に流れるようにし、文法と語順を整えてください。冒頭で主張を述べ(topic sentence)、その後で具体例を1つ加えると良いです。接続語(for example, because, which)を使うと論理が明確になります。また“makes me easier to stay there”は不自然なので“makes me feel comfortable living there”などに直してください。
Ví dụ: I like the friendly atmosphere of my hometown because people are very approachable. For example, my neighbors often stop by for a short chat, which makes me feel comfortable living there.
How long have you lived there?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: 時制と文の構造を整理して、簡潔に答えてください。質問は現在完了形で継続期間を尋ねていますが、学生は過去と現在を混同しています。まず結論(I lived there until I left for university)を述べ、続けて具体的な期間や現在の状況を1文で補足してください。言い直しや詰まりを減らすため、練習で短くはっきり言う癖をつけましょう。
Ví dụ: I lived in my hometown from birth until I moved away to attend university. I don’t live there now because I’m living on my own in the city where I study.
Is your home town a good place for young people?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 回答をもっと具体的にして理由を明確に述べてください。『shops such as convenience stores and ramen shops』は具体性に欠けるので、どのように若者にとって魅力的か(仕事、娯楽、交通の利便性など)を示してください。語法も修正し、“encourage the young generations to stay actively”は不自然なので“encourage young people to stay”や“appeal to young people”などに直すと自然です。接続語で理由と結果をつなぎましょう。
Ví dụ: Yes, I think it is. There are plenty of affordable shops and casual restaurants that appeal to young people, and good transport links make commuting or going out very convenient, so many young adults choose to live there.
× My hometown is Tsunami Prefecture in Tokyo.
✓ My hometown is Tsunami Prefecture in Tokyo.
No correction needed; sentence is grammatically fine.(訂正不要:文法的に問題ありません)
× It is located in a downtown area, so it is very comfortable to relax and unwind.
✓ It is located in a downtown area, so it is very comfortable to relax and unwind there.
Add 'there' to clarify the location where it is comfortable to relax; without it the sentence is slightly awkward.(『there』を追加して、どこでリラックスできるかを明確にします。)」},{