Hometown— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence naming your hometown and your feeling about it, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid hesitation words (um, uh) and redundant phrases. Use correct collocations (e.g., "communication" not "communicate") and simpler sentence structures to improve fluency and clarity.

Ví dụ: I come from Taipei, but I don't really feel at home there. Although Taipei is safe, I find it hard to connect with people, and that lack of close community makes me feel less comfortable living there.

Gợi ý: Begin with a clear topic sentence stating what you like, then give specific details using linking words (for example, moreover, and). Avoid repetition ("also" twice) and tighten sentences to stay within the 5-sentence limit. Use descriptive vocabulary (e.g., "coastline," "mild climate") to show range.

Ví dụ: I like the natural scenery of my hometown. For example, the island has rugged mountains and a long coastline where I often go hiking and walk along the beach. Moreover, the climate is mild even in summer, so it is comfortable for outdoor activities.

Gợi ý: Use correct tense and a clear structure: start with a concise time statement ("I've lived there since I was born") then add 1–2 specific supporting details with linking words. Fix grammar ("I've lived" not "I lived"), and avoid repetition. Provide concrete examples of memories or friendships.

Ví dụ: I've lived there since I was born, so I have known the place my whole life. As a result, it holds many memories for me, such as childhood festivals and friends I grew up with, which make the town feel special.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear direct answer (yes/no and why), use linking words (because, however, for example) and give specific reasons with brief examples. Remove filler words and correct phrasing ("high rents" not "high rents of"). Conclude the point in one sentence. Keep sentences coherent and grammatical.

Ví dụ: No, I don't think it's a good place for young people because rent is very high, so many cannot afford to live independently. Also, the city is crowded and noisy, which makes it hard for young people to concentrate on studying or working.

× 'To be honest, Taipei is not a place that I really feel at home.'

✓ 'To be honest, Taipei is not a place where I really feel at home.'

'Feel at home' should be linked to a relative clause introduced by where, not that. Use where to refer to a place. Also the phrasing "feel at home" fits after where.'

× 'Many people think hometown is a place that makes you feel safe and comfortable in everything you do.'

✓ 'Many people think a hometown is a place that makes you feel safe and comfortable in everything you do.'

The noun 'hometown' needs an article here. Use 'a hometown' to refer to the general concept. Omitting the article is incorrect in this context.'

× 'Umm, in my opinions, safety is important, but communicate is also really important to me.'

✓ 'Umm, in my opinion, safety is important, but communication is also really important to me.'

'In my opinion' is the correct fixed phrase (singular). 'Communicate' is a verb; the noun 'communication' is needed here to contrast with 'safety'.'

× 'My hometown is an island with many mountains and beautiful natural scenery.'

✓ 'My hometown is an island with many mountains and beautiful natural scenery.'

'This sentence is grammatically correct; articles are used properly and no change is needed.'

× 'For example, you can go hiking and walking along the beach.'

✓ 'For example, you can go hiking and walk along the beach.'

When using 'can' with two verbs in parallel, use the base form for both: 'go hiking' (verb + -ing) and 'walk' (base verb) rather than 'walking.' Alternatively, use 'go hiking and walking' as a paired activity, but parallel structure with 'can' is clearer as 'go hiking and walk.' '

× 'The weather is also pleasant, and even in the summer you can also feel comfortable.'

✓ 'The weather is also pleasant, and even in the summer you can feel comfortable.'

Using both 'also' and 'even' is redundant. Remove the extra adverb to improve clarity.'

× 'I lived there since I was born there, carries a lot of memories and builds a lot of friendship in these places.'

✓ 'I have lived there since I was born; it carries a lot of memories and has built many friendships in those places.'

'Since' with a starting point requires the present perfect tense ('have lived') to show an action continuing to the present. 'Carries' should agree with singular subject 'it' and 'has built' uses present perfect to show ongoing result; 'friendships' is the correct plural noun and 'many' is a better quantifier than 'a lot of.' Also avoid repeating 'there.' '

× 'So this is this reason is the thing that makes my hometown feel unique.'

✓ 'So this is the reason that makes my hometown feel unique.'

The original repeats 'this' and has an awkward structure. Remove the extra word and use a relative clause 'reason that makes' for clarity.'

× 'I don't think this is a good place for young people.'

✓ 'I don't think it is a good place for young people.'

Using 'this' is acceptable in speech, but in formal correction 'it' more naturally refers back to the hometown. No major grammar error; this suggestion improves reference clarity.'

× 'It is because we have a lot, we have the high rents of and the young people cannot afford it.'

✓ 'It is because rents are high and young people cannot afford them.'

Original is ungrammatical and wordy. Use plural 'rents' with 'are high' and refer back with 'them.' Remove unnecessary phrases for clearer subject-verb structure.'

× 'And also, uh, this place is pretty crowded and you cannot really focus what you wanted to do in this place.'

✓ 'Also, this place is pretty crowded and you cannot really focus on what you want to do here.'

Place 'also' at the start for smoother flow; use 'focus on' (preposition required) and match tense/person: 'want' (present) because talking about general ability, not past; use 'here' to avoid repetition of 'in this place.' '

× 'So I don't.'

✓ 'So I don't think it's suitable for young people.'

'So I don't.' is an incomplete sentence in formal writing/speaking. Complete the thought to mirror the earlier statement ('I don't think it is a good place for young people').'