Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you often wear jewelry?
Thí sinh
I don't really wear jewelry. As you can see, I'm a Muslim. I have to wear hijabs all the time and even if I wear jewelry, I'll be hiding beneath my clothes, which I feel there's no point of wearing it.
Giám khảo
What type of jewelry do you like?
Thí sinh
I love earrings, especially when I just got my piercing and and I also like necklace because sometimes I often feel like my neck is too empty to just match with my clothes. Make it style stylish. I feel like I need some new necklace too.
Giám khảo
Do you usually buy jewelry?
Thí sinh
I don't really buy jewelry since my parents don't really give me money for that and just like what I said, I don't even worry it because it can't be shown, it would just be beneath my clothes. So just to save the money I don't really buy it no matter online or in the physical store.
Giám khảo
Why do you think some people wear a piece of jewelry for a long time?
Thí sinh
I think that person might just be too into that piece of jewelleries or maybe someone else who's important to him or her bought it for for that person, that's why he's keep on wearing the same piece of jewelry every day. Which I kind of wants to have the same experience too because to me, apart from my parents, no one else is important to me in my life.
Do you often wear jewelry?
Điểm: 75.0Gợi ý: Try to make your answer more concise and avoid redundancy. For example, you can say directly that you don't wear jewelry because it is hidden under your clothes due to wearing hijabs. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.
Ví dụ: I don't often wear jewelry because, as a Muslim who wears hijabs, my jewelry would be hidden beneath my clothes, so I feel it's pointless to wear them.
What type of jewelry do you like?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: Focus on giving a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.
Ví dụ: I like earrings, especially after getting my piercing, because they add charm. I also enjoy wearing necklaces since they make my neck look less plain and complement my outfits.
Do you usually buy jewelry?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Avoid repeating the same idea and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.
Ví dụ: I usually don't buy jewelry because my parents don't give me money for it. Besides, since my jewelry would be hidden under my clothes, I don't see the point in spending money on it.
Why do you think some people wear a piece of jewelry for a long time?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: Make your answer more structured by starting with a clear topic sentence, then giving specific reasons with linking words. Avoid incomplete sentences and improve grammar for clarity.
Ví dụ: Some people wear the same piece of jewelry for a long time because they are emotionally attached to it, especially if it was a gift from someone important. I also wish to have such meaningful experiences, as only my parents are very important to me.
× I feel like I need some new necklace too.
✓ I feel like I need some new necklaces too.
The word 'necklace' is countable and in this context, 'some' implies plural, so the noun should be pluralized to 'necklaces' to agree with the quantifier.
× I think that person might just be too into that piece of jewelleries or maybe someone else who's important to him or her bought it for for that person, that's why he's keep on wearing the same piece of jewelry every day.
✓ I think that person might just be too into that piece of jewellery or maybe someone else who's important to him or her bought it for that person, that's why he keeps on wearing the same piece of jewelry every day.
The word 'jewelleries' is incorrect because 'jewellery' is an uncountable noun and does not have a plural form. Also, 'he's keep' is incorrect; the correct form is 'he keeps' to agree with the third person singular subject.
× that's why he's keep on wearing the same piece of jewelry every day.
✓ that's why he keeps on wearing the same piece of jewelry every day.
In the present simple tense, the verb must agree with the third person singular subject. 'He' requires the verb form 'keeps' instead of 'keep'.