Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you write a lot?
Thí sinh
I usually ride because I want to record my life. For example, I prepared a diary for myself and I would write every single week.
Giám khảo
What do you like to write? Why?
Thí sinh
I will write argumentative essays to practice my English skills, or I record the precious moments that happen in my life to avoid forgetting them.
Giám khảo
Do you think the things you write would change?
Thí sinh
Yes, I think the things that I write would sometimes change because life is not a straight Rd. that would go to the direct consequence and they sometimes have little branches that would go to a different consequence.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer typing or handwriting when you are writing?
Thí sinh
I prefer handwriting because this is the traditional way to express our feelings and I really enjoy in this process.
Giám khảo
How often do you keep diaries?
Thí sinh
I often write my diary once a week to record the things that happened in this week. This is the usual way how I preserve my precious memories and to thank the people who helped me in my daily life.
Giám khảo
What other methods do you use to record your life?
Thí sinh
I sometimes write essays about the hilarious things or touching things that happened in my life to preserve these precious memories.
Do you write a lot?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 你的回答中有语法错误和用词不当,例如“ride”应为“write”,建议注意单词拼写和表达的准确性。此外,回答可以更简洁自然,避免冗余。
Ví dụ: Yes, I write quite often because I like to record my life. For example, I keep a diary and write in it every week.
What do you like to write? Why?
Điểm: 75.0Gợi ý: 回答内容较好,但可以使用连接词使句子更连贯,同时丰富细节,使表达更具体。
Ví dụ: I like to write argumentative essays to improve my English skills, and I also record precious moments in my life so that I don't forget them.
Do you think the things you write would change?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 回答中有语法和表达不清的问题,建议简化句子结构,使用更准确的词汇,并避免拼写错误(如“Rd.”应为“road”)。
Ví dụ: Yes, I think what I write can change because life is unpredictable and sometimes events lead to different outcomes.
Do you prefer typing or handwriting when you are writing?
Điểm: 80.0Gợi ý: 回答较好,但“enjoy in this process”表达不自然,建议改为“enjoy this process”。可以适当增加细节使回答更丰富。
Ví dụ: I prefer handwriting because it is a traditional way to express feelings, and I really enjoy the process of writing by hand.
How often do you keep diaries?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 回答内容完整,但句子结构稍显重复,建议使用连接词使表达更流畅,同时注意语法,如“write my diary”应为“write in my diary”。
Ví dụ: I usually write in my diary once a week to record what happened. This helps me preserve precious memories and appreciate the people who support me.
What other methods do you use to record your life?
Điểm: 75.0Gợi ý: 回答内容较好,但可以使用更丰富的词汇替换“hilarious things”如“funny moments”,并使用连接词使句子更自然。
Ví dụ: Sometimes, I write essays about funny or touching moments in my life to preserve these precious memories.
× I would write every single week.
✓ I write every single week.
这里使用一般现在时更合适,因为描述的是习惯性的动作。'would'通常用于表示过去的习惯或假设情况,而此处表达的是现在的习惯。建议使用一般现在时来表达经常发生的动作。
× I really enjoy in this process.
✓ I really enjoy this process.
动词'enjoy'后面不需要介词'in',直接跟宾语即可。错误地使用了介词'in',应去掉以符合英语习惯用法。
× I often write my diary once a week to record the things that happened in this week.
✓ I often write in my diary once a week to record the things that happened this week.
'write my diary'表达不准确,应该是'write in my diary'表示在日记中写东西。另外,'in this week'应简化为'this week',更符合英语表达习惯。
× This is the usual way how I preserve my precious memories and to thank the people who helped me in my daily life.
✓ This is the usual way I preserve my precious memories and thank the people who help me in my daily life.
'way how'结构冗余,应该简化为'way I'。另外,'helped me'应改为'help me',因为这里描述的是习惯性动作,使用一般现在时更合适。
× I will write argumentative essays to practice my English skills, or I record the precious moments that happen in my life to avoid forgetting them.
✓ I write argumentative essays to practice my English skills, or I record the precious moments that happen in my life to avoid forgetting them.
这里描述的是习惯性动作,应该使用一般现在时,而不是将来时'wilI write'。将来时不符合语境。
× Yes, I think the things that I write would sometimes change because life is not a straight Rd. that would go to the direct consequence and they sometimes have little branches that would go to a different consequence.
✓ Yes, I think the things that I write sometimes change because life is not a straight road that leads to a direct consequence; it sometimes has little branches that lead to different consequences.
句子结构混乱,时态和主谓一致有误。'would sometimes change'改为'sometimes change'更符合语境。'Rd.'应写为'road'。'would go to the direct consequence'改为'leads to a direct consequence',主谓一致且表达更准确。'they'指代不明,改为'it'指代'life'。整体句子需要调整以使表达清晰流畅。