Writing— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Overall the answer is natural and tells a clear story, but it is slightly long and repetitive. Improve by giving a concise topic sentence, one or two supporting details, and avoid repetition (e.g., "I wrote a lot" repeated). Add a brief comment about current situation or plans to write to complete the response.

Ví dụ: I used to write a lot when I was younger, mainly short novels and one longer book that my mother still keeps at home. However, as I started working my writing decreased, although I still enjoy it and try to write occasionally when I have free time.

Gợi ý: Good content and vivid description, but there are minor grammar and fluency issues ("an other" -> "another", "the world I'm current in" -> "the world I'm in"). Avoid hesitations and repetition ("you, you"). Use linking phrase to connect ideas and keep to two–three sentences.

Ví dụ: I prefer writing short novels because they let me escape into another world and fully control the characters. For example, I enjoy shaping their personalities and deciding how events unfold, which feels very creative and satisfying.

Gợi ý: Clear and well-structured answer with a topic sentence and supporting details. To improve, replace repeated "usually" with varied language and add a linking word to show sequence. You could also briefly mention an example of a change you made to illustrate the point.

Ví dụ: Generally I don't rewrite my work extensively; I make a draft and leave it for a few days, then review it. Often during that reread I notice improvements or new ideas and I make minor edits accordingly.

Gợi ý: Good, concise answer with clear reasons. To get higher marks, tighten the language (avoid filler "So") and use a linking word to connect reasons. Add a brief specific example (e.g., remembering vocabulary for exams) to show concreteness.

Ví dụ: I prefer handwriting because it’s a habit from my childhood and helps me remember information better; for instance, writing vocabulary by hand has helped me retain new words for exams.

Gợi ý: Clear and relevant answer with reasons and past habit. Remove the filler "So" and tighten phrasing. Consider adding a linking word (e.g., "however") when contrasting past and present, and one brief example of what you used to write to add specificity.

Ví dụ: I don't keep a diary now. However, when I was younger I wrote every day about school, family and friendships, but I stopped because I value privacy and worry someone might find my journal.

Gợi ý: Strong, natural answer with specific details and a clear sequence. To improve further, avoid repeating "usually" twice and combine sentences with a linking word. Mention a specific example of a clip or trip to add variety and vividness.

Ví dụ: I record my life by taking photos and short videos, especially while travelling; for example, I film highlights of a trip and later edit them into a short film to share with my family, which always makes me happy.

× But the older I got and the more I started to work, the less I have written, which is sad because I really like to write.

✓ But the older I got and the more I started to work, the less I wrote, which is sad because I really like to write.

The sentence mixes past narrative ('the older I got', 'I started to work') with present perfect ('I have written'). For a past time frame, use simple past 'wrote' for consistency. Use simple past when referring to completed habits or situations in the past.

× I like to write small novels because I like to get lost in an other world than the world I'm current in.

✓ I like to write small novels because I like to get lost in another world than the one I'm currently in.

Errors: 'an other' should be 'another' (single word). 'the world I'm current in' needs article and correct adverb form: use 'the one' to refer back to 'world' and 'currently' as adverb. This produces natural, grammatical phrasing.

× And it's funny because you, you are the maker of these persons or these characters in the book and you can twist and you can turn and you can do everything you want.

✓ And it's funny because you are the maker of these people or these characters in the book, and you can twist and turn them and do everything you want.

'Persons' is unusual in this context; 'people' or 'characters' is better. Repetition 'you, you' is unnecessary. Also verbs 'twist and turn' should have an object ('them') when referring to characters, and redundant 'you can' before each verb can be reduced for natural style.

× I usually do a small draft, then leave it for a couple of days, then go back and read again.

✓ I usually make a small draft, then leave it for a couple of days, then go back and read it again.

'Do a small draft' is non-idiomatic; 'make' or 'write' is correct. Also include the object 'it' after 'read' to clarify what is being read. Tense ('usually') is present habitual, so 'make' fits.

× It's also easier for me to remember things, especially for exams, when I write with the pen instead of the computer.

✓ It's also easier for me to remember things, especially for exams, when I write with a pen instead of a computer.

Use the indefinite article 'a' with 'pen' and 'computer' in this general statement. 'the pen'/'the computer' would imply specific devices, but the speaker means writing by pen rather than by computer in general.

× When I was younger I usually wrote every day about my school life, my family, my friendship.

✓ When I was younger I usually wrote every day about my school life, my family, and my friendships.

List items need parallel, natural noun forms: 'friendship' is uncountable and doesn't match 'my family'; 'friendships' (plural) or 'my friends' is more natural. Also include 'and' before last item for correct list punctuation.

× I don't want to have a book laying around that someone else might be reading.

✓ I don't want to have a book lying around that someone else might be reading.

Use 'lying' (correct participle) not 'laying' (which requires an object). 'Lying around' means left around casually; 'laying' would be incorrect intransitive usage.

× I usually enjoy taking photos and videos of my life, especially when I'm abroad.

✓ I usually enjoy taking photos and videos of my life, especially when I'm abroad.

This sentence is correct; present participle 'taking' appropriately follows 'enjoy'. No change needed.

× I usually film small parts of my journey and then I edit them when I come home to small films that I can share with my friends and family.

✓ I usually film small parts of my journey and then edit them when I come home into small films that I can share with my friends and family.

Minor stylistic change: remove redundant 'I' before 'edit' for smoother coordination. Change 'to small films' to 'into small films' to indicate transformation. Present participle usage is fine; this aligns actions in sequence.