Part 1
Giám khảo
What's the weather like where you live?
Thí sinh
I want to live in the place that snow very much. That's because I love snow very much. I love I'm into my I'm into snow activities such as skiing.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer cold or hot weather?
Thí sinh
I prefer cold weather to hot weather. That's because cold weather is more adjustable than cold weather, because if if I am cold, I only have to wear more clothes. Moreover, I like the cold weather.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer dry or wet weather?
Thí sinh
I prefer dry weather to wet weather. That's because I feel, umm, I'm not comfortable when the weather is wet, I feel more pleasant.
Giám khảo
Are you in the habit of checking the weather forecast? When and how often?
Thí sinh
I'm not much in the habit of checking the weather forecast, but I usually watch weather forecast twice a week. That's because I'm so busy at morning in the morning because I woke wake up.
Giám khảo
What do you think are the effects of climate change in recent years?
Thí sinh
I think that climate change affect in negative ways in recent years. For example, it affects in agriculture if they if the area don't rain so much, the crops don't grow well.
Giám khảo
Would you like to visit other cities that have different climates from where you live?
Thí sinh
Yes, I would like to. That's because in Kyoto, which which I live now, has very hot weather in summer, it is too hot to stay comfortable. So I want to leave another more cool place.
What's the weather like where you live?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: 回答が質問に直接答えていません。現在の住んでいる場所の天気について具体的に述べる必要があります。また、文法の誤りを修正し、自然な表現を使うことが重要です。
Ví dụ: The weather where I live is usually mild, with warm summers and cool winters. However, I enjoy snowy places because I like skiing and other snow activities.
Do you prefer cold or hot weather?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 理由の説明が少し混乱しています。同じ単語の繰り返しを避け、より明確で論理的な理由を述べると良いでしょう。
Ví dụ: I prefer cold weather to hot weather because it's easier to stay warm by wearing extra clothes, whereas hot weather can be uncomfortable and harder to cool down.
Do you prefer dry or wet weather?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 理由が曖昧で、表現も不自然です。具体的な理由を述べ、文を簡潔にまとめることが必要です。
Ví dụ: I prefer dry weather because I feel more comfortable and it's easier to go outside without worrying about rain.
Are you in the habit of checking the weather forecast? When and how often?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: 文法の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。習慣や理由を明確に述べ、文を整理しましょう。
Ví dụ: I don't check the weather forecast every day, but I usually watch it twice a week because I am busy in the mornings after I wake up.
What do you think are the effects of climate change in recent years?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 文法の誤りを直し、より具体的で自然な表現を使いましょう。例も明確に述べると良いです。
Ví dụ: I think climate change has had negative effects recently. For example, reduced rainfall in some areas has caused crops to grow poorly, which affects agriculture.
Would you like to visit other cities that have different climates from where you live?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 繰り返しや文法の誤りを避け、より自然で流暢な表現を心がけましょう。理由を簡潔に述べることが大切です。
Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to visit other cities with different climates. For example, Kyoto is very hot in summer, so I want to experience cooler places to feel more comfortable.
× I love I'm into my I'm into snow activities such as skiing.
✓ I love snow activities such as skiing.
The original sentence contains redundant and incorrect use of 'I'm into my I'm into'. The correct form is to say 'I love snow activities such as skiing.' which properly uses the verb 'love' followed by a noun phrase.
× That's because cold weather is more adjustable than cold weather, because if if I am cold, I only have to wear more clothes.
✓ That's because cold weather is more comfortable than hot weather, because if I am cold, I only have to wear more clothes.
The sentence incorrectly compares 'cold weather' to 'cold weather' which is illogical. It should compare 'cold weather' to 'hot weather'. Also, 'adjustable' is not appropriate here; 'comfortable' fits better to express preference.
× I'm not much in the habit of checking the weather forecast, but I usually watch weather forecast twice a week.
✓ I'm not much in the habit of checking the weather forecast, but I usually watch the weather forecast twice a week.
The phrase 'watch weather forecast' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'weather forecast'. The correct phrase is 'watch the weather forecast'.
× That's because I'm so busy at morning in the morning because I woke wake up.
✓ That's because I'm so busy in the morning because I wake up early.
The phrase 'at morning in the morning' is redundant and incorrect; 'in the morning' is correct. Also, 'woke wake up' is incorrect; 'wake up' is the present tense appropriate here to describe habitual action.
× I think that climate change affect in negative ways in recent years.
✓ I think that climate change affects things negatively in recent years.
The verb 'affect' should be in the third person singular present tense 'affects' to agree with the singular subject 'climate change'. Also, 'affect in negative ways' is awkward; 'affects things negatively' is clearer.
× For example, it affects in agriculture if they if the area don't rain so much, the crops don't grow well.
✓ For example, it affects agriculture; if the area doesn't get much rain, the crops don't grow well.
The phrase 'affects in agriculture' is incorrect; it should be 'affects agriculture'. Also, 'if they if the area don't rain so much' is ungrammatical; it should be 'if the area doesn't get much rain'.
× Yes, I would like to. That's because in Kyoto, which which I live now, has very hot weather in summer, it is too hot to stay comfortable.
✓ Yes, I would like to. That's because Kyoto, where I live now, has very hot weather in summer; it is too hot to stay comfortable.
The phrase 'in Kyoto, which which I live now' is awkward and contains repetition. 'Kyoto, where I live now,' is the correct relative clause. Also, the sentence structure is improved by separating clauses properly.
× So I want to leave another more cool place.
✓ So I want to live in another cooler place.
The phrase 'another more cool place' is incorrect; the comparative form 'cooler' should be used instead of 'more cool'. Also, 'leave' is incorrect here; 'live in' fits the context better.