Weather— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答は主題を示していますが、言葉の繰り返しやフィラー（uh）が多く、文法や語順の誤りがあります。具体例や短い追加情報を1〜2文で整理して述べ、フィラーを減らし、正しい形容詞や語句（e.g. “extremely worse”ではなく“becoming hotter and more humid”）を使ってください。例えば、簡潔な主題文→具体的な季節の特徴→最近の変化という順で述べると自然です。

Ví dụ: I live in Japan, which has four distinct seasons. Summers are usually hot and very humid, while winters are cool. Recently, summers have been becoming hotter and more humid due to climate change, which makes heatwaves more common.

Gợi ý: 主張は明確ですが、語彙と文法の誤り（a hot weather → hot weather、I'm a bit attend → unclear）と冗長さがあります。理由を1つか2つ、論理的に示し、具体的な例（服装や活動など）を付け加えてください。また、不要な繰り返しとフィラーを避けてください。

Ví dụ: I prefer cold weather because I sweat easily in hot weather. In cold temperatures I can stay comfortable by wearing layers, and I find it easier to sleep and exercise.

Gợi ý: 主張と理由はあるものの、語法（a dry weather→dry weather）、曖昧な表現（drivers?）や混乱した文があります。アレルギーや肌のトラブルといった具体的な理由を明確に述べ、一貫した語彙を使ってください。例や対処法（保湿や日焼け止め）を加えると説得力が増します。

Ví dụ: I prefer dry weather because humid or wet conditions worsen my skin allergies. For example, high humidity can cause rashes, so I feel better in dry weather and use moisturizers to protect my skin.

Gợi ý: 内容は伝わりますが、文法（my smartphone give→gives）、冗長な表現とフィラーが目立ちます。頻度（毎日、朝など）や通知の具体的な方法を明確に述べると良いです。構造は短い主題文＋頻度の説明＋理由の順にまとめましょう。

Ví dụ: Yes. I usually check the weather on my smartphone because it sends me a daily morning notification. I rarely watch TV weather reports since the phone is more convenient and provides hourly updates.

Gợi ý: 伝えたい意図（気候変動の影響）自体は重要ですが、多くの語彙や文法ミスで意味が分かりにくくなっています（hotel? H7?）。まず簡潔に主張を述べ、具体的な影響（猛暑、台風の増加、健康被害など）を2つ挙げて、それらがもたらす結果を説明してください。専門用語は正しく使い、不明瞭な語は避けましょう。

Ví dụ: I think climate change has made summers hotter and has increased the frequency and intensity of typhoons in Japan. These changes lead to more heatstroke cases and greater damage to homes and infrastructure, so I believe we must reduce emissions and improve disaster preparedness.

Gợi ý: 意欲は示せていますが、文法や語順の誤り（a cool countries→cool countries、AS hemispheres→southern hemisphere）と冗長なフィラーがあります。どの国に行きたいか、その気候で何をしたいか（理由）を具体的に述べてください。短く明確な構成で答えると自然に聞こえます。

Ví dụ: Yes. I would like to visit cooler countries like Canada or New Zealand. I enjoy skiing and hiking in mild summers, so experiencing different climates would be refreshing and fun.

× there is a, there are Four Seasons in Japan

✓ there are four seasons in Japan

Use the plural form 'seasons' with 'there are'. Also 'four' is lowercase. Japanese: 'there is'と'there are'の使い分け。複数名詞には'there are'を使う必要がある。 Use 'there are' for plural nouns and lowercase 'four'.

× summer is a notoriously humid and, uh, hot.

✓ summer is notoriously humid and hot

Do not use the article 'a' before adjectives when describing a season. 'Notoriously humid and hot' is correct. Japanese: 季節を形容するときは不定冠詞'a'を使わない。'notoriously humid and hot'とする。

× due to the climate change there, a hot summer is, uh, exponentially worsened

✓ due to climate change there, summers have become much worse

Use present perfect/present simple to describe ongoing change. 'Climate change' usually without 'the'. 'Summers have become much worse' sounds natural. Japanese: 継続する変化には現在完了や現在形を使うべき。'climate change'は通常冠詞なしで、'summers have become much worse'が自然。

× I prefer cold weather because a hot weather will make me sweaty

✓ I prefer cold weather because hot weather makes me sweaty

Do not use 'a' before uncountable 'hot weather'. Use simple present for general truth: 'makes'. Japanese: 'weather'は不可算名詞で冠詞'a'を付けない。一般的事実には現在形を使い、'makes'が適切。

× I'm a bit attend. I have a bit, uh, tendency to uh, sweet much so I prefer a cold weather, uh, because cold weather is avoidable by wearing a lot.

✓ I'm a bit prone to sweating, so I prefer cold weather because it's easier to avoid sweating by wearing more clothes

Incorrect word choices: 'attend' and 'sweet' are wrong. Use 'prone to sweating'. 'a cold weather' incorrect article and 'avoid by wearing a lot' unclear; use 'easier to avoid sweating by wearing more clothes'. Japanese: 語彙の誤りがある。'prone to sweating'（汗をかきやすい）を使い、'weather'に冠詞は不要。'wearing more clothes'で意味が明確になる。

× I prefer a dry weather, uh, because wet weather uh, make some damage on my uh, skins.

✓ I prefer dry weather because wet weather can damage my skin

No article before 'dry weather'. Use singular 'skin' not 'skins'. Use 'can damage' or 'damages'. Japanese: 'weather'に冠詞不要、'skin'は通常不可算で単数形を使う。述語も'can damage'や'damages'が自然。

× drivers are also uh, damaged uh, skin as well.

✓ drivers' skin can also be affected

Original is ungrammatical. Use possessive 'drivers' skin' and 'be affected' for passive meaning. Japanese: 所有格を使い、'skin'が影響を受けることを表す場合は'be affected'などを使う。

× But uh, I have a bit allergies and uh, uh, hot weather is not suitable for my skin.

✓ But I have some allergies, and hot weather is not good for my skin

Use 'some allergies' not 'a bit allergies'. 'Not suitable' is okay but 'not good' is more natural here. Japanese: 'some allergies'を使い、'a bit'は不可算名詞には使えない。表現を自然にするため'not good for my skin'が良い。

× typically my smartphone give a notification about the weather, so I automatically automatically check the weather

✓ typically my smartphone gives a notification about the weather, so I automatically check it

Subject-verb agreement: 'smartphone' (singular) requires 'gives'. Remove duplicate 'automatically' and use pronoun 'it' to avoid repetition. Japanese: 三人称単数には動詞に's'が必要。重複語を削除し代名詞で繰り返しを避ける。

× I bet uh, I don't check the uh, TV or weather program Uh, this smartphone is quite a convenient for me to, uh, remember.

✓ I don't usually watch weather programs on TV; this smartphone is quite convenient for me as a reminder

'I bet' is inappropriate. 'watch weather programs' clearer. 'a convenient' incorrect article; use 'convenient' and 'as a reminder' for purpose. Japanese: 不適切な語彙や冠詞の誤りを修正。'convenient'は可算形でないため冠詞不要。目的語表現で'as a reminder'を使う。

× in Japan, climate change, uh, make the summer, uh, hotel and hotels and there are many, uh, H7 related to this, uh, in Japan recently.

✓ in Japan, climate change is making summers hotter, and there have been many heat-related incidents recently

Use progressive 'is making' or present perfect 'have been' for recent occurrences. 'Hotter' is comparative. 'heat-related incidents' clarifies 'H7'. Japanese: 継続的な変化には'be making'を使い、最近の出来事には現在完了を使う。また'imprecise abbreviations'を明確にする必要がある。

× So, uh, if the climate change aware escalate, uh, which rate you are more death.

✓ So, if climate change continues to escalate, the death rate could increase

Original is ungrammatical. Use 'continues to escalate' and 'death rate could increase' to convey meaning. Japanese: 文の構造が不明確なので、継続を表す表現と死亡率上昇を示す表現に直す。

× So I, I think we have to do something.

✓ So I think we have to do something about it

Add 'about it' to specify the issue. Remove duplicate 'I'. Japanese: 'about it'で対象を明確化し、重複は不要。

× Yes, uh, in Japan, summer and winter, uh, is a big house and in particular in the several season, I feel like going to a cool countries like a Canada or uh, in a AS hemispheres countries.

✓ Yes. In Japan, summers and winters are extreme, and in some seasons I feel like going to cool countries like Canada or those in the Southern Hemisphere

Many errors: use plural 'summers and winters', 'are extreme' for general statement, 'a cool countries' wrong article/plural, 'Canada' without 'a', 'Southern Hemisphere' is correct term. Japanese: 名詞の複数形、冠詞の誤り、地理用語の正しい表現（Southern Hemisphere）を修正。

× So, uh, it is a a great heaven for me in.

✓ So it's a great place for me

'a great heaven for me in' is ungrammatical and awkward. Use 'a great place for me' or 'paradise' without trailing preposition. Japanese: 不自然な語順と不要な前置詞を修正。自然な英語は'a great place for me'など。