Snacks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Start with a clear topic sentence and tighten phrasing to sound more natural. Use one linking phrase to add a brief specific detail (e.g., typical time or reason) and avoid redundancy like “evening or afternoon” together. Keep answer to 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: I usually have a snack in the late afternoon, around 4–5 pm, when I get hungry between meals. For example, I often eat a small yogurt or a handful of nuts so I can stay focused until dinner.

Gợi ý: Make the contrast clearer and split into two sentences. Use linking words (however, so) and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., ‘nutritious’, ‘plant-based’). Avoid long run-on sentences; give one concrete example of a healthy snack.

Ví dụ: I know many snacks are unhealthy; however, I try to choose nutritious options. For example, I often eat dried fruits or roasted chickpeas because they are plant-based and satisfy my craving without too much sugar.

Gợi ý: Begin with a direct topic sentence and then give one or two specific memories. Use linking words (for example, sometimes) and avoid repeating phrases like “used to” too many times. Keep it concise and vivid.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often snacked when I was a child. For example, I’d bring a sandwich to school and sometimes sneak biscuits after class with my friends, which was a fun memory.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and give 1–2 specific snack examples and a brief reason why you like them. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., ‘vegetable-based snacks’, ‘trail mix’). Keep it to two sentences.

Ví dụ: I prefer nutritious snacks, such as mixed nuts and dried fruit or vegetable sticks with hummus. I like them because they are filling and provide energy without being too sugary.

× I usually eat snacks in the evening or afternoon when I feel hungry but I'm not ready to have my lunch or dinner.

✓ I usually eat snacks in the afternoon or evening when I feel hungry but am not ready to have lunch or dinner.

Word order of 'afternoon or evening' is stylistic; main issue is unnecessary 'my' before lunch and dinner and contraction with 'I am' can be reduced to 'am' after 'but'. Use 'have lunch' and 'have dinner' without possessive 'my' in general statements. Also place common time order 'afternoon or evening' and remove redundant 'I'. Suggestion: Say 'I usually eat snacks in the afternoon or evening when I feel hungry but am not ready to have lunch or dinner.'

× Even though I think snacks are not healthy but I usually try to eat healthy snacks like dry fruits or any kind of vegetarian things that is good for your health so that I can stay healthy and still enjoy my snacks.

✓ Although I think snacks are not healthy, I usually try to eat healthy ones like dried fruits or vegetarian foods that are good for health so that I can stay healthy and still enjoy my snacks.

Using both 'Even though' and 'but' together is redundant; choose one (use 'Although' or 'Even though' without 'but'). 'Dry fruits' is better as 'dried fruits'. 'Any kind of vegetarian things' is vague and uncountable; use 'vegetarian foods'. Subject-verb agreement: 'that is good' should be 'that are good' to match plural 'foods'. Also avoid 'your health' when referring to oneself; use 'health' or 'my health'. Suggestion: Use a single subordinate conjunction and ensure noun-verb agreement and clearer noun choices.

× Yes, I always used to have snacks when I was young as I used to go to school and have snacks during my lunch time or sometimes sneak and eat after school without telling my parents and it was really a good memory.

✓ Yes, I always used to have snacks when I was young; I used to go to school and have snacks during lunchtime or sometimes sneak snacks after school without telling my parents, and it was a really good memory.

Main issues: 'lunch time' should be one word 'lunchtime'. Parallel structure: 'sneak and eat after school' is awkward; use 'sneak snacks after school'. Add a semicolon or break into shorter sentences for clarity. 'It was really a good memory' is acceptable but 'a' before 'really' helps tone. Keep past tense 'used to' consistently. Suggestion: Keep consistent past tense forms and use clear noun phrases like 'snack(s)' and 'lunchtime'.

× I usually like to eat the snacks that are nutritious for our health, like dry fruits or the food that has a vegetable in it.

✓ I usually like to eat snacks that are nutritious for my health, such as dried fruits or foods that contain vegetables.

Pronoun mismatch: 'our health' is inappropriate when speaking about personal preferences; use 'my health'. 'The snacks' and 'the food that has a vegetable in it' are wordy; use 'snacks' and 'foods that contain vegetables'. 'Dry fruits' -> 'dried fruits'. Ensure plural agreement 'foods that contain vegetables'. Suggestion: Use the correct possessive pronoun and clearer, concise noun phrases.