Snacks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 답변을 더 자연스럽고 문법적으로 정확하게 고치세요. 먼저 주제 문장으로 간단히 답하고, 이유를 두세 개의 구체적이고 간결한 세부사항으로 연결사(for example, because, so)를 사용해 설명하세요. 중복 표현(예: crispy and the crispy sound)과 문법 오류(예: Snacks makes -> Snacks make)를 수정하세요.

Ví dụ: I usually eat snacks when I'm stressed because chewing helps me relax. For example, crunchy snacks soothe me because of their texture and the sound they make. So I often reach for something crispy to calm down.

Gợi ý: 의견을 분명한 주제로 시작하고, 이유를 구체적으로 제시하세요. 현재 답변은 문법 오류와 모호한 표현이 많습니다. 'many snacks often' 같은 표현 대신 'many snacks contain a lot of sugar and salt'처럼 구체적으로 말하고, 연결사(because, therefore)를 사용해 결과를 설명하세요.

Ví dụ: I don't think most snacks are healthy because many of them contain high amounts of sugar and salt. Because of this, eating them frequently can increase the risk of weight gain and other health problems.

Gợi ý: 과거에 관한 질문이므로 과거 시제를 정확히 사용하세요. 문장을 간결하게 하고 불필요한 반복을 피하세요. 이유를 하나나두 개의 간단한 세부사항으로 덧붙이되 연결사(before, so, because)를 사용하세요.

Ví dụ: No, I didn't eat many snacks when I was young because my parents discouraged them. So even now I tend not to eat snacks very often.

Gợi ý: 답변 시작에서 바로 취향을 밝히고, 좋아하는 종류를 구체적으로 나열하세요. 중복과 어색한 표현을 제거하고, 각 항목에 짧은 이유(예: texture, taste)를 추가하세요. 음료와 디저트를 구분해서 말하면 더 명확합니다.

Ví dụ: I prefer crunchy snacks like Pringles because I enjoy the texture and the sound they make. I also like sweet treats such as cookies and s'mores, and sometimes I enjoy sweet teas as a comforting drink.

× Snacks makes me feel better by chewing them is good.

✓ Chewing snacks makes me feel better.

The original sentence mixes two clauses incorrectly and uses a noun phrase incorrectly. Use the gerund 'Chewing' as the subject followed by the singular verb 'makes' to express the action that causes the feeling. Suggestion: Start with the gerund phrase 'Chewing snacks' and follow with the correct subject-verb agreement and object.

× It's crispy and the crispy sound and sense make me feel good.

✓ They're crispy, and the crispy sound and texture make me feel good.

The phrase 'It's crispy' is unclear because the subject 'snacks' is plural. Change to 'They're crispy' for agreement. 'Sense' is vague; use 'texture' to describe tactile quality. Also join ideas with a comma and conjunction for clarity. Suggestion: Match subject number and choose a precise noun ('texture') instead of 'sense'.

× Now many snacks often.

✓ There are many snacks available now.

The original lacks a verb and clear structure. Use the existential 'There are' to state existence and 'available now' to indicate current prevalence. Suggestion: Use 'There are' + plural noun to state that many items exist.

× Had many sugar salt and they're not there is not good for human health.

✓ They contain a lot of sugar and salt, and that is not good for human health.

The original sentence omits a subject and uses incorrect word order. Use 'They contain' to indicate ingredients, 'a lot of' for quantity, and 'that is not good' to refer back to the previous clause. Suggestion: Use a clear subject ('They') and proper connectors ('and') to join clauses.

× No, my parents didn't like eat snacks for me and I didn't eat much snacks when I am when I was young.

✓ No, my parents didn't like me to eat snacks, and I didn't eat many snacks when I was young.

Use the past tense consistently: 'didn't like me to eat' is the correct causative structure. 'Much' should be 'many' with countable 'snacks'. Remove mixed tense 'when I am when I was young' and keep 'when I was young.' Suggestion: Use 'didn't like me to + verb' and match quantifiers to countable nouns.

× So for recently I didn't eat so much snacks.

✓ So recently I haven't been eating many snacks.

The sentence mixes past tense with 'recently.' Use the present perfect continuous ('haven't been eating') to describe a recent habit. Use 'many' with countable 'snacks.' Suggestion: Use present perfect for recent changes and correct quantifier for plural nouns.

× Like I say right before, I like crispy snacks like Pringles and they their sounds make me comfortable and I like cookies and s'mores or they're sweet teas make me feel good.

✓ As I said before, I like crispy snacks like Pringles because their sound makes me comfortable; I also like cookies and s'mores, and sweet treats make me feel good.

The original is repetitive and contains pronoun errors ('they their') and unclear phrasing ('or they're sweet teas'). Use 'As I said before' for referencing, 'their sound' for correct pronoun use, and 'sweet treats' instead of 'sweet teas'. Use punctuation to separate ideas. Suggestion: Avoid redundant words, use correct possessive pronouns ('their'), and choose accurate nouns ('treats' instead of 'teas' if referring to sweets).