Part 1
Giám khảo
When do you usually eat snacks now?
Thí sinh
I usually eat snacks when I watching ATV and my favorite cereals and especially when I watch this one with my family, but not rarely. Especially I prefer to eat when I watching.
Giám khảo
Do you think it is healthy for you to eat snacks?
Thí sinh
I'm not sure but I think he is because I eat this one every day and it's so awful. Umm.
Giám khảo
Did you often eat snacks when you were young?
Thí sinh
No because my parents always said to me that it was very awful and there are a lot of sugar and but also I enjoy it as a quick treat and I know I should only have it occasionally because it isn't nutritious.
Giám khảo
What snacks do you like to eat?
Thí sinh
I enjoy to eat lollipops and chips, uh, especially when I umm, go for a walk with my best friend. I umm, realize it is one.
When do you usually eat snacks now?
Điểm: 42.0Gợi ý: Be clear, grammatical and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence stating when you snack, then add one specific context and frequency using correct verb forms and linking words. Avoid repetition. For example, use past/present continuous correctly and say how often (e.g., sometimes, often).
Ví dụ: I usually snack in the evenings while watching TV with my family. For instance, we often have popcorn or cereal during weekend movie nights, so I don’t snack every day, just a few times a week.
Do you think it is healthy for you to eat snacks?
Điểm: 30.0Gợi ý: Answer directly and give a clear opinion with reasons. Use correct pronouns and verbs, avoid vague words like 'this one' and filler words. Provide one or two specific reasons and a conclusion. Keep it to 1–3 sentences.
Ví dụ: I don't think snacking is healthy, especially if the snacks are sugary. Because I eat them every day, they can cause weight gain and tooth problems, so I try to choose healthier options like fruit instead.
Did you often eat snacks when you were young?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: Structure your answer: give a clear topic sentence about past habit, then explain reasons and add a brief reflection. Use past tense consistently for past habits (e.g., 'didn't eat' or 'rarely ate') and correct article/noun usage. Use linking words (because, but, however).
Ví dụ: No, I rarely ate snacks when I was young because my parents warned me they contained a lot of sugar. However, I did enjoy the occasional treat as a quick snack, and I knew it wasn't very nutritious, so I only had it sometimes.
What snacks do you like to eat?
Điểm: 45.0Gợi ý: Answer directly with a topic sentence listing your favourite snacks, then give a specific context and a brief reason. Use correct verb patterns (enjoy + -ing) and avoid fillers. Keep to 2–3 sentences and include a linking word (for example, when, because).
Ví dụ: I enjoy eating lollipops and chips. For example, I often have them when I go for a walk with my best friend because they are easy to carry and fun to share.
× I usually eat snacks when I watching ATV and my favorite cereals and especially when I watch this one with my family, but not rarely.
✓ I usually eat snacks when I am watching ATV and my favorite series, especially when I watch it with my family, but not often.
The verb 'watch' needs the progressive form 'am watching' with 'I' when describing an action in progress (Grammar problem type 8). 'Watching' alone is incorrect without the auxiliary 'am'. 'Cereals' was likely the wrong word for TV shows, so 'series' is more appropriate. 'Not rarely' is unnatural; use 'not often' to convey the intended frequency.
× Especially I prefer to eat when I watching.
✓ Especially I prefer to eat when I am watching.
The progressive construction requires the auxiliary 'am' before the present participle 'watching' (type 8). Add 'am' to form 'I am watching.' Also consider placing 'especially' later: 'I prefer to eat when I am watching.'
× I'm not sure but I think he is because I eat this one every day and it's so awful.
✓ I'm not sure but I think it is because I eat this every day and it's so awful.
The pronoun 'he' incorrectly refers to an inanimate snack; use 'it' (type 12). 'This one' is awkward for food; 'this' or the snack's name is better. Maintain subject consistency and clarity.
× No because my parents always said to me that it was very awful and there are a lot of sugar and but also I enjoy it as a quick treat and I know I should only have it occasionally because it isn't nutritious.
✓ No, because my parents always told me that it was very bad and that it had a lot of sugar, but I also enjoyed it as a quick treat and I know I should only have it occasionally because it isn't nutritious.
Multiple issues: 'said to me' is better as 'told me' (idiomatic). 'Very awful' is awkward; use 'very bad.' 'There are a lot of sugar' is wrong for count/mass and structure: use 'it had a lot of sugar' or 'there is a lot of sugar' (type 3 and 11). Also verb tense consistency: when referring to childhood, use past tense 'enjoyed' (type 5). Clarify conjunction usage by replacing 'and but' with 'but'. Overall corrected for tense, preposition/structure, and cohesion.
× I enjoy to eat lollipops and chips, uh, especially when I umm, go for a walk with my best friend.
✓ I enjoy eating lollipops and chips, especially when I go for a walk with my best friend.
After 'enjoy', use the gerund 'eating' rather than the infinitive 'to eat' (type 8). Removing filler words improves fluency. The rest of the sentence is fine in present tense describing a habitual action (type 6).
× I umm, realize it is one.
✓ I realize that it is one of my favorite snacks.
The original sentence is unclear and incomplete (type 26). 'Realize it is one' lacks an object and meaning; specify what 'one' refers to. Adding 'that it is one of my favorite snacks' clarifies intent and completes the thought.