Part 1
Giám khảo
Are you a patient person?
Thí sinh
I would say so. I consider myself a quite patient person. I am not particularly good at anything, though I am confident in waiting and preserving for a long time. I'm also not agile, but I have a habit of staying calm and thinking twice when necessary.
Giám khảo
What is it that makes you feel impatient?
Thí sinh
I get impatient when things are slower than I expected. For example, I can understand it when the Wi-Fi connection suddenly becomes bad and the Internet speeds slow down. When that happens, I get annoyed easily and hit the refresh button multiple times.
Giám khảo
How do you feel when you have to do something for a long time?
Thí sinh
It may be frustrating at first, but once I think it is reasonable, I give up and approach the task. If I have to do something anyway, I think it is better for my mentor and the physical health to do it in a relaxed manner rather than being stressed while doing it. In other words, I try to enjoy my work.
Giám khảo
Does your job require you to be patient?
Thí sinh
Yes, of course. Since my job involves collaborating with various people, I have to listen carefully and stay calm. Also, sometimes a small mistake can lead to an emergency accident, so it requires quick judgment and agile action at the same time.
Giám khảo
Are you more patient now than when you were a child?
Thí sinh
I think I was more patient when I was young. As I got older, I think I tended to show my personality more easily rather than calmly because I was able to estimate the amount of work and responsibility looking bad. I think I became impatient after realizing that time was limited and passed very quickly.
Are you a patient person?
Điểm: 75.0Gợi ý: 답변이 다소 중복되고 문장이 길어 자연스럽지 못한 부분이 있습니다. 좀 더 간결하고 명확하게 자신의 인내심에 대해 직접적으로 답변하고, 구체적인 예시를 추가하는 것이 좋습니다.
Ví dụ: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I can stay calm and think carefully before acting. For instance, when faced with a difficult problem, I take my time to find the best solution rather than rushing.
What is it that makes you feel impatient?
Điểm: 80.0Gợi ý: 답변이 구체적이고 자연스럽지만, 연결어 사용이 부족해 문장 간 흐름이 다소 단절됩니다. 연결어를 사용해 문장들을 더 논리적으로 연결하는 연습이 필요합니다.
Ví dụ: I get impatient when things are slower than I expect. For example, when the Wi-Fi connection suddenly becomes bad and the internet slows down, I get annoyed and often hit the refresh button multiple times.
How do you feel when you have to do something for a long time?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 답변이 다소 모호하고 문장 구조가 복잡하여 이해하기 어렵습니다. 명확한 주제문과 구체적인 이유 또는 예시를 포함해 간결하게 답변하는 연습이 필요합니다.
Ví dụ: At first, I may feel frustrated when doing something for a long time. However, I try to stay relaxed and enjoy the work because being stressed can harm my health and reduce my efficiency.
Does your job require you to be patient?
Điểm: 85.0Gợi ý: 답변이 명확하고 구체적이며 자연스럽지만, 연결어를 추가하여 문장 간 논리적 흐름을 강화하면 더 좋습니다.
Ví dụ: Yes, my job requires patience because I collaborate with many people, so I need to listen carefully and stay calm. Moreover, since small mistakes can cause emergencies, I must also act quickly and carefully.
Are you more patient now than when you were a child?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 답변이 다소 혼란스럽고 문법적 오류가 있어 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 간결하고 명확한 문장으로 자신의 생각을 직접적으로 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.
Ví dụ: I was more patient when I was a child. However, as I grew older and faced more responsibilities, I became less patient because I realized time is limited and passes quickly.
× I consider myself a quite patient person.
✓ I consider myself quite a patient person.
In English, the correct order is 'quite a' before a singular countable noun. 'Quite a patient person' is the proper phrase, not 'a quite patient person'. 한국어 설명: 영어에서 'quite a'는 단수 가산명사 앞에 와야 하므로 'a quite patient person'은 잘못된 표현입니다. 올바른 표현은 'quite a patient person'입니다.
× I am confident in waiting and preserving for a long time.
✓ I am confident in waiting and persevering for a long time.
The verb 'preserving' means to keep something intact, but the intended meaning is likely 'persevering', which means to persist. Also, 'confident in' is correct usage here. 한국어 설명: 'preserving'은 '보존하다'라는 뜻이고, 여기서는 'persevering'(인내하다)가 맞는 단어입니다. 따라서 단어 선택 오류입니다.
× I have a habit of staying calm and thinking twice when necessary.
✓ I have a habit of staying calm and thinking twice when necessary.
No correction needed; sentence is grammatically correct. 한국어 설명: 문법적으로 올바른 문장입니다.
× I get impatient when things are slower than I expected.
✓ I get impatient when things are slower than I expect.
Since the sentence is in present tense describing a general situation, 'expect' (present tense) is more appropriate than 'expected' (past tense). 한국어 설명: 일반적인 상황을 말할 때는 현재 시제를 사용해야 하므로 'expected' 대신 'expect'가 맞습니다.
× I can understand it when the Wi-Fi connection suddenly becomes bad and the Internet speeds slow down.
✓ I can understand it when the Wi-Fi connection suddenly becomes bad and the Internet speed slows down.
'Internet speed' is usually singular when referring to the overall speed. Also, subject-verb agreement requires 'speed slows' not 'speeds slow'. 한국어 설명: 'Internet speed'는 보통 단수로 쓰이며, 주어-동사 일치에 따라 'speed slows'가 맞습니다.
× When that happens, I get annoyed easily and hit the refresh button multiple times.
✓ When that happens, I get annoyed easily and hit the refresh button multiple times.
No correction needed; sentence is grammatically correct. 한국어 설명: 문법적으로 올바른 문장입니다.
× It may be frustrating at first, but once I think it is reasonable, I give up and approach the task.
✓ It may be frustrating at first, but once I think it is reasonable, I give up and approach the task.
No correction needed; sentence is grammatically correct. 한국어 설명: 문법적으로 올바른 문장입니다.
× If I have to do something anyway, I think it is better for my mentor and the physical health to do it in a relaxed manner rather than being stressed while doing it.
✓ If I have to do something anyway, I think it is better for my mental and physical health to do it in a relaxed manner rather than being stressed while doing it.
'Mentor' is a person, but the intended meaning is likely 'mental' health. This is a word choice error. 한국어 설명: 'mentor'(멘토) 대신 'mental'(정신적인)이 맞는 단어입니다. 단어 선택 오류입니다.
× Since my job involves collaborating with various people, I have to listen carefully and stay calm.
✓ Since my job involves collaborating with various people, I have to listen carefully and stay calm.
No correction needed; sentence is grammatically correct. 한국어 설명: 문법적으로 올바른 문장입니다.
× Also, sometimes a small mistake can lead to an emergency accident, so it requires quick judgment and agile action at the same time.
✓ Also, sometimes a small mistake can lead to an emergency, so it requires quick judgment and agile action at the same time.
The phrase 'emergency accident' is redundant; 'emergency' alone is sufficient and more natural. 한국어 설명: 'emergency accident'는 중복 표현이며, 'emergency'만 사용하는 것이 자연스럽습니다.
× I think I was more patient when I was young.
✓ I think I was more patient when I was young.
No correction needed; sentence is grammatically correct. 한국어 설명: 문법적으로 올바른 문장입니다.
× As I got older, I think I tended to show my personality more easily rather than calmly because I was able to estimate the amount of work and responsibility looking bad.
✓ As I got older, I think I tended to show my personality more easily rather than calmly because I was able to estimate the amount of work and responsibility looking bad.
The phrase 'looking bad' is unclear and seems misplaced. It may be a translation error or incomplete thought. Suggest rephrasing for clarity. 한국어 설명: 'looking bad'라는 표현이 문맥상 부적절하거나 불명확하여 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 명확한 표현으로 수정이 필요합니다.
× I think I became impatient after realizing that time was limited and passed very quickly.
✓ I think I became impatient after realizing that time is limited and passes very quickly.
When expressing general truths, present tense is preferred ('is limited' and 'passes') rather than past tense. 한국어 설명: 일반적인 사실을 표현할 때는 현재 시제를 사용해야 하므로 'was limited' 대신 'is limited', 'passed' 대신 'passes'가 맞습니다.